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Old 01-28-2019, 04:22 AM   #1
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Old 01-28-2019, 09:21 AM   #2
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@Flow how does 10 lines about how much I hate brits sound?
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@Flow how does 10 lines about how much I hate brits sound?
Sounds like it's going to clash with my ten lines about how much I hate yanks tbh but let's do it
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What's it now? 3-0? At this point it's just lip service you rent a cop failed mod fuck

We can battle back to back for eternity, you'll never see me kneel
Ill give this 'Model' 8 rounds jus to beat him n take back the Steel
Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!
Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..
His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips
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Old 01-31-2019, 08:38 PM   #6
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Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
1st u’ll get a mugshot.. then im makin JPAY for them funds like a prison account
I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!
thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!
I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur
It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!
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Old 01-31-2019, 10:34 PM   #7
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We can battle back to back for eternity, you'll never see me kneel
Ill give this 'Model' 8 rounds jus to beat him n take back the Steel

Dope concept you have here..it's a dope line in way..it's a bit too statement-ish here don't you think..could be improvised..but this was okay..good way to open..lol..niice...

Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!

I enjoy this bar, was pretty dope..I thought it was good..niice one here..man...

Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..

I enjoyed this bar..nice one..cool to picture..I mean pixar..lol..but this was okay..dope...

His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips

Lol..this could be pretty cool..as it is..it's kind of good..okay bar...

Bayou a back to back winner unlike this line biter.. you as crooked as a bend
ironic you'll never see that sort of Blue Streak even after robbing 'gems' from your friends

I thought this was a cool way to close..not too shabby man...

Overall - I enjoy your style flow, it's simple and to the point - it's effecient and makes your opponents wary..nice job...keep it up..lol...

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Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
1st u’ll get a mugshot.. then im makin JPAY for them funds like a prison account

This could be better..a little too mild here..but it was okay..lol...

I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!

This was cool..pretty cool bar here..nice one..man...lol...

thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!

I thought this was okay..could be more improvised..but this was okay..lol...

I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur

This was nice..cool bar...

It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!

Lmao..pretty cool bar..nice one...

Overall - You're pretty nice with it..you are cool with the basics..more so..you're gonna' need to expand ur concepts..but this was okay..lol...

Winner -

Overall - Both did cool..and nice..but I have to go with the battler I thought came more efficient..more clean..and that is flow

V/ Flow
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Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!
HIT
Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..
Ok
His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips
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ironic you'll never see that sort of Blue Streak even after robbing 'gems' from your friends
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Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
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OK
I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!
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thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!
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I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur
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It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!
Ok

v. Flow... a lotta of bad misses from both sides but i give him the edge to him because i think his 2 quotes i liked were better. idk wasnt feeling this battle much gents.
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We can battle back to back for eternity, you'll never see me kneel
Ill give this 'Model' 8 rounds jus to beat him n take back the Steel

Coo opener! Not heavy, but I liked this here

Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!

Ehhh, think the wording on this here kinda lacked. Could have hit way harder if worded right. Ok line tho not terrible!

Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..

Straight here!

His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips

Lol this was fiya!

Bayou a back to back winner unlike this line biter.. you as crooked as a bend
ironic you'll never see that sort of Blue Streak even after robbing 'gems' from your friends

Ok closer!

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Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
1st u’ll get a mugshot.. then im makin JPAY for them funds like a prison account

JPay/Prison account/Mugshot tie in made this hit for me! Good opener

I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!

Fiyaaaa! Haymaker here imo

thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!

Another good hit here! Worded just right with the execution!

I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur

This is coo, light simple hit.

It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!

