11-20-2019, 10:35 PM | #1 |
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Foogazi
Foogazi. Think something's 24 karat gollllld and it just breaks
Better watch your soul when the love's fake Never open the flood gates. Wanna know why Felts in the matrix? Spitting spells from a spaceship to fuck up what you do on a regular basis I've seen the most angelic faces Ego-trapped. Delicate cage Witch in the corner.. Of your eye, that switches it's form before your cornea focus Hoe kiss this portal of Pocus Cornucopia horny storm-swarms me Always find myself dreaming of your lips Sly as hell but the wings are gorgeous Magick's brutal so splash a beautiful cast upon this cute little planet Truth of the matter it's like shoots and ladders Rub lamp if you can use some havoc It depends though, Ben's glow mutes the madness Slides through, eye's glued like magnets Here's to counting on you.pure thoughts be the fountain of youth Tears drop on a mountain of roots All todays. It's all a rave The more you let go the more it falls in place The real in me recognizes the real in you. Walls just fade. I spy a dream. Everything is so vibrant. All tyedye to leaves Everlast, shit that never passes. You don't see it? need better glasses You feel me but we're on separate planets I fix gaze upon the moon and chill And fixate on the ponds that Luna builds Super ill, this wand is smoothe as silk You want to confuse with milk Rhyme butterfly. Shall I cocoon yours? Catch sun walking on the moon floor reading fortunes but what you tuned for? Bloom north. Dropping the visions Lots of witnesses got cognitive dissonance Don't know what the FUCK is happening, their optics are missing it Word-hawk lost in epiphany. Wind-walk with logic mystiks Immortal wound. It doesn't die Getting karma-fucked with the same scenario A dozen times a dozen times.. Soul always WOKE, it's our ghost that sleeps Lazy fucks wanna pick the fruit, never grow the tree Wooo smell the ocean breeze I spell with poetry I-island, can't tell where dry land or the puddle starts Tell a lie it tares your tongue apart Fuck this planet, bout to shuttle mars Too many jesters here that juggle hearts
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11-21-2019, 09:26 PM | #2 |
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I might be high as shit but I thought this was fucking brilliant from start to finish. The opener was cool and you caught my attention with the Matrix skit and kept it fresh throughout with cool ideas and thought provoking perspectives. Flow was great throughout, would have enjoyed to hear this as a spoken word tbh. Closure stings quite well in a good way too and wraps it up perfectly. Might be my fav piece by you. This is why I still log in and read shit sometimes.
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12-11-2019, 12:56 AM | #3 |
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I don't know why you constantly misspell magic and mystics, but i dig the rhymes and phrases in this piece. good.
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12-09-2020, 10:38 PM | #4 |
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You didn't really get enough feed when you were in your writing period. Got anything new? |
04-05-2021, 08:42 AM | #5 |
rhyme capsule.
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