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dissolve your reality in a sentence, while avoiding a subtle plot. oops. At any rate, none like this ever. Guess who? the future man aka captain invincible I practice malpractice then bill insurance to get rid of you. weird flex but ok, in fact, yeah I dig it. I talk to myself and let my shadow walk and talk insipid. exhibit a characteristic outside of any potential classification in other words: the literal theory of everything inside my words presentation. I just say real shit, that shit you can feel shit, long time forever O.G. shit. Hall of Fame, known name, who gives a fuck though, stayed free shit. my principal said "Murphy, you aint never gonna be shit." Oops. at any rate, none any where near as clever I show you how smart you are in a simple manner through simple banter through a ripple in reverse time in a never simping candor. Everyone wants to let a shot ring, but never wanna be Bilbo. I cant take what I feel and throw it into your whole soul. leave you still. slow. slanted. faded. phased. decapitated. oops. guillotine getting mean, choke u dead when yo head is the end of the lever. certain schematics are dodecehedron measurements of planar encapsulation so the force of the socratic's methodology i bee on levels the threats of lesser presentation. oops. Like I said, whatever you've said, I've said it better. what's a scheme even tho? when my whole mind is just dream weaving, bro? oh. Yeah but can you actually understand thinking in no time limitation. go. see that what your chance, but you missed it entirely, you won't survive with me as an opponent. any environment I step in, i own it. you clone shit. you needing a loan shit. I own shit. I've flown shit. like my own consciousness beyond the limits of explainable phenomenology. VERITAS: the fusion of perfection with words and expressing psychology. and my own ego. oops. the bull seeing red. I am my only competition, and this is me writing me a letter.
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Dull Boy... At least feed his shit, come on now...
That said, cool to see you posting Veritas. Cool content, could need a bit of polishing up on the rhyme and excess syllable department. Concepts are there, just gotta tidy them sentences up a lil. This piece got potential but could do with some extra polishing Edit: I retract that stuff I said to you Dull Boy, I know why you did what you did now, lol
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nah but seriously, even if this wasn't great (and it wasn't ass, either), i like how few fucks are given when you write. that's a path to greatness. godspeed on your journey. Last edited by Eŋg; 04-05-2021 at 09:28 AM. |
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all space and opportunity my good man your original tongue is dope as fuck dude - if i was to request something like a homo lol it would be never change your writers voice man with your vocab that ish be bangen.. "bombaclout" so well delivered - one of the good examples of texting not needing to be recorded.. woah the presentation bomb was huge nice drop.. i like the "no time limitation" it works well with dreams and the build up showing you free while you possibly free yeowmean.. dope ending to.. man keep it real - your delivery was the next best thing after your vocab - yeh like i said your original tongue is stand outish |
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So I couldn’t really follow your flow here, the beginning was somewhat decent though regarding the scheme. But then you started going off on a tangent, both in terms of flow and content. Might be because it’s lengthy and wordy at the same time (am guilty of that myself). But I see you don’t really care about schemes so that explains it I guess. Being verbose is nice, can be great even, but I think your lines would’ve benefitted from finalised thoughts instead of half finished patterns. You incorporated some very unique concepts and thoughts like the „dream weaving“ part. This could’ve been good, maybe great even, if topics weren’t switched throughout. I enjoyed some of the patterns you incorporated. Somewhat decent.
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