Kushstream Vol. III: Wonderous

ACTIVATE SELF · 04-28-2018, 11:30 AM

I woke up
stuck inside a construct.
Dumbfounded
by my surroundings
and awestruck.
What the fuck was going on?
Why was I so conscious and self-aware?
The answer?
It wasn't clear.
The logic?
Just wasn't there.
But honest
I didn't care.
I promise
I wasn't scared.
No cautions
or mental fears.
My problems
throughout the years?
My spirit was unprepared.
My ego was in control.
A product of social code
to mold me into a drone.

Since Moses's holy stones
and Romulus founded Rome
as old as the catacombs
that keep the scattered bones
of priest whom mattered most
hide secrets they never told.
Like keys to free my soul.
The reason that I exist?
My piece completes the whole.
Can teach me how to think
but wisdom is what I know.

Instinctively from the go
like water my knowledge flows.
It's khemistry can explode.
Seducing my temporal lobe
so memories will unclothe.
Exposing the bitter ghosts
of misery in the folds.

"remember me when I'm gone..."

If mentally I elope
and enter the Astral Zone
to spiritually just atone
for hoping their theories hold.
Neglecting my kundalini
accepting their isotopes.
Investing in modern homes
while skippin the rabbit holes.
If Alice is still alive
the Hatter is not alone.
...nope.

Sammy · 04-28-2018, 12:01 PM

dope.

technically sound. i fucks with the approach, tho. got the vibe of a flex piece while treading the self-consciousness theme that's so prevalent in much of your work.

the ending was the highlight to me. keep scribing, pawtna.

ACTIVATE SELF · 08-26-2018, 11:46 PM

1x

Exis · 08-27-2018, 01:12 AM

I got you breathren, I'll hit you up with some comments when I get a moment fam...word is bond.

ACTIVATE SELF · 08-27-2018, 11:49 AM

No worries, Ex. I'm in the mist of revamping it.

Exis · 08-27-2018, 11:18 PM

Really came back & shit vanished lol...

ACTIVATE SELF · 08-28-2018, 12:34 AM

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Exis · 08-28-2018, 01:04 AM

Lol...I love the openin' stanza, really painted a picture there.Imagery as a whole is dope (as with all your pieces) & really like how your so Witty but ain't @Witty...Idk what you actually edited as it disappeared, but I like what I just read fam...that Moses section was raw imo.

Stay droppin' bombs my friend.

04-28-2018, 12:01 PM	#2
Sammy Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2015 Posts: 103 Champed - Write Week 7 Rep Power: 3415772	dope. technically sound. i fucks with the approach, tho. got the vibe of a flex piece while treading the self-consciousness theme that's so prevalent in much of your work. the ending was the highlight to me. keep scribing, pawtna.

08-27-2018, 01:12 AM	#4
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	I got you breathren, I'll hit you up with some comments when I get a moment fam...word is bond.

08-27-2018, 11:18 PM	#6
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Really came back & shit vanished lol...

08-28-2018, 01:04 AM	#8
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Lol...I love the openin' stanza, really painted a picture there.Imagery as a whole is dope (as with all your pieces) & really like how your so Witty but ain't @Witty...Idk what you actually edited as it disappeared, but I like what I just read fam...that Moses section was raw imo. Stay droppin' bombs my friend.