Addiction =/= self loathing (Short poem)

Objective · 01-27-2016, 10:12 PM

I love the one I hate the most,
shove emotions back and forth.
Haunting past a different ghost,
sip a drink, then have a toast.

It's not my first, and not my last,
shifting through this mound of grass.
Life is long but not so vast,
why am I the one to last?

Twitching, bitching, lots of itching,
missing kissing? Wishful thinking...
Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup,
kill the feeling: bottoms up!

slech · 01-31-2016, 08:15 PM

I'm giving this feed, shortly.

MC Fussy · 01-31-2016, 09:43 PM

ca whine bout ca wine
alcohol, weed, & clementine
it's not addiction, you're just a dick son
and this bitch is fine. life's not a bitch
i can prove it baby sip this wine

Objective · 02-03-2016, 01:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by MC Fussy

ca whine bout ca wine
alcohol, weed, & clementine
it's not addiction, you're just a dick son
and this bitch is fine. life's not a bitch
i can prove it baby sip this wine

I've now made a point to never feed your alias in the OM, or give your verses in battles actual feed but only give short descriptions to why you should or shouldn't get a vote. I'm always neutral when it comes to votes and only place a verse against each other but yeah, beside of that you won't get any insight I might have. Probably worth nothing to you but it is what it is. From this point on I will ignore this alias/name as much as I can on anything that has to do with text. If you really feel like trolling om-pieces then go ahead, can't stop a mentally handicapped person from slapping itself.

MC Fussy · 02-03-2016, 02:00 AM

cool story faggot. next time write a rhyme.

MC Fussy · 02-03-2016, 02:06 AM

i take pills like
deshaun holton
proof
i drink schwill like ya mom's holdin
you
she get drunk to see stars golden
shoot
machine gun kelly & ya dads holding
you just to hold on to
dues
she paid dues when she married your murder
father
she don't bother cuz she takes pills for the slaughter
right in the kisser
pills ==BAC calling a CAB or an uber
or if she can find me shell have me take her home 'cuz thats super
and i make her cum hard to a stuper feel like a octopus on my tool, sir
pills right in the kisser
it's not an addiction if it's prescription is it mister
high as a space cadet i kiss your mother then your sister

Objective · 02-03-2016, 06:04 AM

I see that embarrassing yourself is your strongest suit. I can not compete with that. Peace.

e11even · 02-04-2016, 12:46 PM

I think this was a cool passing thought in that it seems to accomplish a vent due to relationship problems. I'm sure everyone can relate and if you expanded on it in your classic style, it would be volumes better. This was ok for what it was. I didn't really like the nursery rhyme setup, but like i said, it accomplished what it seems like you were trying to do. Good job for the most part.

I have "purpose." in the OM if you care to RTF. thanks regardless :)

MC Fussy · 02-04-2016, 11:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Objective

I see that embarrassing yourself is your strongest suit. I can not compete with that. Peace.

I love the one I hate the most,

---you or a 13 yo girl?

MC Fussy · 02-04-2016, 11:07 PM

my heart froze girls call me cold
but i ain't got one i'm just sick
only thing you ad`dic`ted to is sucking dick
"holy smoke," i leave this nigga "ghost" like earth wind
im "stuffed to the gills" like a fish
"it takes one to no one," and ya mom says u a bitch
you got that? u aint gotta TRAIN for this dick but u can blow on it
like foghorn leghorn do the whistle
ur dad eat your butt out spit init drink it down like a milk thistle

Pharaohs Army · 02-05-2016, 01:34 AM

writers

Tre The ABC Darian · 02-06-2016, 05:31 PM

ob is better than the last piece i read by you... ... i love the word play and rhyme scheme

Objective · 02-08-2016, 08:10 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vividlyvague

I have "purpose." in the OM if you care to RTF. thanks regardless :)

Thanks for the feed VV and I agree with your points actually, thanks for pointing them out. I'll return the feed when I get some time, probably tonight or tomorrow or something. But it'll come around your way as well.

slech · 02-08-2016, 04:39 PM

I love the one I hate the most,
shove emotions back and forth.
--I personally have gone through this. This speaks a lot to me. I like the beginning to this---
Haunting past a different ghost,
sip a drink, then have a toast.
--Didn't really like how you executing that last line. I was looking for something else but it's still decent'''

It's not my first, and not my last,
shifting through this mound of grass.
Life is long but not so vast,
why am I the one to last?
---OK, Suicidal thoughts? Or just lonely? Overall, I like the visualization I have with this--

