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Old 08-21-2018, 09:46 PM   #1
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end
stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut
stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em
ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name
dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch
n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken

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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face
Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf
You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life
If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test
Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head

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I got Dy on his first 3 bars
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end

Too easy

stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut

Garbage

stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em

Ok

ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name

Ok

dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch

Played

n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken

Nah

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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face

Wording sucks ok idea

Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf

Eh

You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life

Wording

If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test

Liked this

Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head

Wording

Dyno pregnancy test bar was the best one

Both need to work on wording and not settling for low hanging fruit concepts
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Old 08-22-2018, 09:31 PM   #9
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end
this was a pretty cool, pretty sure it’s been used on DynamiCz though so some impact is taken away
stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut
ok
stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em
nice
ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name
good again
dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch
nah corny and lame
n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken
i don’t get it

3 good
1 ok
2 misses

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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face
alright, setup coulda been better
Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf
ok again, you’re having good concept but aren’t executing them to their fullest potential
You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life
cool, i liked this lol
If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test
ha, dope
Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head
nah it was worded weird

2 good
2 ok
1 mss


Close battle, not sure why dyno didn’t match Ryno in number of lines. I feel like if he did then he could have won it. Cool battle but I got Ryno slightly edging it.


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Old 08-22-2018, 09:55 PM   #10
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end

This is a chill opener here, not to much impact, but its cool to begin with

stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut

Ehh, this is decent here, didn't really punch with it, but coo

stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em

Lmao, now this is nice...good wording on execution too

ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name

Lmao, this hit for me as well

dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch


Son, if this would have been formulated better this could have been, the wording made it seem kinda off brandish, decent tho

n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken

Feel like you could have ended this on a better note, not really feeling your ending bar...


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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face

This is nice here for a opener imo, hit for me

Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf

Ehh, a little to simple punch wise, wording cool tho

You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life

This was fiya!!! I think this was better then my Pinata line or close to it


If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test

Yoooo this was nasty!

Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head

Ehhhh, Potato head lines kinda played out to me....decent tho


Yo im not going to even lie, this was a coo little read here for both....Ryno was cool in areas, but a lot of his punches didn't have heavy impact on them. Dyno had some hitters no lie and they hurt lol. Both still got work to do, but good shit on both ends. Props to both!

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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end
-cool
stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut
-decent
stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em
-I liked this
ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name
-I get it but kind of a weak hit
dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch
-not feeling this
n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken
-not feeling this


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Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face
-good could have executed better
Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf
-cool
You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life
-liked this
If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test
-cool
Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head
-decent but wording hurt it

Read both of you guys’ verse a couple times because this one was close, I had Ryno starting off strong but the last couple bars didn’t really hit too hard. Some wording hurt Dyno but was imo a bit more consistent. It was close but I’m going with Dyno. Good battle guys.
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both had decent opening lines, and the Dyno's Rhino/bone concept could've been line of the battle if worded differently. Both verses felt about the same, with the major difference being Ryno's delivery was much better. Both verses had very simple concepts, but Ryno's wording made them hit a bit harder.

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Ryno

homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end

Decent here

stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut

Pretty cool

stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em

Wp decent/ok here

ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name

Decent here, tie in just OK

dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch

Eh this was just ok

n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken

Ok finisher

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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face

coo start

Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf

Felt like this was too simple could've did more

You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life

Eh not feeling this, its decent I guess

If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test

Pretty coo here

Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head

Nah


Was a pretty decent battle here not a bad read but I felt dynos verse was rushed and had unfinished concepts or just couldve did more. After breaking down and reading both straight through I got Ryno taking this one.
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end
ehh, kinda basic
stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut
another basicish line
stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em
nice
ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name
fuck with it
dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch
basic bars brodie
n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken
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One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face
lol worded off but still nice
Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf
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You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life
dope, wording tho
If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test
nice
Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head
st8

