What Life

ill nik-A · 07-03-2013, 11:32 AM

Brawl with titans in the kingdom of jungle lions they bring law & guidance
It’s an awe to science how we applaud a God but are drawn to violence
Someone call the tyrants we want to see a falling giant’s appalled defiance
A strong alliance, a government’s remedy blames the enemy when they install a virus
default reliance, u refer to the news’ views built only to maul your iris
the cult is silenced in a world controlled by stolen gold they fault the Mayans
these frauds have sirens, but who all decided as we stand tall, divided
sell some wealth then assault the clients, tell me who really caused the riots?!
the fear of war’s a crisis to even make soldiers insult the privates
false compliance, this would never happen if the man above designed it
St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage
Who crossed the highest?! not everyone who falls then rises… love what life is!

Spoken · 07-03-2013, 11:35 AM

This was fucking fire.... Nice scheme and straight dope from start to finish liked some ideas a lot and everything just stayed strong in place... Content well natured in this and the spread of diversity while keeping the same annunciation flow thru consistent? Nice man really a pretty strong drop just wish it had more

CopyPat · 07-03-2013, 01:20 PM

dope shit man. shitty lack of feeds. i like this alot. flow was obviously smooth. multi's eh?? haha it worked. usually if someone uses the same rhyme scheme for a whole verse like this it gets really stretched and forced. this wasn't so props there. i liked the message/content in this.. pretty really shit. i think everyone can agree with. just a solid little open mic. enjoyed it, you should post more in here

Rojo187 · 07-03-2013, 06:29 PM

Shyt was wicked...the flow is so refined its like I can spit that...

I believe you can only reach a certain pinnacle of hotness thru text...then you have to jump to audio...

I dunno if you do...but you should...then we can see your delivery and emotion...
but otherwise....one of the best I seen so far during my short stint...

Coup · 07-03-2013, 07:25 PM

I know ya for a battler...so I was reading this that way though its a topical...little bit wordy, flow was rigid due to that...lines punched, good setups...you carried that over. I precieved you forced things to rhyme. ALl made sense so I ain't trying to trip.

content was sharp and you knew what ya speaking on...seemed legit and not something out your element.

good drop

Mike Wrecka · 07-03-2013, 09:24 PM

dope

news views built only to maul your iris
sick

good shit

ill nik-A · 07-10-2013, 03:47 PM

Thx

EbadiBeats · 07-10-2013, 05:02 PM

It was cool. It's much better to be simple and dope than be complex and dope. I liked your flow the most. Put your skills on a mic so we can see how much talent you really possess.

ill nik-A · 07-10-2013, 06:38 PM

Why a mic? I'm not a rapper I'm a writer... I'm passed that stage

Thx

EbadiBeats · 07-10-2013, 07:09 PM

Do you have your own book? Your own website with scriptures?

If not, it generally starts by writing up texts to actually recording them. At the very least, I would recommend doing acapellas.

Most of us start with texts in middle school, in highschool it grows to audio... and if you get good at it you continue or go into some other fields. Not to sound degrading to texts.

God Of War · 07-10-2013, 08:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by EbadiBeats

Do you have your own book? Your own website with scriptures?

If not, it generally starts by writing up texts to actually recording them. At the very least, I would recommend doing acapellas.

Most of us start with texts in middle school, in highschool it grows to audio... and if you get good at it you continue or go into some other fields. Not to sound degrading to texts.

wtf, text is not a stepping stone, its its own field of writing.

if you play pick up games in the park at 16 yuo can still play them at thirty even if you dont aspire to be a nba star

btw nik this was dope as fuck your flow was nasty i like how you got a completely different style when writing om's then when battling

Someone call the tyrants we want to see a falling giant’s appalled defiance
A strong alliance, a government’s remedy blames the enemy when they install a virus
default reliance, u refer to the news’ views built only to maul your iris
the cult is silenced in a world controlled by stolen gold they fault the Mayans

that was ridiculous right there

9/10

rofl remember when theyd do that back in the day?

ill nik-A · 07-10-2013, 08:20 PM

Haha yesss

I agree funny thing is I rapped in high school

Coup · 07-10-2013, 08:29 PM

why do people think writing is easy ?

EbadiBeats · 07-10-2013, 08:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Coup

why do people think writing is easy ?

