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dead man · 07-24-2014, 08:19 AM

off bat i was pretty sure this AND unbornbuddha were zygote aliases.

lame as fuck if thats the case

Ghost1 · 07-24-2014, 08:56 PM

Im recruitin for my crew jeso

U lookin to crew up dog?

Zen · 08-02-2014, 03:12 AM

A Gory warrior Driven by the Force Within,
Not Crooked people Judging the World We Live In,

The quoted line above was my favorite of this, even though "Gory warrior" just seems off. As for the rhyming of this, it was terrific. Especially considering that English isn't your first language. The thing is, after I read all 419,000 lines of this, I had no idea what I just read. That's the probably the alcohol's fault, but I don't think so. This was cool though.

Pharaohs Army · 08-03-2014, 12:37 AM

for whatever reasons, perhaps my own strengths and weaknesses, my opinion is that it was way better in the middle parts than in the beginning...it's all relative of course. I like the piece. but the large middle was stronger than the beginning and end i thought.

some lines i found very entertaining i am lazy right now to go through and paste them specifically but i will here edit this at some point, and do so.

(edit)this is pretty awesome when i did it faster; the beginning too... thanks for the celery line

JESODIST · 08-05-2014, 11:13 PM

Attention everyone that commented and gave me feedback...I will work harder on my next post. I will check each and everyone of your posts individually and give my opinion about your raps. Thanks for everything.

Darker Ego · 11-28-2014, 12:24 AM

Bump

07-24-2014, 08:19 AM	#1
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	off bat i was pretty sure this AND unbornbuddha were zygote aliases. lame as fuck if thats the case __________________ Zack Wicks for president

08-03-2014, 12:37 AM	#4
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	for whatever reasons, perhaps my own strengths and weaknesses, my opinion is that it was way better in the middle parts than in the beginning...it's all relative of course. I like the piece. but the large middle was stronger than the beginning and end i thought. some lines i found very entertaining i am lazy right now to go through and paste them specifically but i will here edit this at some point, and do so. (edit)this is pretty awesome when i did it faster; the beginning too... thanks for the celery line Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-05-2014 at 12:22 AM.

08-02-2014, 03:12 AM	#3
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	A Gory warrior Driven by the Force Within, Not Crooked people Judging the World We Live In, The quoted line above was my favorite of this, even though "Gory warrior" just seems off. As for the rhyming of this, it was terrific. Especially considering that English isn't your first language. The thing is, after I read all 419,000 lines of this, I had no idea what I just read. That's the probably the alcohol's fault, but I don't think so. This was cool though.

08-05-2014, 11:13 PM	#5
JESODIST Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 308 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 976839	Attention everyone that commented and gave me feedback...I will work harder on my next post. I will check each and everyone of your posts individually and give my opinion about your raps. Thanks for everything.

11-28-2014, 12:24 AM	#6
Darker Ego Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2014 Posts: 137 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Bump