05-26-2020, 04:51 PM | #1 |
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Round 1: Adverse Vs. evaD - evaD Wins
8-Man Show N' Prove Mini Tourney Rules Due Dates: • Verses are due Saturday by 11:59 PM PST. • Voting ends MONDAY ideally • Battles that lack votes may close later. • One sided battles may get closed early. • Extensions are 24 hours, anything longer is a DQ and/or Double DQ • To avoid issues, you are encouraged to PM me your verse in advance Line Limit: • Min. = 10 lines • Max. = 20 lines • The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both. Voting: • I do not have time to count links, and I know nobody wants to post them because it’s tedious. Do your part and vote or I’m making house calls. General Rules: • 1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts. • 2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made. • Feeding = DQ. • Recycling = DQ. • Biting = DQ. • No freeposting, swaying or bitching. • Unless a picture battle is agreed upon, linking to your opponent's picture or posting it means you will disqualified. • A check in isn't mandatory, but it is encouraged. • If your opponent doesn't check in, you still have to post a verse. • Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in. • If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post must match the 1st person's line amount, and can’t post more lines @Adverse @evaD |
05-26-2020, 07:00 PM | #2 |
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Alrighhhht. Let’s get it 10-12?
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05-30-2020, 02:56 AM | #3 |
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Those predictions? Just fiction. But I’m glad I read it
Cus if Adverse the Heavy favourite ima Body Weight like Calisthenics The disses he spit are all misses and shit. Guess ya boy is senile Cus his Execution’s bout as smooth as how they did Delacroix in Green Mile Knifestyles deployed like they’re a lifestyle choice. He bout to cop a hurtin When I cut The Idiot with Bowie like im Iggy Pop in Berlin Yeah I’m Dave, don’t get it backwards - I ain’t-Cha Pal but it’s likely That if you’re Banking on winning this when Azealia fate you gon cry cheat Not a Lot to Offer and your Numbers Up, ain’t that some shit So I’m thinking furniture auction - WinChester Draws and the Hammer Clicks If that tough guy act is doctored now you committing malpractice You couldn’t have seen AdverseCity less if you were repping Atlantis Born better off means you were never raw When heads were ringing alarms with Tenor Saw Ad was feelin’ alarmed bout Tennis Sores Attending Wimbledon’s the only time he could get Centre Court, he’s bound to lose When I sneak up on Ad Vantage Point and Tie em up on my way to Round Deuce Last edited by evaD; 05-30-2020 at 06:58 AM. |
05-31-2020, 02:20 AM | #4 |
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BITCH so let’s do this! Why’d you join the tourney kid ain’t Gon prove shit
I’ll take you out here in the first round, then waste another clip on you just for amusement He always had them BIG dreams, a slick ride with the drop-top Signed into the NBL and got his wish….kinda...when Coop took his top off! Evad ain't spraying SHIT...he must have got a kink in the line On the other hand this mag fuck up your whole profile...like INC did mine I ain't shooting to kill, put you in a coma when that pistol blow Your wife will have to pull the plug on Dave like she canceled Lil Dicky show Your chick scheming on your well meaning, you ain’t pokin’ but you treat her right I’ll find your girl Dave and Buster in the bathroom for a token and a pizza slice |
05-31-2020, 02:27 AM | #5 |
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Wasn't feeling evad verse.... That adversecity line wD OK. Adverse didn't have anything really hard hitting but I liked his closer.
