12-05-2019, 01:02 AM | #1 |
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Hidden Soundtrack of Poetry
This arts' unique
when it starts to speak in tongues on air weakened rum, my lungs leaking bong water hailing the same plate I'm eating from. This' the post mortem ramblings of a dead person past his peak while hidden within said version is a child with bleach: I cry and screech; average seem too hard to reach, and have a dream that scars unique, it's dark indeed. A Stark contrast to what "marvel" means, or half of me's, as good memories die like couples carved in trees. I can fight myself but need Moses to part the seas. If it's true you make your own bed I guard the fleas, I'll cop out on what stopped Napoleons bombing sprees. No shame, it's margarine, that raw cold disease where bread and bold moves exist. Sucks I'm too cute to quit, unless I stoop to shit and fantasize on which muse to hit like I'm new to it. I'm seeing things like Phoenix wings wondering who's shoes to fit when the clues adrift. Damn, I need a music shift!
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12-11-2019, 12:28 AM | #2 |
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you're way better than this and i mean that complimentary
this did nothing for me sorry this probably took you no effort write something with substance beyond rhymes and yes this feed would work towards myself as well |
12-11-2019, 08:14 AM | #3 |
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It took some effort but not much for sure, now that you mention it I didn't really flesh out a concept at all, or go through the process of removing/fixing fillers etc. that I normally do/did. Thanks for the read and honest/helpful feedback, this is inspiring. Will hit up one of your pieces later on.
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