01-23-2020, 05:54 AM | #1 |
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Clowns...
Ayo,
Y'all shook ones, Havin' a mean look but remember my beef's only cooked once Cologne and chains Ima crook son, Makin' you shake and then shiver with punches punctuatin' your lungs Then the liver wrecked like trippin' on liquor, Connect this sword tip to your hip and slash thru this figure Sowed my stitches back, Alive! Punches kickin' in, Let us meet on a sidewalk A Inglewood tightrope The path is narrow, You overdosed? On the contents of my dome Go wave good-bye to those high hopes And open the package... Behold the eyes of a savage Clashin' Ak's and daggers, Feelin' like my mic is this craft that I could crash thru the planet I'm a machine minus the control panel, A Rottweiler tearin' up the whole kennel I'll smash your brains out thru your nostrils, Ex is muther fuckin' Stone Cold and your a fuckin' fossil Kerosine plus a light... Got your corpse rottin' beneath the crust bottom I'll be at your funeral bitch with blessings and blossoms, Screamin' Trayvon for life. |
01-23-2020, 03:29 PM | #2 |
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To be honest
I love how you added heavy hitters Sound like diss Freestyle Decent punchlines and multies |
01-24-2020, 12:03 AM | #3 |
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Appreciate the feed, thank you...
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01-26-2020, 01:17 AM | #4 |
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Your closer was sick, the stone cold line onwards were the best bars of the piece. I think you can connect your lines a little better, like make them more releveant to the bar before it it'll bridge your verse together better. Also do a little check on using the correct word before you post
"Makin' you shake and then shiver with punches punctuatin' your lungs" That should be puncturing, could've been autocorrect idk. Decent drop man keep writing |
01-26-2020, 02:35 AM | #5 |
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I agree, I don't connect shit sometimes...Havin' said that I only key.. Maybe edited two verses in my life but yeah type stuff, Thanks for the comments FAM, I'll be on your level soon...
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