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dead man · 10-02-2018, 01:25 AM

green forest melancholia. i led you to faith
separate entirely, together remained
molecular tangles our cozy nest DNA
its conceptual, lately i've felt a definite change
synchronic relative wavelength. half-arrested restraint
anorexic, poor girl who never finished a plate
broccoli and steak. 10-kilometer days. glitch in your matrices
fictional make-believe my promises made
art and independence there's a common engagement
growing colder the moment i cast it out into space
hours to waste in solitude like so many gravestones
so far removed i've just about forgotten how to embrace it
power pose, powder facelift mascara clouding her gaze
opal eyes, diamond bracelet, open wide, let her taste it
winebags in our pancreas and blood in our teeth
functional creep masquerading as the sum of his pieces
rather than something opaque, shadowy, see-thru
film projection after all the credits are raised
neural system nervous sympathetic by nature
existing most organic in the mind of stranger

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ACTIVATE SELF · 10-02-2018, 07:22 PM

Reserved for feed.

Wise Wiggles · 10-21-2018, 08:59 AM

Dude yeah. Will read again. Really refreshing to jump into.

2tripple0 · 12-12-2018, 04:46 PM

This was cool man...

Geno · 12-13-2018, 03:24 AM

Nice.

Hows that nook coming

Exis · 12-13-2018, 06:28 AM

This was very short, yet sweet from you...first 4 lines were dope.

Sorry for bein' a dickhead for like a decade...readin' your shit is always therapeutic Black.

Stay doin' you.

Pharaohs Army · 01-26-2019, 01:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dead man

glitch in your matrices
fictional make-believe

cool rhyme

Sinacog · 01-26-2019, 02:19 AM

This was a pretty good piece, Dead Man. It had all the essentials for a good topical piece. Nice poetics, and rhyme schemes you got here. Good form of rhyme scheme and narrative as-well. I enjoy these kind of drops, there fun to read in a way. The imagery was pretty well done, and you had nice prose. Your narrative was pretty good - nice subtle spot in this. Overall - a good read. Keep dropping here.

10-02-2018, 01:25 AM	#1
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,465 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606676	dust green forest melancholia. i led you to faith separate entirely, together remained molecular tangles our cozy nest DNA its conceptual, lately i've felt a definite change synchronic relative wavelength. half-arrested restraint anorexic, poor girl who never finished a plate broccoli and steak. 10-kilometer days. glitch in your matrices fictional make-believe my promises made art and independence there's a common engagement growing colder the moment i cast it out into space hours to waste in solitude like so many gravestones so far removed i've just about forgotten how to embrace it power pose, powder facelift mascara clouding her gaze opal eyes, diamond bracelet, open wide, let her taste it winebags in our pancreas and blood in our teeth functional creep masquerading as the sum of his pieces rather than something opaque, shadowy, see-thru film projection after all the credits are raised neural system nervous sympathetic by nature existing most organic in the mind of stranger / __________________ Zack Wicks for president

10-21-2018, 08:59 AM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,507 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788019	Dude yeah. Will read again. Really refreshing to jump into. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

12-12-2018, 04:46 PM	#4
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12-13-2018, 03:24 AM	#5
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12-13-2018, 06:28 AM	#6
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	This was very short, yet sweet from you...first 4 lines were dope. Sorry for bein' a dickhead for like a decade...readin' your shit is always therapeutic Black. Stay doin' you.

01-26-2019, 02:19 AM	#8
Sinacog Satan Join Date: Dec 2018 Posts: 2,156 Battle Record: 4-25 Rep Power: 8129212	This was a pretty good piece, Dead Man. It had all the essentials for a good topical piece. Nice poetics, and rhyme schemes you got here. Good form of rhyme scheme and narrative as-well. I enjoy these kind of drops, there fun to read in a way. The imagery was pretty well done, and you had nice prose. Your narrative was pretty good - nice subtle spot in this. Overall - a good read. Keep dropping here.