03-13-2022, 03:54 PM | #1 |
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The Nigh Hill Is(™)
The coulda, woulda, shoulda Buddha stood a little longer
going harder, better, faster, stronger as the lasting Ungar. Any martyr feather laughter under pressure 'till they die. I am fasting while brewing up a stew to conquer thunder tasked with being sly. So, who the fuck are you? I was left in depth of secrets kept to make attempts without regrets until I bled, but now I'm "dead". So, that's a solemn lie. Why bother if I try when the scars make up the sky? The winter surface in the morning has an inner purpose of its own, just a shitty feeling when the spring's revealing the path you're going home. Hiking through the muddy swamps created by my soul shows the nature of my goals as if that'll make me whole. I'm an agent pacing so impatient with unlabeled kinks adjacent. My domes a palace, talents vacant, kitchen sink complacent, the misanthrope is useful to a fault. I add pepper to my salt. Habits aging caged in taverns paved in patterns made of minds, the sins and ancient malice chasing rabbits chasing time. This sage engaged in rage and callous thoughts were all for nought. Fuck a dollar for your thoughts, I've heard it all before.
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So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o Last edited by Objective; 03-13-2022 at 04:07 PM. |
03-16-2022, 12:15 AM | #2 |
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i liked this a whole lot. im inspired.
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Meh
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05-06-2022, 06:45 PM | #4 |
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@emurgencee Dope to hear it inspired you.
@Mike Wrecka I'll take it. Wrote it on my phone, sent it to my mail and posted it up before editing or reading over it with fresh eyes. What you're saying is on point, needs polishing. Been thinking about getting to it. Atm it jumps too much from concept to concept with weird wordings here and there instead of smooth transitions or a consistent theme. Thanks for reading
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02-22-2023, 04:58 PM | #5 |
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Any martyr feather laughter under pressure 'till they die.
I am fasting while brewing up a stew to conquer thunder tasked with being sly. Highlight to me, primiarly due to the last 4 words... While the schemes/technicals were "there", it did seem to me more of like an "ideas"/warmup draft...perhaps a true spoken open mic even...nothing wrong with that necessarily; it's how we all create/ start ideas...all that said looking forward to see if the other one I "upped" is more fleshed out, etc. think it is... Perhaps Lars makes fun of you & others say TLDR, but your nerd breakdowns aren't always too long, sometimes interesting... stay up - throw a vote in AOWL if u get free time |
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