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Old 12-05-2019, 01:02 AM   #1
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This arts' unique
when it starts to speak in tongues on air weakened rum,
my lungs leaking bong water hailing the same plate I'm eating from.
This' the post mortem ramblings of a dead person
past his peak while hidden within said version
is a child with bleach:

I cry and screech;
average seem too hard to reach,
and have a dream that scars unique, it's dark indeed.
A Stark contrast to what "marvel" means, or half of me's,
as good memories die like couples carved in trees.
I can fight myself but need Moses to part the seas.
If it's true you make your own bed I guard the fleas,
I'll cop out on what stopped Napoleons bombing sprees.
No shame, it's margarine,
that raw cold disease where bread and bold moves exist.
Sucks I'm too cute to quit, unless I stoop to shit
and fantasize on which muse to hit like I'm new to it.
I'm seeing things like Phoenix wings
wondering who's shoes to fit
when the clues adrift.
Damn,
I need a music shift!
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Old 12-11-2019, 12:28 AM   #2
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you're way better than this and i mean that complimentary

this did nothing for me sorry

this probably took you no effort

write something with substance beyond rhymes

and yes this feed would work towards myself as well
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Old 12-11-2019, 08:14 AM   #3
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It took some effort but not much for sure, now that you mention it I didn't really flesh out a concept at all, or go through the process of removing/fixing fillers etc. that I normally do/did. Thanks for the read and honest/helpful feedback, this is inspiring. Will hit up one of your pieces later on.
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