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Split · 08-25-2014, 08:07 PM

ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS

LIKE A MAZDA COMMERCIAL

Kin · 08-25-2014, 08:10 PM

Is it juz me or does anyone else wanna see dexx an gamble argue on here.....that shit would be entertaining....

Or battle...

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 08:20 PM

and i already started a #zoominonthatass trend like come on dude. this shit is not simple it takes finesse

Split · 08-25-2014, 08:22 PM

ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS

LIKE A TELESCOPE

Split · 08-25-2014, 08:23 PM

ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS

LIKE ZABOOMAFU

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 08:25 PM

Zoom in on that ass like zaboomafoo
we headed to the mother fuckin closet with a crew of dudes....

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 08:30 PM

but really, i dont know why i come here. yeah i get shitted on and i expected that since day one. but there is always a reason. think cause i followed this school of writing and idealogy behind hip hop music and realized that it was all wrong. now im trying to rewrite that past. but theres no sense in it. have to extract what i can from the past years and use it as a strength

Zen · 08-25-2014, 08:31 PM

I can't handle no liquor, but these bitches can't handle me.

Split · 08-25-2014, 08:33 PM

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LIKE CARL WEATHERS

Pharaohs Army · 08-25-2014, 09:17 PM

this is not the "kind" of song i usually gravitate towards (toward?)
however, with this beat, and those stanzas, yes, absolutely a workable song.
from a technical standpoint personally i felt each stanza was a little bit better than the one prior. the first couple lines are little lame but i think the rest fit very well for the kind of piece that it is.
if lengthened it could keep going on about girl issues or go back to personal reflection, or look forward towards the future... or really where ever you wanted to take it.
girls in particular would dig this track. and im not joking or being condescending i'm serious. giving actual feed here.
the simplicity is good in that it is very evident how it would/could sound.
not exactly of course, but, for readers, damn close to your intentions. if you know what i'm saying.

Split · 08-25-2014, 09:26 PM

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LIKE DAMON WAYANS WITH RAZOR BLADES

oats · 08-25-2014, 09:57 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Split

ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS

LIKE ZABOOMAFU

tried to rep but couldn't.

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 10:10 PM

Quote:

this is not the "kind" of song i usually gravitate towards (toward?)
however, with this beat, and those stanzas, yes, absolutely a workable song.
from a technical standpoint personally i felt each stanza was a little bit better than the one prior. the first couple lines are little lame but i think the rest fit very well for the kind of piece that it is.
if lengthened it could keep going on about girl issues or go back to personal reflection, or look forward towards the future... or really where ever you wanted to take it.
girls in particular would dig this track. and im not joking or being condescending i'm serious. giving actual feed here.
the simplicity is good in that it is very evident how it would/could sound.
not exactly of course, but, for readers, damn close to your intentions. if you know what i'm saying.

thanks for that man, the first part is a bit disconnected from the second for sure. my style of writing is not really line for line but the verse as a whole.. but i can see exactly what you mean... i have been striving for simplicity for quite a while boiling things down
but when u do that, several parts tend to melt into one another...

thanks again dude

theMuzzl3 · 08-25-2014, 10:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Malachi

what..
i wasnt even talking to u lol

I am me is you are him and 'we'.

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 10:43 PM

robbin williams reincarnated?^ i agree with everythen muzzle says. i like u man

big baby · 08-25-2014, 11:05 PM

u not even saying nothing try saying something like nothing say something 4 once wut ur au saying saisay something for once u not saying nothing for once just do it once plz say something not nothing do it once not once do it twice say something u not saying nothing?!

DexLabb · 08-25-2014, 11:12 PM

im not tryin figure out what u tryna figure out breh, stop tryna figure it out and figure shit out im tired cause u tired cause u aint tired ight?

DexLabb · 08-26-2014, 04:56 PM

im a philanthropist, organic machinist with the sexyest,
undress-a-bitch, not a pessimist, i see less of him
in your eyes. cause u don't believe in you no more...
it ain't true no more, you know we transformed, cutie

baby...
big baby...
you a cutie for real

Split · 08-26-2014, 05:43 PM

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JPEG

08-25-2014, 08:07 PM	#21
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08-25-2014, 08:20 PM	#23
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	and i already started a #zoominonthatass trend like come on dude. this shit is not simple it takes finesse __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-25-2014, 08:22 PM	#24
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE A TELESCOPE __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

08-25-2014, 08:23 PM	#25
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE ZABOOMAFU __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

08-25-2014, 08:25 PM	#26
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	Zoom in on that ass like zaboomafoo we headed to the mother fuckin closet with a crew of dudes.... __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-25-2014, 08:10 PM	#22
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662198	Is it juz me or does anyone else wanna see dexx an gamble argue on here.....that shit would be entertaining.... Or battle...

08-25-2014, 08:30 PM	#27
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	but really, i dont know why i come here. yeah i get shitted on and i expected that since day one. but there is always a reason. think cause i followed this school of writing and idealogy behind hip hop music and realized that it was all wrong. now im trying to rewrite that past. but theres no sense in it. have to extract what i can from the past years and use it as a strength __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-25-2014, 08:31 PM	#28
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,104 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079719	I can't handle no liquor, but these bitches can't handle me.

08-25-2014, 08:33 PM	#29
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE CARL WEATHERS __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

08-25-2014, 09:17 PM	#30
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	this is not the "kind" of song i usually gravitate towards (toward?) however, with this beat, and those stanzas, yes, absolutely a workable song. from a technical standpoint personally i felt each stanza was a little bit better than the one prior. the first couple lines are little lame but i think the rest fit very well for the kind of piece that it is. if lengthened it could keep going on about girl issues or go back to personal reflection, or look forward towards the future... or really where ever you wanted to take it. girls in particular would dig this track. and im not joking or being condescending i'm serious. giving actual feed here. the simplicity is good in that it is very evident how it would/could sound. not exactly of course, but, for readers, damn close to your intentions. if you know what i'm saying.

08-25-2014, 09:26 PM	#31
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE DAMON WAYANS WITH RAZOR BLADES __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

08-25-2014, 10:43 PM	#35
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	robbin williams reincarnated?^ i agree with everythen muzzle says. i like u man __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-25-2014, 11:12 PM	#37
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	im not tryin figure out what u tryna figure out breh, stop tryna figure it out and figure shit out im tired cause u tired cause u aint tired ight? __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-26-2014, 04:56 PM	#38
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	im a philanthropist, organic machinist with the sexyest, undress-a-bitch, not a pessimist, i see less of him in your eyes. cause u don't believe in you no more... it ain't true no more, you know we transformed, cutie baby... big baby... you a cutie for real __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-26-2014, 05:43 PM	#39
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS JPEG __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com