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05-31-2020, 08:23 AM | #6 |
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calesthenics was solid
execution been done like this before but that flip was still fire iggy was ok, a lil light.. this tells me u old af tho lol banks was cool furniture was nasstyy adversity a slight stretch wasnt feelin the tennis jawn tbh vs nah, u gonna do a clip/round line it better be out left field type shit coop was a light personal mag- see first line.. gotta be more clever man theres a hit, feelin pull the plug dave and buster was simple but effective, i like it did not like the way adverse started, but he heated up at the end.. it’s too bad he didnt match and only dropped 10 vs 16 from Dave, huge advantage.. and Dave still had the 2 best lines i likes in this battle so ez one for me.. v Dave
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05-31-2020, 08:46 AM | #7 | |
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vs. Your chick scheming on your well meaning, you ain’t pokin’ but you treat her right I’ll find your girl Dave and Buster in the bathroom for a token and a pizza slice v - Adverse. Wasn't feeling much of either verse, but Adverse had LOTB with Dave and Busters, while also being more consistent in his attempts to diss the opponent. I think the wording and played concepts from both created a closer battle than it should have been. Generic gun bars/"I am very aggressive" don't get much pop from me, unless very creative, so I didn't feel anything in Dave's verse. Also, Dave is a pussy for swaying/bitching after one vote
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05-31-2020, 01:03 PM | #9 |
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This was fairly entertaining. Neither verse was mind blowing, but they each had their fair share of jabs. I think Dave used too many puns and some really obscure references (and, if it’s obscure to me, best believe it’s really obscure).. But, he also had some clever stuff... and the line of the battle to me (Body Weight). Adverse dropped essentially half of Dave’s Verse and didn’t have anything that jumped out at me as being particularly witty or original (although it wasn’t bad).
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05-31-2020, 08:21 PM | #10 |
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Those predictions? Just fiction. But I’m glad I read it
Cus if Adverse the Heavy favourite ima Body Weight like Calisthenics didnt fully get this tbh, unless he has an alias named "Weight/wait" or something similar, which is something you should specify from the jump. The only other alternative is you're saying "I'ma body, wait.." which you should indicate with some kind of punctuation. Either way as a writer, you're responsible for communicating your ideas better to the read. If his name was weight, this would be a good bar, but I can't make that assumption so it's a miss for me The disses he spit are all misses and shit. Guess ya boy is senile Cus his Execution’s bout as smooth as how they did Delacroix in Green Mile ok, seen execution concepts done a lot and this didn't strike me as super original Knifestyles deployed like they’re a lifestyle choice. He bout to cop a hurtin When I cut The Idiot with Bowie like im Iggy Pop in Berlin dope concept, execution could be smoother Yeah I’m Dave, don’t get it backwards - I ain’t-Cha Pal but it’s likely That if you’re Banking on winning this when Azealia fate you gon cry cheat cool Not a Lot to Offer and your Numbers Up, ain’t that some shit So I’m thinking furniture auction - WinChester Draws and the Hammer Clicks concepts cool, executions a little sloppy If that tough guy act is doctored now you committing malpractice You couldn’t have seen AdverseCity less if you were repping Atlantis Nah not really feeling this Born better off means you were never raw When heads were ringing alarms with Tenor Saw Ad was feelin’ alarmed bout Tennis Sores This is ok, I think you're trynna do too much Attending Wimbledon’s the only time he could get Centre Court, he’s bound to lose When I sneak up on Ad Vantage Point and Tie em up on my way to Round Deuce Another one. I'm really not the demographic for tennis bars, but this is ok BITCH so let’s do this! Why’d you join the tourney kid ain’t Gon prove shit I’ll take you out here in the first round, then waste another clip on you just for amusement Nah not feeling this, super antiquated concept and nothing new added in He always had them BIG dreams, a slick ride with the drop-top Signed into the NBL and got his wish….kinda...when Coop took his top off! ok Evad ain't spraying SHIT...he must have got a kink in the line On the other hand this mag fuck up your whole profile...like INC did mine Again, okay. Magazine bars are just incredibly overdone I ain't shooting to kill, put you in a coma when that pistol blow Your wife will have to pull the plug on Dave like she canceled Lil Dicky show ok, could be more creative in the angle Your chick scheming on your well meaning, you ain’t pokin’ but you treat her right I’ll find your girl Dave and Buster in the bathroom for a token and a pizza slice cool idea, executions kinda sloppy. Grammatically this has holes in it on the arcade side of the interpretation overall, I felt like I've seen better from Adverse, so I was a bit disappointed in this drop. Also the fact that he only did 10 lines vs dave's 16 put him at a disadvantage from the jump. That being said, I think Dave got this. He had some good ideas but I think he tries to do way too much with them when it comes to executing. overall mvgt Dave |
06-01-2020, 10:23 PM | #11 |
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Yeah I’m gonna roll with Dave here.