Think this could have been worded just a little better even executed better. Light closer tho…


Overall this was a cool matchup, I got Zelph. Pretty much was even, but that Mola Ram bar by Z edged him slightly here. Props to both

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We can battle back to back for eternity, you'll never see me kneel
Ill give this 'Model' 8 rounds jus to beat him n take back the Steel

ok

Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!

funny but light

Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..

funny but light

His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips

not feeling this

Bayou a back to back winner unlike this line biter.. you as crooked as a bend
ironic you'll never see that sort of Blue Streak even after robbing 'gems' from your friends

ok




Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
1st u’ll get a mugshot.. then im makin JPAY for them funds like a prison account

cool

I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!

nice

thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!

ok

I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur


funny but light


It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!

ok


both were consistent but i got sheck wes being a little harsher

sheck wes
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We can battle back to back for eternity, you'll never see me kneel
Ill give this 'Model' 8 rounds jus to beat him n take back the Steel
cool intro
Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!
LOL
Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..
I like this.
His axe wound of a face makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips
ehhh, Idk about this brodie
Bayou a back to back winner unlike this line biter.. you as crooked as a bend
ironic you'll never see that sort of Blue Streak even after robbing 'gems' from your friends
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Badge on w/ a tec in ur house.. He’ll get robbed n then split in the mouth
1st u’ll get a mugshot.. then im makin JPAY for them funds like a prison account
i fuck with this
I’m here to lay u to rest. Temple of Doom, aim for this mark’ w the tecs
Look what I’m totin’ fam, Mola Ram - one arm will rip ur heart out ur chest!
dope, Indiana Jone on Netflix
thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!
another good bar
I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur
more swaggy but nice
It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!
ehh, decent closer


vote Sheck in a close one. Props to both these Gs
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Okay
Feel me stacking the chips up, son you ain't got the green
It's easy to put money where your mouth is when yours looks like a slot machine!
Hit. Good one.
Last week's theme kids but imma maul cop like Paul Blart bitch!
Easy to beat a prick when half his lines he Pixar straight outta Disney flicks..
Meh
His axe wound of a face Good phrase makes every bitch he ever meets sick
Shit.. Only way lips giving a diamond ring is if the vajazzaler slips
Okay
Bayou a back to back winner unlike this line biter.. you as crooked as a bend
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Why are you using split in the mouth? Is that a strategy?
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Okay. Good
thought ur hoe was hot bro? She’s not yo I love this; simple but good, teller’ swallow this Glock smoke
I’ll leave a round in her mouth while the hogs cookin over the fire like a pot roast!
Okay
I’ll blast u & ur mentor. Once Lars is gone who will u send for?
Hit. Good
Aint horsin’ around.. but I’m literally a beast wit the arms like a centaur
Corny
It ain’t ur day wen I let it spray. Fuck it let the hammer expose you
Then I’m at ya grave.. lettin it ring in a box like a marriage proposal!
Also corny but okay

Not really loving either verse here.

It's Flow's slot machine and axe wound of a face vs. Sheck's an Indiana Jones line and blast your mentor

I'm gonna narrowly edge this one to vote Sheck Wes

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Literally came down to one more consistent line to me..
slot machine was jokes
pixar cool concept not so much execution
closer was ehh

sheck -- lots of gunbars here
Mola Ram was lotb possibly..
very close, opener & pot roast were almost
centaur wasnt that good lol

vote sheck by a bar
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Old 02-03-2019, 07:15 AM   #14
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LOOOOOOL Flow, stop it

didn’t get your opener, liked slot machine, Pixar wordplay was nice but needed rewording and saw someone used on in the chat thread also which maybe took away from its impact slightly here. The vajazzle idea was good conceptually but worded sloppy. didn’t get the closer tbh

Zelph: JPAY was a dope idea but didn’t land with any sting because of the similie you went for, needed some Allen Knight type wording to make it really land, you know? I didn’t get a Mola ram. round in mouth been done, hog roast similie made it too simple sounding again here - with better wording it could have lander harder I think. LOL I fuck with centaur even though these text battle cats won’t, prob get scrutinised for not attacking the opponent but ehhhhh outside of these forums I can fuck with that line. Lol. Pretty sure I’ve heard/watched/read something along the lines of that ring in a box shit before but not saying you bit or anything, just that it’s not as fresh as you maybe think

still had Zelph ahead marginally with Flow’s wording of a couple concepts being what decided it.
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