04-21-2019, 01:37 PM | #1 |
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Snitching is gangsta (0-0) vs. veritas (0-0) - SIG WINS
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Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday and will be open until Sunday. Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 10, maximum of 16 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first. Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ FAILURE TO VOTE ON A MINIMUM OF 4 BATTLES WILL RESULT IN A DEDUCTION OF 2 VOTES IN YOUR BATTLE. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! VOTE ON 4 BATTLES MINIMUM OR YOU PAY THE PRICE. SIMPLE! COMPLETE RULE THREAD: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=140091 @Snitching is gangsta @veritas |
04-22-2019, 05:40 PM | #2 |
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Me vs a shrink.....story of my life
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04-24-2019, 08:01 PM | #3 |
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A intellectual,claim ya minds ya grind,get paid cause u mentally go in..
So I'll pop the 9, and leave ya hustle on the pavement like Laura London's boyfriend... Y'all do gun bars, I'm barred from guns..for felonies homie... My gun'll take ya life..like tha feds'll do me if they catch it on me They claim I'm dia,zelph,ks and every other wack nigga that do text This battle familiar territory, you use to losing to every wack nigga on tha net I'll spark ya face, and when that hammer spray it's no looking back Cause when that flash hit ya eyes, u'll be carried by 6 men in black Claim you godly on the mic...ya skills heaven sent... Hip-hop fans must be Athiest cause they still looking for evidence... |
04-25-2019, 09:36 AM | #4 | |
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If you ever need a battle idea for battering Dia, let Veritas help you…
Character on bankrupt. An obese and slovenly hog-faced scum, Why your mom secretly wishes science sterilized your dad’s cum. Chicken or egg: The psychology of failure or is it nurture verse nature, that gave you preemie-baby facial swag beta biology during your birth incubator? Instigator. Agitator. Masturbator. Alias. Lurker…. describes Dia in his essence Tell ya moms “My love for you is making fuck,” When I beserk her she Silently Bobs on the reference. I’m a Literal Doctor that literally rolls with a squad, each a dangerous killer You're an army of one as the most pathetic lifelong virgin who favors a sped ed gorilla You have been boarding for twenty years and still, ain't made a net friend, That’s why I’m confident hell will freeze over if you touch a vagina before the U.S.’s debts end You will die and no one will remember you.
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04-26-2019, 03:55 PM | #5 |
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A intellectual,claim ya minds ya grind,get paid cause u mentally go in..
So I'll pop the 9, and leave ya hustle on the pavement like Laura London's boyfriend... lol it’s lauren not Laura. Could have been an ok bar but it missed Y'all do gun bars, I'm barred from guns..for felonies homie... My gun'll take ya life..like tha feds'll do me if they catch it on me if you said you can’t have guns in your setup then say you have a gun in your second line you’re contradicting yourself like big time maybe? They claim I'm dia,zelph,ks and every other wack nigga that do text This battle familiar territory, you use to losing to every wack nigga on tha net so you’re calling yourself wack? Not a good line man.. I'll spark ya face, and when that hammer spray it's no looking back Cause when that flash hit ya eyes, u'll be carried by 6 men in black alright this was a lot better, pretty cool Claim you godly on the mic...ya skills heaven sent... Hip-hop fans must be Athiest cause they still looking for evidence... solid closer here Vs Character on bankrupt. An obese and slovenly hog-faced scum, Why your mom secretly wishes science sterilized your dad’s cum. nah Chicken or egg: The psychology of failure or is it nurture verse nature, that gave you preemie-baby facial swag beta biology during your birth incubator? what a tongue twister Instigator. Agitator. Masturbator. Alias. Lurker…. describes Dia in his essence Tell ya moms “My love for you is making fuck,” When I beserk her she Silently Bobs on the reference. i liked the first line but you lost me with the second I’m a Literal Doctor that literally rolls with a squad, each a dangerous killer You're an army of one as the most pathetic lifelong virgin who favors a sped ed gorilla decent I suppose You have been boarding for twenty years and still, ain't made a net friend, That’s why I’m confident hell will freeze over if you touch a vagina before the U.S.’s debts end nah Dia started off pretty bad, he has the mechanics down but is struggling with making his lines solid and complete, the last two bars were a step up from the previous ones. Veritas I wasn’t really feeling this verse here, the punchlines weren’t really hitting for me and there was a lot of elementary stuff in here or just a lot that didn’t make sense. I thought v would take this but I have snit winning here. Vote Snitching is gangsta |
04-26-2019, 05:31 PM | #6 |
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A intellectual,claim ya minds ya grind,get paid cause u mentally go in..
