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Old 10-07-2014, 07:53 PM   #1
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perennial inflorescence of any 6 seconds are chimed
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hearing the crickets sing, so monotone yet obscurely composed
feels like they're talking to me, as i walk on the leaves that i cross
demure. you're so provocative. and i'm surely a ghost
crunching of autumn, is like a skeleton field for tiny trees in the fall
to possess you is a perfect choice, and you're as alluring, a host
sunbathed petals, drowning in jack'o'lanterns of coffee & pumpkin
squash the soggy leaves, after a beer. underneath the frothy assumptions


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living a martyr. nose-dive a dotted plane into soil
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you were the cotton in an aspirin, a linen in my attire i wasnt accustom
to go into combat for you with a war-drobe and the cloth that it's cut from
ungodly. the humdrum. i couldnt acquire the taste
you were so tongue in cheek with me. i blushed into haste, when you asked if i'd want some



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where we aren't drunk, or having sex. sigh. where you just complete me
developments real. the buzzing of broken street lights. are loud
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you need so badly what i have, but now i don't even want
hows it feel to have it? i couldnt sate it but maybe i was deeply depressed
it doesnt diminish my character. but it diminishes you. exposes your WEAKNESS. you werent even a friend
you poked fun at my features, especially crucial to the dent near my nose
which were filled with rain drops from my pupils. there now tears are used as placeholders, for now they're never exposed
so hastily brash, sorta insane, but with class,
you took the sage and lit ablaze the incense with aroma my nasal could grasp
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you were into astrology. i read the sign of a pisces for august 10th and copied it cause i knew you would make the connection
i manipulated myself, but in that i manipulated you
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dissipating. pointless. ventilating. poignant. vision aided moistness
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks

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Old 10-07-2014, 09:07 PM   #2
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Every time you post in OM I have to use "google define" a bunch of times, which is giving props to your vocabulary. I am working on reading this and will post what I think, when I have the time.
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damn I was in the middle of reading & appreciating this... and got distracted by a topic that I had to get another screenshot of.

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Damn, this shit was dope. I'm gonna have to give it a second read because I felt some sort of difference between the first two parts, and the third part.

I'll reread this in the AOWL after your opponent posts. Now that I saw the topic line, I completely forgot what you wrote.
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Old 10-08-2014, 11:41 AM   #4
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damn I was in the middle of reading & appreciating this... and got distracted by a topic that I had to get another screenshot of.



Damn, this shit was dope. I'm gonna have to give it a second read because I felt some sort of difference between the first two parts, and the third part.

I'll reread this in the AOWL after your opponent posts. Now that I saw the topic line, I completely forgot what you wrote.
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks

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Old 10-08-2014, 11:44 AM   #5
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Old 10-08-2014, 11:46 AM   #6
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks

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I misunderstand the bb. All apologies.

Dead man = 2nd verse

Me 1st verse split 3rd. But that I'm not positive about that.
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Old 10-08-2014, 12:04 PM   #8
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I misunderstand the bb. All apologies.

Dead man = 2nd verse

Me 1st verse split 3rd. But that I'm not positive about that.
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That all makes sense. I made my guesses after a cursory glance, using surface level analysis (word choice, opening, etc.). For example, I can't recall deadman starting off one of his pieces with 'I' although I'm sure he has. Whereas I do it quite a bit (or s/he if it's a story type piece). That's just an example. Some other surface level stuff lead me to my conclusion. But word.
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pure talent. top notch, those first two stanzas. in the third, the content is good, but from a technical aspect i can tell you freestyled or free versed. which is okay, but it seemed a vastly different kind of flow than the first two stanzas.
some very creative similes/ phraseology, particularly with respect to a significant other. seems authentic, translating thoughts&feelings to the page. lol but if you told me u jus made it up out of nowhere on the spot that also wouldn't surprise me either. anyway, i think you need to always use your best effort because it will mean great things.
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i make comments about the writing before i read other people's comments (for obvious reasons).

but now as i scroll above it would appear that this was a collab.
i stand by what i said, of course #3 doesn't "go with" #1&2,
but on it's own it is fine.. took me some re-reads/examination because the first time reading the whole thing i was thrown off by the change. but IMO even the end of #3 is still different from the rest of #3. Split if that's you, it would appear we just have different styles. i "got" most of it; not all. and i guess somewhere in my comments there's a pun about the word split
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i make comments about the writing before i read other people's comments (for obvious reasons).

but now as i scroll above it would appear that this was a collab.
i stand by what i said, of course #3 doesn't "go with" #1&2,
but on it's own it is fine.. took me some re-reads/examination because the first time reading the whole thing i was thrown off by the change. but IMO even the end of #3 is still different from the rest of #3. Split if that's you, it would appear we just have different styles. i "got" most of it; not all. and i guess somewhere in my comments there's a pun about the word split
nope. just me
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This was indeed nice. My favorite was the first verse. I shall quote you my favorite renditions of this interpretation.

"sunbathed petals, drowning in jack'o'lanterns of coffee & pumpkin
squash the soggy leaves, after a beer. underneath the frothy assumptions"

"you were the cotton in an aspirin, a linen in my attire i wasnt accustom
to go into combat for you with a war-drobe and the cloth that it's cut from
ungodly. the humdrum. i couldnt acquire the taste
you were so tongue in cheek with me. i blushed into haste, when you asked if i'd want some"

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As you can see I quoted the ending or near end to your stanzas, which goes to say that I especially enjoyed the way you closed each verse. Which is essentially a summary, a conclusion of the theoretical analysis, which in this case is one of mimicry.
I found it intriguing how you stylistically and succinctly did this in order to mimic other fellow writers. I cannot say much about this, since I have not been exposed to the nuances of the material they encrypt. I will need to bask more of their writings to comprehend the finer points you are trying to resonate in. But, I will say in the time I have been here I have tried to expose myself to this "characters". Although, I did notice the stylistic shift in illustration, and of expression I cannot say there was absolute resemblance to what I have been previously exposed to.
But perhaps as I said that is due to my own unknowing.

Thank you...

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