itt i tell you why you suck as a writer

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by Frank Metts

Something about paragraph form without propose punctuation

if you were to ever write an open mic it'd be in paragraph form like all of your disucssion posts. everyone's eyes would glaze over like you seeing a mcdonalds menu

[Certain]

@PancakeBrah, you are obsessed with interesting rhymes and too often let them guide your verses. Your rhymes and schemes are elite level, but you're often a syllable or three too long or too short, hurting your cadence. You write about things that mean a lot to you, like pretty white girls, but you often seem to intentionally ignore the frames of reference of your readers. You like juxtaposition a bit too much. And you sometimes go on runs of trying to write like other people, but you're not zygote and don't pull it off as well as him. Also, you might be my favorite writer on this site.

[NYCSPITZ]

I knew it was cristian @Darth Yoda u fucking liar

he knows ur ip ur phantom is ghost

pancake do me get real specific like the exact tier (top-mid-low-top)

[veritas]

Me please?

[Fig]

Do VERITAS

It'd be cool

[Darth Yoda]

IPs don't mean much and I think everyone except .. void? has the same IP atm. Not to add to the mysterious aura or anything.


and @Certain shoots from halfcourttttttttt!!!!!

score

[Frank Metts]

Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

if you were to ever write an open mic it'd be in paragraph form like all of your disucssion posts. everyone's eyes would glaze over like you seeing a mcdonalds menu

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=1...ght=Chess+game


It's the only open mic I've ever dropped here ... Was teaching the children how to write creatively as a coping skill and started this


Also you indulge in more calories a day then me... Eat a burrito when your 32 and watch your stomach look like a snakes who just ate a rat..

[Zen]

I have still not been told why I suck.

[veritas]

Originally Posted by Frank Metts

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=1...ght=Chess+game


It's the only open mic I've ever dropped here ... Was teaching the children how to write creatively as a coping skill and started this


Also you indulge in more calories a day then me... Eat a burrito when your 32 and watch your stomach look like a snakes who just ate a rat..

That was a dope open.

[Darth Yoda]

zneland suck cause taxi driver wannabe homeless 11-14 backwards mad posts since jan 2013

[Frank Metts]

Originally Posted by The Mind Assassin

That was a dope open.

Thanks V

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by Certain

@PancakeBrah, you are obsessed with interesting rhymes and too often let them guide your verses. Your rhymes and schemes are elite level, but you're often a syllable or three too long or too short, hurting your cadence. You write about things that mean a lot to you, like pretty white girls, but you often seem to intentionally ignore the frames of reference of your readers. You like juxtaposition a bit too much. And you sometimes go on runs of trying to write like other people, but you're not zygote and don't pull it off as well as him. Also, you might be my favorite writer on this site.

I think you recognize the zeitgeist of the site, and write accordingly, with your own particular strength for wording and grammar. If I were to write the most PancakeBrah verse possible, and you were to write the most Certain Serpent verse possible, they'd be near identical, with mine being a being a bit more real, emotional, and personable with yours a bit more refined, professional, and executed. You have a knack for wording; you are fully aware that the majority of AOWL members can't truly write to write and you take advantage. For some reason you take stock in your record and your 'vote streak', as petty as that is. I do as well. If I were to pick a doppleganger for myself on this site it'd be you, but there are differences. You are a bit more rote; I am a bit more bleeding heart. In the heart of this topic, the reason why you suck as a writer...sometimes you come off as emotion machine X in topicals. You perfect what you write but more than half the time it seems to me that its just a possible interpretation. Like, 'this verse seems like what sadness would feel like'. You write it as well as can be done, but I don't feel it. Its all a bit dry.

Also, you're probably one of my favorite writers *dullboy/bwhahha emoji*

[NYCSPITZ]

what would u say about dead man

[TYSON]

Originally Posted by Zenland

I have still not been told why I suck.

[Split]

I don't count my win against Genocide because Zygote voted against me

[veritas]

Me please.

[Destroyer]

I'm through being ignored. you'll see me in the OM soon enough

[Certain]

Originally Posted by Split Eight

I don't count my win against Genocide because Zygote voted against me

I love zygote, but his voting is weird. So is yours.

[Cashius]

Me.

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by The Mind Assassin

Me please.

I've clicked on all of your open mics. They're just an extension of your boarding, whether you're trolling or not. Purposefully inaccessible and vague. You use big words to try to add to your legend of intelligence. In the end no one really likes them, even if they say they do. You're a mix of black d and Split Eight if neither knew how to write an affecting thought, or original rhyme scheme. Your undermining of Discussion through boarding is justified but Open Mic is a legitimate place to try to be creative and you undermine it in all the wrong ways.