Twitching, bitching, lots of itching,
missing kissing? Wishful thinking...
Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup,
kill the feeling: bottoms up!
--Ok, this was fairly nice, not sure IF I enjoyed the bottoms up finisher but over all, I like what you did here--
I didn't like the 'missing kissing' though

01-27-2016, 10:12 PM	#1
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,787 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474189	Addiction =/= self loathing (Short poem) I love the one I hate the most, shove emotions back and forth. Haunting past a different ghost, sip a drink, then have a toast. It's not my first, and not my last, shifting through this mound of grass. Life is long but not so vast, why am I the one to last? Twitching, bitching, lots of itching, missing kissing? Wishful thinking... Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup, kill the feeling: bottoms up! __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o

02-03-2016, 06:04 AM	#7
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,787 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474189	I see that embarrassing yourself is your strongest suit. I can not compete with that. Peace. __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o

02-04-2016, 12:46 PM	#8
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247256	I think this was a cool passing thought in that it seems to accomplish a vent due to relationship problems. I'm sure everyone can relate and if you expanded on it in your classic style, it would be volumes better. This was ok for what it was. I didn't really like the nursery rhyme setup, but like i said, it accomplished what it seems like you were trying to do. Good job for the most part. I have "purpose." in the OM if you care to RTF. thanks regardless :) __________________ Ahem.

02-05-2016, 01:34 AM	#11
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	writers Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 10-24-2016 at 02:45 AM.

01-31-2016, 08:15 PM	#2
slech > Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 150 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 3807828	I'm giving this feed, shortly.

01-31-2016, 09:43 PM	#3
MC Fussy c h a m p Join Date: Jan 2016 Location: m.i.a Posts: 118 Rep Power: 0	ca whine bout ca wine alcohol, weed, & clementine it's not addiction, you're just a dick son and this bitch is fine. life's not a bitch i can prove it baby sip this wine

02-03-2016, 02:00 AM	#5
MC Fussy c h a m p Join Date: Jan 2016 Location: m.i.a Posts: 118 Rep Power: 0	cool story faggot. next time write a rhyme.

02-03-2016, 02:06 AM	#6
MC Fussy c h a m p Join Date: Jan 2016 Location: m.i.a Posts: 118 Rep Power: 0	i take pills like deshaun holton proof i drink schwill like ya mom's holdin you she get drunk to see stars golden shoot machine gun kelly & ya dads holding you just to hold on to dues she paid dues when she married your murder father she don't bother cuz she takes pills for the slaughter right in the kisser pills ==BAC calling a CAB or an uber or if she can find me shell have me take her home 'cuz thats super and i make her cum hard to a stuper feel like a octopus on my tool, sir pills right in the kisser it's not an addiction if it's prescription is it mister high as a space cadet i kiss your mother then your sister

02-04-2016, 11:07 PM	#10
MC Fussy c h a m p Join Date: Jan 2016 Location: m.i.a Posts: 118 Rep Power: 0	my heart froze girls call me cold but i ain't got one i'm just sick only thing you ad`dic`ted to is sucking dick "holy smoke," i leave this nigga "ghost" like earth wind im "stuffed to the gills" like a fish "it takes one to no one," and ya mom says u a bitch you got that? u aint gotta TRAIN for this dick but u can blow on it like foghorn leghorn do the whistle ur dad eat your butt out spit init drink it down like a milk thistle

02-06-2016, 05:31 PM	#12
Tre The ABC Darian Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2016 Posts: 17 Rep Power: 2010582	ob is better than the last piece i read by you... ... i love the word play and rhyme scheme

02-08-2016, 04:39 PM	#14
slech > Join Date: Nov 2015 Posts: 150 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 3807828	I love the one I hate the most, shove emotions back and forth. --I personally have gone through this. This speaks a lot to me. I like the beginning to this--- Haunting past a different ghost, sip a drink, then have a toast. --Didn't really like how you executing that last line. I was looking for something else but it's still decent''' It's not my first, and not my last, shifting through this mound of grass. Life is long but not so vast, why am I the one to last? ---OK, Suicidal thoughts? Or just lonely? Overall, I like the visualization I have with this-- Twitching, bitching, lots of itching, missing kissing? Wishful thinking... Hissing, drizzling, fill the cup, kill the feeling: bottoms up! --Ok, this was fairly nice, not sure IF I enjoyed the bottoms up finisher but over all, I like what you did here-- I didn't like the 'missing kissing' though