show me an S&F swaggier and flowier than this

[namix]

Originally Posted by Seyance

lotta shit didn't work, was forced in.. maybe would rhyme in real life better though. lacked witt and wordplay, plus the wording used didn't feel very natural so the swag factor didn't come through much. quite a few of the "multi syllable rhymes" weren't even multi's as there were words in that didn't rhyme, so it throws the whole multi off.

a few references didn't work, seemed like they were put there to just rhyme. knowing people are idiots and don't actually read verses properly, they just skim and miss it. things like the week old mastiff line, surely a week old mastiff wouldn't have that much adrenalin yet.. as it has only just opened its eyes and probably can't even walk. maybe i'm missing something with that one.

shit was alright yeah, but not thread worthy.. if you want to look at good snf.. go find championship matches. it's like when people ask questions on here and facebook, when googling it would be waaay easier, faster and more accurate.

2c.

your critique was solid until the analogy of google searching

it was waaay easier for me to create this thread than making a fruitless attempt at searching through archives of nothingness yo ;)

Cake I've ignored u without using the feature

this began a while ago tho

Not to mention I was speaking to chyeahhh not to pancakecerealbowl

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by Rawn M.D.

Cake I've ignored u without using the feature

this began a while ago tho

Not to mention I was speaking to chyeahhh not to pancakecerealbowl

I offered a truce.

Don't let namix's quote fool you. You use the A and I vowel schemes that have been done a thousand times without saying a damn thing.

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by Aero

Vote: Rawn

Problem, little guy?

[StarFaggot]

None at all you big bear faggot.

Rawn is dope at S & F...

You're good at what you do but I'd advise you to stay in your lane.

I say mucho

and the scheme sounds dope which is what snf is in my eyes

audibly to me it sounds very dope bc of the vowels

and I didn't make the thread...

[StarFaggot]

Seyance you're a faggot. Namix asked you to provide a better swag n flow verse not be a bitter bitch and breakdown a verse that no one asked you to.

[namix]

as a whole i typically view swag & flow as an excuse to be conceptually lazy

but i liked rawn's verse - and am interested in reading others that are of equal or greater caliber


Pent & Geno - will check your battle out tomorrow for sure.

[PancakeBrah]

Aero want me to send you nudes? Or sex pics? I will.

Rawn I'll admit the scheme and flow was dope. But A-I based verses are done to death, and it wasn't what I look for in a sanfor verse.

[veritas]

Rawn got skillz.

[veritas]

@Hush

Hush when you exit your current co dependent mom live in life partner situation then you may have a chamce of mattering in the realm of opinion you insect faced beetle larvae.

[Seyance]

the back flips past is hat tricks black lips scheme has been done to death. probably one of known as one of the easiest multi sets around, very much like the similar take this fake is basic lame shit scheme.

when critiquing a verse.. one of the things i take into account is the difficulty of the craft. how hard was that to write? in similar way the judges critique say a diving competition, an easy dive would be safe and register a score, but would never be able to get a high score. a harder to complete dive has the possibility for a higher score.. but has it's own pitfalls when being so ambitious.

edit: stfu aero, me/pan vs you/rawn pinkslip forever?

I've already said why I elect to utilize that SC heme

and besides the two of u it seems to have been appreciated in general

u can't please everyone tho

[Zen]

This is pretty dope. Props

[PancakeBrah]

Originally Posted by Seyance

the back flips past is hat tricks black lips scheme has been done to death. probably one of known as one of the easiest multi sets around, very much like the similar take this fake is basic lame shit scheme

QFT 2x

One of the few times I agree with Sey.

That shit is so easy to rhyme. Challenge yourself.

[namix]

i'd like to join the Aero/Rawn team vs. Seyance/Pancake in a permanent pinkslip? can you guys pick up another dude?

lets make it crazy as fuck for a dope perma ban match.

like literally - perma IP bans and subsequent bans if aliases are identified... let's make it hurt

[Eŋg]

Originally Posted by Seyance

the back flips past is hat tricks black lips scheme has been done to death. probably one of known as one of the easiest multi sets around, very much like the similar take this fake is basic lame shit scheme.

when critiquing a verse.. one of the things i take into account is the difficulty of the craft. how hard was that to write? in similar way the judges critique say a diving competition, an easy dive would be safe and register a score, but would never be able to get a high score. a harder to complete dive has the possibility for a higher score.. but has it's own pitfalls when being so ambitious.

edit: stfu aero, me/pan vs you/rawn pinkslip forever?

don't talk about craft until you learn how to use the possessive apostrophe, plz.

and what you're basically saying is you sit there and look at how long the guy must have lamented over contrived rhyme schemes. awesome, noble pursuit.

verse was tight.

[Nigma]

@oXus we should be friends.

[Seyance]

sad weirdo scrub, you know grammar policing is literally the most played to death pathetic way of replying to posts ever. is that what constitutes as a noble pursuit for you?

obviously it's liked in general, so is 2 chains and wocka.

[Cashius]

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