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CANIMUS SURDIS
{AS WE’RE NEARING THE CLEARING, THE ZERO THEOREM’S HERO’S APPEARING…… }
The mitochondrial symbiosis of cognitive elucidation began, as the ancient acropolis dropped its anchor on dry land... the ground shook, the unearthly metalloids reflected gazes time slowed, the signs showed the prime modes of mazes the fish began to fly, as new cells divide their kinds inside the brain they acted as water, form fitting dendritic genesis, providing flame the crowd that had gathered became despondent: Their neural capabilities were instantly eclipsed from too much space allotted In simply contemplating the vessel which now resided in their optics The door opened and out stepped the being, who spoke… hear the synopsis: The entities refused to change because their meanings were contingent upon other entities’ meanings which also happened to be changed due to the refusal of others to change their meanings. this refusal changed their meaning regardless, and so the others as well. This is your new mental math. Minds blown. The ALL of everything is irrelevant to the mind bound by dimensions Rhymes shone clearly a dream, prevalent in the kind found through ascensions. Dreams hidden in dreams, content intertwined in the memory gospel So your codes are hacked by your own, in fact, the enemy’s hostile. The pedigree of the farthest skies are not bound to this DÉJÀ VU Perpetual soul searching, slow lurching, and remembering he gained a clue. The ship ascended up, not to return upon this awareness. The moral of the story: never be careless. The moral of that moral: ever see where’s this?
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The ending didnt sit well. The overall content mingled around. Very intense
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this is the shit im talking about, what the fuck is this community on?
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thank you buddy.
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Wow very dramatic. And I liked the last verse quite a bit. I've always been a fan in ending with riddles, that lead to contemplative introspection. What the being spoke as the so called mental math could have had more meaning. And no that wasn't a pun. This implies that yes I understood what you meant. But you executed it in a way where the paradox of interconnection and inevitable change failed to deliver a change on the reader himself, even if he refused the perspective. I don't know if I'm making it clear. But anyways the rest was most excellent.
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