So I'll pop the 9, and leave ya hustle on the pavement like Laura London's boyfriend... not really into disrespecting Nip but it made this feel brutal Y'all do gun bars, I'm barred from guns..for felonies homie... My gun'll take ya life..like tha feds'll do me if they catch it on me ok They claim I'm dia,zelph,ks and every other wack nigga that do text This battle familiar territory, you use to losing to every wack nigga on tha net decent I'll spark ya face, and when that hammer spray it's no looking back Cause when that flash hit ya eyes, u'll be carried by 6 men in black creative, liked this a lot Claim you godly on the mic...ya skills heaven sent... Hip-hop fans must be Athiest cause they still looking for evidence... nah vs Character on bankrupt. An obese and slovenly hog-faced scum, Why your mom secretly wishes science sterilized your dad’s cum. this seems weird af honestly Chicken or egg: The psychology of failure or is it nurture verse nature, that gave you preemie-baby facial swag beta biology during your birth incubator? no Instigator. Agitator. Masturbator. Alias. Lurker…. describes Dia in his essence Tell ya moms “My love for you is making fuck,” When I beserk her she Silently Bobs on the reference. you're killing me w/this weird shit I’m a Literal Doctor that literally rolls with a squad, each a dangerous killer You're an army of one as the most pathetic lifelong virgin who favors a sped ed gorilla the concept could have been cool but your ending killed it You have been boarding for twenty years and still, ain't made a net friend, That’s why I’m confident hell will freeze over if you touch a vagina before the U.S.’s debts end no.. Pretty one sided IMO.. I'm not sure what veritas was doing here but it wasn't quite what I expected in a league battle.. snit did aiight.. fairly solid.. v/Snit |
04-27-2019, 08:08 AM | #7 |
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A intellectual,claim ya minds ya grind,get paid cause u mentally go in..
So I'll pop the 9, and leave ya hustle on the pavement like Laura London's boyfriend... DIDN'T GET THE REFERENCE BRO, SORRY Y'all do gun bars, I'm barred from guns..for felonies homie... My gun'll take ya life..like tha feds'll do me if they catch it on me BIG NO They claim I'm dia,zelph,ks and every other wack nigga that do text This battle familiar territory, you use to losing to every wack nigga on tha net NAH I'll spark ya face, and when that hammer spray it's no looking back Cause when that flash hit ya eyes, u'll be carried by 6 men in black AIGHT Claim you godly on the mic...ya skills heaven sent... Hip-hop fans must be Athiest cause they still looking for evidence... OK vs Character on bankrupt. An obese and slovenly hog-faced scum, Why your mom secretly wishes science sterilized your dad’s cum. NAHH Chicken or egg: The psychology of failure or is it nurture verse nature, that gave you preemie-baby facial swag beta biology during your birth incubator? NAH AGAIN Instigator. Agitator. Masturbator. Alias. Lurker…. describes Dia in his essence Tell ya moms “My love for you is making fuck,” When I beserk her she Silently Bobs on the reference. WHAT? I’m a Literal Doctor that literally rolls with a squad, each a dangerous killer You're an army of one as the most pathetic lifelong virgin who favors a sped ed gorilla NAH You have been boarding for twenty years and still, ain't made a net friend, That’s why I’m confident hell will freeze over if you touch a vagina before the U.S.’s debts end NAH . . VOTE SNITCHING IS GANGSTER |
04-27-2019, 09:19 AM | #8 |
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SIG was cool. Nice style. Just need to be a bit more witty or spin the concepts a bit more. I liked the gunbar line because it was real. If you put a little more effort into the verses I’m sure you could come with some fire. I feel like you probably used to be good whenever you last done this.
Veritas while your verse was creatively worded there was no wit or any real semblance of an effective punchline. I don’t know why you can’t grasp the acceptable fundamentals of this niche writing style considering you’ve actually penned novels. But yeah not enough to win here. Vote SIG |
04-27-2019, 01:03 PM | #9 |
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I like snitch mib line. The nipsey line had potential
Vet verses kinda goes like he's reading your diagnosis back to you & adding insult opinions w.in them. In his line of work he's rly not suppose to give his opinion I guess unless the patient ask, right? By saying that, I can see how he would struggle to write a battle verse to insult another person. It's not w.in practice of his lifestyle nor line of wrk imo. I would love to see where he could get if he were to break that mold. Mvgt- snitch |
04-27-2019, 07:23 PM | #10 |
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A intellectual,claim ya minds ya grind,get paid cause u mentally go in..
So I'll pop the 9, and leave ya hustle on the pavement like Laura London's boyfriend... This was fiya, stretched a lil bit flowing, but this was a hit Y'all do gun bars, I'm barred from guns..for felonies homie... My gun'll take ya life..like tha feds'll do me if they catch it on me Simple, but nice They claim I'm dia,zelph,ks and every other wack nigga that do text This battle familiar territory, you use to losing to every wack nigga on tha net Ehhh, not feeling this one to much I'll spark ya face, and when that hammer spray it's no looking back Cause when that flash hit ya eyes, u'll be carried by 6 men in black Lol, this was light but still nice at the same time for some reason Claim you godly on the mic...ya skills heaven sent... Hip-hop fans must be Athiest cause they still looking for evidence... Nice way to close out here as well ------- Character on bankrupt. An obese and slovenly hog-faced scum, Why your mom secretly wishes science sterilized your dad’s cum. Lol nahhh on this opener b Chicken or egg: The psychology of failure or is it nurture verse nature, that gave you preemie-baby facial swag beta biology during your birth incubator? Feel like a statement or just a run on sentence. No build up or punch displayed Instigator. Agitator. Masturbator. Alias. Lurker…. describes Dia in his essence Tell ya moms “My love for you is making fuck,” When I beserk her she Silently Bobs on the reference. Didn't understand this one to much I’m a Literal Doctor that literally rolls with a squad, each a dangerous killer You're an army of one as the most pathetic lifelong virgin who favors a sped ed gorilla Decent I guess You have been boarding for twenty years and still, ain't made a net friend, That’s why I’m confident hell will freeze over if you touch a vagina before the U.S.’s debts end Ok closer here Props to both here, this was a cool battle, but Snit gets this, verse was more consistent and overall just a better structured battle verse. V verse read more like sentences with no punches in some part. Didn't suck, but wasn't much of a battle verse for a opponent. V- Snit
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