First Song... Roasts, Opinions, Feedback?

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 03:55 AM

https://soundcloud.app.goo.gl/oKH5LbKgFRjhmxTGA

Geno · 04-11-2021, 06:39 AM

Initial impression...Mix needs some work. vocals need upped or instro needs down.

Ouch · 04-11-2021, 12:05 PM

good beat..... uhhh ya flow isnt mucb,,, I didn't look what wyou werre sahng but I bet it was garbarge... but beat sounded ok and if you could spit itd be str8

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 01:41 PM

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Originally Posted by Ouch

good beat..... uhhh ya flow isnt mucb,,, I didn't look what wyou werre sahng but I bet it was garbarge... but beat sounded ok and if you could spit itd be str8

i can def spit but thanks for the feedback

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 01:43 PM

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Originally Posted by White Earl

Initial impression...Mix needs some work. vocals need upped or instro needs down.

thanks. any positives?

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 01:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Ouch

good beat..... uhhh ya flow isnt mucb,,, I didn't look what wyou werre sahng but I bet it was garbarge... but beat sounded ok and if you could spit itd be str8

mind you this was my first song and recorded verse ever. i flowed over it ogod enough but with practice and more songs i think the delivery will be improved

Answer · 04-11-2021, 01:55 PM

the upside is you've got a decent voice and i dont think your delivery or presence are bad, but the flow definitely needs work. Not really a fan of the beat choice either tbh

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 02:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Answer

the upside is you've got a decent voice and i dont think your delivery or presence are bad, but the flow definitely needs work. Not really a fan of the beat choice either tbh

thanks bro

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 02:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Answer

the upside is you've got a decent voice and i dont think your delivery or presence are bad, but the flow definitely needs work. Not really a fan of the beat choice either tbh

do you think with more songs and more experience with recording i’ll improve flow wise

Ghost1 · 04-11-2021, 02:54 PM

Nah practicing a specific skill over time has been proven to regress the practitioners capabilities actually. You're fucked idiot.

Ghost1 · 04-11-2021, 02:55 PM

And I'm pretty sure that you can't say fag or steelo in 2021

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 02:59 PM

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Originally Posted by Ghost1

And I'm pretty sure that you can't say fag or steelo in 2021

lmfaoooooooo

Lenox · 04-11-2021, 03:00 PM

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Originally Posted by Ghost1

Nah practicing a specific skill over time has been proven to regress the practitioners capabilities actually. You're fucked idiot.

how u doin bags, also do u have a link to the NC discord bro? was looking to join

DMS · 04-11-2021, 10:07 PM

Jon really made this whole thread to pick out positive shit and help with poor self-image. The bars lack a bit and it's a basic as fuck song.

Pakistani Hand Cannon · 04-12-2021, 12:03 AM

flows nice in my opinion - def got a lil sketchy in areas ("dunno how to act i just lie" & couple bars following it were off up until "dont rip track i move weight..." & then onwards its butter. - on the whole its straight, unorthodox, but im with that.

everthing else is just generic though - nothin overly whack - but nothin particularly nice either.

i wasnt mad at it.

i also still say steelo - fuck what year it is.

Ajax · 04-12-2021, 08:57 AM

The commentary at the end came off pretty corny and unnecessary. You don’t need to tell a random listener to suck your dick for no reason.

The track itself was ok. Not bad, by any means. I think it could use some re-takes, because in a couple spots the flow slipped, but the flow in general was solid enough.. What was really missing was delivery — you didn’t sound amped enough. But, that will come with practice, and some of that is definitely a mixing issue... all in all, this was pretty cool. Definitely a good foundation.

The Dead Poet · 04-12-2021, 12:38 PM

Beats cool. Your raps sound like you didn't write it to the beat. It comes off like a text, which is why I hate text rappers over beats normally lol. Your voice wasn't that bad. Delivery was cool. It just really comes off like someone reciting a text over a beat. Work on that shit. peace.

Amen · 04-12-2021, 01:00 PM

You don’t need good content to make it big.

Just dye your hair rainbow colors, wear dresses and high heels and rap about stupid shit that doesn’t even make sense or rhyme while mumbling and you’ll become famous.

Lenox · 04-12-2021, 01:43 PM

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Originally Posted by The Dead Poet

Beats cool. Your raps sound like you didn't write it to the beat. It comes off like a text, which is why I hate text rappers over beats normally lol. Your voice wasn't that bad. Delivery was cool. It just really comes off like someone reciting a text over a beat. Work on that shit. peace.

thanks bro

Lenox · 04-12-2021, 01:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Amen

You don’t need good content to make it big.

Just dye your hair rainbow colors, wear dresses and high heels and rap about stupid shit that doesn’t even make sense or rhyme while mumbling and you’ll become famous.

lmao, hope u liked it

04-11-2021, 06:39 AM	#2
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Initial impression...Mix needs some work. vocals need upped or instro needs down. __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

04-11-2021, 12:05 PM	#3
Ouch Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2019 Posts: 5,684 Battle Record: 1-5 Accomplishments - Lost to Kill Spree Champed - Wall Talking Rep Power: 4052252	good beat..... uhhh ya flow isnt mucb,,, I didn't look what wyou werre sahng but I bet it was garbarge... but beat sounded ok and if you could spit itd be str8 __________________ I just figured out how to change this.

04-12-2021, 08:57 AM	#16
Ajax Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 344 Battle Record: 5-4 Rep Power: 95147	The commentary at the end came off pretty corny and unnecessary. You don’t need to tell a random listener to suck your dick for no reason. The track itself was ok. Not bad, by any means. I think it could use some re-takes, because in a couple spots the flow slipped, but the flow in general was solid enough.. What was really missing was delivery — you didn’t sound amped enough. But, that will come with practice, and some of that is definitely a mixing issue... all in all, this was pretty cool. Definitely a good foundation. __________________ https://soundcloud.com/ajaxinstrumentals Last edited by Ajax; 04-12-2021 at 09:00 AM.

04-12-2021, 12:38 PM	#17
The Dead Poet Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 1,138 Rep Power: 22468536	Beats cool. Your raps sound like you didn't write it to the beat. It comes off like a text, which is why I hate text rappers over beats normally lol. Your voice wasn't that bad. Delivery was cool. It just really comes off like someone reciting a text over a beat. Work on that shit. peace. __________________ https://soundcloud.com/rafael-jesus-martinez

04-11-2021, 01:55 PM	#7
Answer He / Him / His Join Date: Oct 2013 Posts: 1,675 Battle Record: 20-1 Champed - Summer Classic IX - Netcees Battle League - Fight night 15 Rep Power: 12534702	the upside is you've got a decent voice and i dont think your delivery or presence are bad, but the flow definitely needs work. Not really a fan of the beat choice either tbh

04-12-2021, 12:03 AM	#15
Pakistani Hand Cannon Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 1,212 Rep Power: 5303580	flows nice in my opinion - def got a lil sketchy in areas ("dunno how to act i just lie" & couple bars following it were off up until "dont rip track i move weight..." & then onwards its butter. - on the whole its straight, unorthodox, but im with that. everthing else is just generic though - nothin overly whack - but nothin particularly nice either. i wasnt mad at it. i also still say steelo - fuck what year it is.

04-12-2021, 01:00 PM	#18
Amen As-salamu alaykum! Join Date: May 2016 Posts: 8,470 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Season 6 Rep Power: 0	You don’t need good content to make it big. Just dye your hair rainbow colors, wear dresses and high heels and rap about stupid shit that doesn’t even make sense or rhyme while mumbling and you’ll become famous.