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Who Cursed The Dirt?
Genie? Jin! Genius? Sin!
All rolled inside those bpm's There's poltergeist in demon skin Who sold their lives to greedy men Don't close your eyes when sleep begins Cos Freddy's ready, Jeepers, Slim Pennywise can sniff your scents Then spin a web to eat you kids Michael Myers, Jason Mask, Leatherface Blades that hack and chainsaw rage Then spraying baths of blood become A day to bask inside a tub of brains detached Let's trim the fat off roadside whores Then feed them to the zombie hordes Or pull the cord of life support and send your poor niece to the morgue and do it cos we're fuckin bored I'll open doors where devils dwell Then fling an orphan down a well I bring misfortune. Ring a bell? Demons, horsemen, Kings of Hell All do my bidding - reading spells The Reaper's cell is now unlocked While Cinobites get out The Box. I Love [the] Craft my ship is docked Inside a swamp of Cthulhu's thoughts Pocket dims where Lipstick lives (Mid-century digs ) - Insidious When Lilith's kiss takes your life And turns you into Frankenstein The living dead of ancient night Will finally rise to take their brides Don't be surprised to see the Pope Swinging from a piece of rope That choked the throat of Judas slow Until it broke it's Brutal hold around his neck to rest his soul No exorcism could dispose The pest inside of Emily Rose An Omen known throughout the church The Antichrist inherits Earth. Dirt.
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cool lil read here bro, liked the dark horrorcore theme around it. although it's been done a lot but this wasn't 'so so', i liked your flow, just kept me on edge till i read it through..
love this closer "No exorcism could dispose The pest inside of Emily Rose An omen known throughout the church The antichrist inherits Earth." |
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I Love [the] Craft my ship is docked
Inside a swamp of Cthulhu's thoughts Pocket dims where Lipstick lives (Mid-century digs ) - Insidious When Lilith's kiss takes your life And turns you into Frankenstein The living dead of ancient night Will finally rise to take their brides Don't be surprised to see the Pope Swinging from a piece of rope That choked the throat of Judas slow Until it broke it's brutal hold around his neck to rest his soul No exorcism could dispose The pest inside of Emily Rose An omen known throughout the church The antichrist inherits Earth. That's raw... Gr8 read fam. |
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There are horror movies called Brutal (a Japanese one, Unearthed Films are re-releasing it soon) and Antichrist by Lars Von Trier (he’s releasing The House That Jack Built very soon) so you could capitalise those two words near the end as added horror movies mentioned in the verse.
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Your gettin' rep just for bein' you Lars...
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@sraL Thanks for the info. I've made the corrections.
@Ex and Maximus thanks for the read and feed. It's much appreciated.
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posted by accident.
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