09-17-2018, 02:44 AM | #1 |
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Titanium suit inside padded with Tasmanian wool
Rabies, scabies and drool Glacier proof layering, insulated, they say we were raised by the wolves Crazy as loons—skating lagoons—painted maroon Bullet fresh in its face—serenade of the swoon The leap of faith from the secret gate Feet chained by seasons change Feed the brain the seed of rain The jubilations of June The clay crustacean The root Muddy hands, straining the juice, pink and brown, gravying through Shaping it smooth, playing with it like a baby would do Engraving illustrations in the cave where I drew the manifestation of you Stooping down to your elevation to get an observational view Devastation and doom: angels flew ablaze and a swoop Revelations, ancient calculations, patiently waiting for doom Chained at the waist, they’re taking you through the stages of truth Realizational loops. No one exempt, nobody, none of sacred excuse The planet is angled obtuse: gravitational pull-pull—pull strain The recluse of the galaxy into a dangerous youth Tribal celebrating: winter blazing—the fumes The rage of the blue flame of the ocean before it gave in, sank in and drooped Adam & Eve forsaking the fruit, Satan is raising—displaying the flute Playing to the vacant stadium entertaining the mute The waste of the sewers over-flowing escaping The remains of the tombs gutted in a momentous wave through a womb Ruins in shambles, bow and arrows, razor toothed saber-tooth on the loose Space boots on the roof—big foot running out of the woods—jumping straight for the moon Himalayan chief descending down from the banks of Peru Constellation gurus, a man the atheists knew, the savior Who the remains of the pages allude to, but negate to include Divine being of all, weighted in jewels, strength of a mule Tank on a zoom— aiming—ricochet—and—kaboom! Billions of tanks of fuel disintegrating on cue Breath taking debut, dazed and aloof, concentration acute Music to a bloody ear: only an M80 could soothe Stench looms from a good buddy slumped in his bravery goop The remains of the troops are making their way through Hades Mother Nature, the calendar dates, wait, they were true Breath pasty and ghosts parading with holes in their blankets: amused Boo! The elephant moves and gracefulness ensues Right hand decapitated, the crew running low on rations—making due In dire straits, I break out the 22 from my ankle and bull's eye brang' down a Canadian moose In stage 2 of Hypothermia— deranged and subdued Hanging from a strain of DNA— Civilization Molten lava, instantaneous pools of brimstone—precipitation'll cool Winter blazing brazen, flew in the face of an ice age as it blew My soul out soars the sunward bird to the cage— to the coop To the point of no return Faded *poof*
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09-17-2018, 11:37 AM | #2 |
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Frank u the man tho
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Jesus. Imagery you conjured up with this is insane.
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Frank sure isn’t slept on here
Dude is ridiculous with it He showed some ring rust here in truth, to me, but I’m very familiar with his work so maybe that’s why there’s not more replies on this one of his? Always good to see him posting around these parts though Keep that pen moving! |
09-21-2018, 06:01 PM | #5 |
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Hey frank good to see you back around. This outstanding work with amazing bits of imagery. As usual you don’t disappoint. How bout you check out the writers league and gift us with more of your brand of writing.
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09-21-2018, 11:48 PM | #6 |
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frank that ur universe account?
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Such a good read, makes me wanna pen sumfin
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pretty dope through and through
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Well damn. This shit is crazy. Its been a long time for me since ive been into any text shit. But shit like this os what got me into it in the first place years ago. Reading shit like this makes me wanna write the best shit ive ever written in my life lmao.
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Quality work, @Frankie.
You're one of the niftiest with it...could argue a fewww lines had some reaches for a phrase or rhyme to keep the scheme going...but that's picky stuff and not any-'ol writer can keep this up so long...so for what it was, a multi-extravaganza I thought you executed well. From a rhyme scheme perspective: Realizational loops. No one exempt, nobody, none of sacred excuse The planet is angled obtuse: gravitational pull-pull—pull strain The recluse of the galaxy into a dangerous youth As a reader, for some reason my mind/ear was "begging" for a little rhyme with "strain"...before you go on with the "oo" vowel sound into infinity... (PROPS it was well done; if I have to pick at something: I just wanted an internal "ain" on the next line or somethin'...I donno.) Glad you're the gatekeeper for the labor camp that is the AOWL. I may be almost burnt out, but for the time being your commisionership is "un-earthing" occasional "real" efforts, however satirical, from me. Thanks for playing with words on the Lime playground. &GL Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 02-27-2023 at 07:05 PM. |
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