I got Dyno here in a close one. Good battle fellas, clean up the wording on both sides
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end

(Okay. The flip was basic imo and I’ve seen similar concepts on enbombz. Wording pretty good although I think you could have set it up better)

stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut

(Feel same about this as above. The flip was pretty basic and the wording isn’t perfect both ways. I’ve seen this concept done and slightly better recently)

stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em

(You’re new (I think) so this not really your fault but still can’t give you a G pass. The wording is pretty good and crisp but Dinosaur has been done a bunch on dynamicz so this felt played. The execution wasn’t bad though)

ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name

(Lol funny current event reference. This was okay. The reference saved you because the flip wasn’t stellar)

dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch

(Lol funny diss to me. It’s a shot/camera shot flip which is pretty basic but this one landed for me because of the humor)

n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken

(Ahhh I see where you were going with this. You set this one up well. Wings his punches were cool. ‘Dropped quicker than he chicken’ wasn’t a great way to end it. You needed a stronger association here like drop into the frier. Cool concept but fumbled it at the end)



One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face

(This was grimey. Think you coulda worded the “now you not a fake” part better but overall this is good)

Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf

(Maybe I just remember too much lol but yeah someone just used a rye bread np on him a few weeks ago. Regardless, I think you flipped this a bit too basic)

You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life

(Okay this is solid. Wording definitely needs to be cleaned up but the concept was good. This landed)

If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test

(DNA/blood flip is ehh to me (b/c no one would call blood dna) but this was pretty cool. On the strip tied in nicely. This is decent)

Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head

(Okay. I see where you were going. Knock eyes ears and nose off doesn’t really fit - seems forced in to make the concept work. Once you get past that - leave holes in they place is pretty good. Not a bad closer)



Pretty good battle imo and I enjoyed the read. Both guys got plenty of potential.

Ryno, I thought you caught the short end of the stick though this week. You had bright spots but you also had a lot of concepts I’ve seen before. Not always your fault but I think you coulda came with more creativity.

Dyno had some nice hard hitting concepts. I think you had the better concepts and also your execution was a notch above Ryno’s imo. I think you edged this one.

Mvgt Dynomight
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homie we know ur on the down low, just a poser that pretends
i mean how could u hide it, sparks fly when dynomight gets lit up from the end
Literally the first nameplay anyone would think of for this guy...nah
stop the games bro its enough, u never tote its all a bluff
only way u could stomach having a gun on u, is when i shove this shotty in ur gut
Didn't like this
stop pretendin’ with the knucks son, we know ur not a real one
my uppercut’ll make dyno soar so high, he’ll crash land like the meteor that killed em
Again...very obvious nameplay
ur talent level isnt flames, judging off of skill this cat is lame
i mean ur such an awful competitor, jalen ramsey should of dropped ur name
Ok
dont act like ur about the streets, we know u live the suburban life kid
only time u took multple shots in front of ur home, was on ur prom night bitch
Cool...rhyming a bit forced but not bad
n we know ur not a scrapper, i’ve read the scout reports my nigga listen
if ur in a fight w/ might, he wings his punches n gets dropped quicker than the chicken
don't get it

Vs.

One punch and your mouth will break
Now u not a fake . Rhinos suppose to have bones coming out they face
Nah...again too obvious
Woman don’t give u a grain of respect. Sex u ain’t coming close
But if Rye bred I’ll slice that kid to pieces like the fucking loaf
Better...kinda ok
You couldn’t cut it where I chill if u went and got a knife
This animal a get his insides spilled tryna hang around the party.. that’s piñata life
ok
If I catch you out on the avenue believe ur headed for death
Cuz I ain’t hesitating to spill ya DNA on the strip like a pregnancy test
LOTB easily...dope
Playing with me ? U better off playing dead
Knock ya eyes nose, ears off. Leave holes in they place u mr potatoe head
decent

That DNA shit killed Ryno...it was very close up until that point.

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