07-10-2020, 11:08 PM | #1 |
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I'm the Rainman without the retardation.
Got visuals from a weed brownie and no one on the streets found me. I make battle raps for the masses. You're classless, and I'll burn you with matches; turn you to ashes. I rhyme whole sentences w/ MY dope penmanship. Maybe you can find hope. Take what I wrote, compare it to Zygote. Get your eye poked. As a sidenote, what is actually written will shut down your vascular system. ...You're mad absurd. Just rap your verse. Take this like you had it first. You're acting like your wear is worse. You're barely heard. Making sense of why I shared this verse. |
07-12-2020, 07:34 PM | #2 |
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As a sidenote, what is actually written will shut down your vascular system.
...You're mad absurd. Just rap your verse. Take this like you had it first. Dope shit. I liked it all if I'm honest...scheme & imagery was nice, good stuff. |
07-12-2020, 11:06 PM | #3 |
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Meh, seems basic but not in a good way in any sense
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07-13-2020, 01:48 AM | #4 |
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Feel like you do your best work when you're inspired and it was clearly not this, but I liked the way it flowed you could just feel the ehhh whatever vibe radiating off of it
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07-23-2020, 02:50 AM | #5 |
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07-27-2020, 09:50 PM | #6 | |
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"I rhyme whole sentences w/ MY dope penmanship."
I feel like youre mocking me...or Zygote...probably. Anyway, not up to your usual standard. it completely fell apart at the end. i saw you drop a top tier verse or two in GWL. This one was a throw away But it's all good. I've written my fair share of throwaways, too.
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07-29-2020, 05:46 AM | #7 |
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Gotta agree with a few of the feed you've gotten, You've done light years better than this.
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