Calisthenics Bowie Winchester was ok Vs Lil Dicky ...kinda liked the pizza slice line Idk, this wasn’t that close to me. Solid effort by both, but my vote goes to Dave
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Honestly a lot of really played shit by both . Played or like cringe type corny That first round bar was as bad as a da feet or cum line Dave wins for not using the worst line
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06-03-2020, 11:40 PM | #13 |
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Vote EVAD ... I broke it down in my first vote but that vote is gone now somehow
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06-04-2020, 04:24 AM | #14 |
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Not a bad drop. Iggy pop and furniture auction were cool to me. Delacroix was ok. Tad simple but good. Adverse U had Coop, Toss up for LOTB between that and Dave’s iggy pop bar. The rest for me man idk... Lil Dicky was ok. Not too fresh and I wasn’t feeling ur closer. I’m all for a concept being used again but u have to pull it much better than before and this was so so So I’ve got Coop and Iggy pop as standouts, then furniture auction and delecroix.. then maybe lil dicky... I thought with ad’s recent run of form he might take this but Dave has edged him here. I preferred the overall creativity and a few bars with more sting than his opponents Good shit both of you but my vote - evaD |
06-05-2020, 10:22 AM | #15 |
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Those predictions? Just fiction. But I’m glad I read it Cus if Adverse the Heavy favourite ima Body Weight like Calisthenics Ok The disses he spit are all misses and shit. Guess ya boy is senile Cus his Execution’s bout as smooth as how they did Delacroix in Green Mile Above avg filler Knifestyles deployed like they’re a lifestyle choice. He bout to cop a hurtin When I cut The Idiot with Bowie like im Iggy Pop in Berlin Wasnt feelin Yeah I’m Dave, don’t get it backwards - I ain’t-Cha Pal but it’s likely That if you’re Banking on winning this when Azealia fate you gon cry cheat Wasn't a smooth wp, but points for the attempt. Not a Lot to Offer and your Numbers Up, ain’t that some shit So I’m thinking furniture auction - WinChester Draws and the Hammer Clicks These capitalized words are fucking with me If that tough guy act is doctored now you committing malpractice You couldn’t have seen AdverseCity less if you were repping Atlantis I like the wp here a lot. But when you think about the punch, it aint harsh. "You havent seen adversity" ehhh Born better off means you were never raw When heads were ringing alarms with Tenor Saw Ad was feelin’ alarmed bout Tennis Sores That second line is horrendous Attending Wimbledon’s the only time he could get Centre Court, he’s bound to lose When I sneak up on Ad Vantage Point and Tie em up on my way to Round Deuce Another good wp, another bland punch. The wordplay was good, the wording was subpar. If you take OUT the WP, and just analyze what you are saying to diss him, you're left with shit like "I'm going to body him" "I'll cut him" "You'll claim i cheated" "You haven't seen adversity" "I'm going to win". I need the same level of wp, but better disses 5/10 VS Adverse BITCH so let’s do this! Why’d you join the tourney kid ain’t Gon prove shit I’ll take you out here in the first round, then waste another clip on you just for amusement Where's the diss He always had them BIG dreams, a slick ride with the drop-top Signed into the NBL and got his wish….kinda...when Coop took his top off! Not according to the sheep in the league, good wp. Decent Evad ain't spraying SHIT...he must have got a kink in the line On the other hand this mag fuck up your whole profile...like INC did mine Didn't resonate I ain't shooting to kill, put you in a coma when that pistol blow Your wife will have to pull the plug on Dave like she canceled Lil Dicky show Filler Your chick scheming on your well meaning, you ain’t pokin’ but you treat her right I’ll find your girl Dave and Buster in the bathroom for a token and a pizza slice Cmon bruh now i KNOW YOU SEEN my dave and buster bar last week, AND the punch is similar. (I can fuck your girl, it'll only take ______) I aint saying it's a bite, but at least wait a month. Mine was better. 4/10 Adverse's verse was MUCH easier to read, but no sting to anything. Had I not done D&B last week, that would probably be LOTB. I don't think you should've went 10. Going less backfired here, you just needed maybe 1 fire bar to take this. I'll vote evaD |
06-05-2020, 05:19 PM | #16 |
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evaD WINS 8-2
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