It's not... Recording is just the next level.

Recording = Writing + Mic Skills (Delivery, Emotion, etc)

Writing = Writing.

You do the math.

Coup · 07-10-2013, 08:46 PM

true true....it's not ness. the required next level....ya know what i mean

Otpeks · 07-11-2013, 12:24 AM

St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage

^
Illy good read nik

Darth Yoda · 07-11-2013, 01:21 AM

Hemingway > Rappers.

There is no next level, just because it flows smoothly doesn't mean you HAVE to rap or do spoken word. There are even writers who internally rhyme in storytelling and the reader doesn't even know. There are writers far beyond what you think is 'good' or well written.

yawn

Darth Yoda · 07-11-2013, 01:22 AM

This was good nikka! I didn't mean to sound mean, it wasn't towards you, but to that one commenter. I liked the ability to sound connecting and not talking about pagan stuff and religious blah super solar systems. Dope.

07-03-2013, 11:32 AM	#1
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,411 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164516	What Life Brawl with titans in the kingdom of jungle lions they bring law & guidance It’s an awe to science how we applaud a God but are drawn to violence Someone call the tyrants we want to see a falling giant’s appalled defiance A strong alliance, a government’s remedy blames the enemy when they install a virus default reliance, u refer to the news’ views built only to maul your iris the cult is silenced in a world controlled by stolen gold they fault the Mayans these frauds have sirens, but who all decided as we stand tall, divided sell some wealth then assault the clients, tell me who really caused the riots?! the fear of war’s a crisis to even make soldiers insult the privates false compliance, this would never happen if the man above designed it St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage Who crossed the highest?! not everyone who falls then rises… love what life is! __________________ Grumpy old man. Last edited by ill nik-A; 07-03-2013 at 11:35 AM.

07-03-2013, 11:35 AM	#2
Spoken ...DA GAWD... Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,355 Battle Record: 13-34 Rep Power: 5860410	This was fucking fire.... Nice scheme and straight dope from start to finish liked some ideas a lot and everything just stayed strong in place... Content well natured in this and the spread of diversity while keeping the same annunciation flow thru consistent? Nice man really a pretty strong drop just wish it had more __________________ WP Po'ethics

07-03-2013, 07:25 PM	#5
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	I know ya for a battler...so I was reading this that way though its a topical...little bit wordy, flow was rigid due to that...lines punched, good setups...you carried that over. I precieved you forced things to rhyme. ALl made sense so I ain't trying to trip. content was sharp and you knew what ya speaking on...seemed legit and not something out your element. good drop __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

07-03-2013, 09:24 PM	#6
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,525 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779335	dope news views built only to maul your iris sick good shit __________________ A.bove T.he R.est

07-10-2013, 03:47 PM	#7
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,411 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164516	Thx __________________ Grumpy old man.

07-03-2013, 01:20 PM	#3
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742222	dope shit man. shitty lack of feeds. i like this alot. flow was obviously smooth. multi's eh?? haha it worked. usually if someone uses the same rhyme scheme for a whole verse like this it gets really stretched and forced. this wasn't so props there. i liked the message/content in this.. pretty really shit. i think everyone can agree with. just a solid little open mic. enjoyed it, you should post more in here

07-03-2013, 06:29 PM	#4
Rojo187 Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 208 Champed The Hunt for Cane VII Rep Power: 34	Shyt was wicked...the flow is so refined its like I can spit that... I believe you can only reach a certain pinnacle of hotness thru text...then you have to jump to audio... I dunno if you do...but you should...then we can see your delivery and emotion... but otherwise....one of the best I seen so far during my short stint...

07-10-2013, 05:02 PM	#8
EbadiBeats Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 14 Rep Power: 34	It was cool. It's much better to be simple and dope than be complex and dope. I liked your flow the most. Put your skills on a mic so we can see how much talent you really possess.

07-10-2013, 06:38 PM	#9
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,411 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164516	Why a mic? I'm not a rapper I'm a writer... I'm passed that stage Thx __________________ Grumpy old man.

07-10-2013, 07:09 PM	#10
EbadiBeats Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 14 Rep Power: 34	Do you have your own book? Your own website with scriptures? If not, it generally starts by writing up texts to actually recording them. At the very least, I would recommend doing acapellas. Most of us start with texts in middle school, in highschool it grows to audio... and if you get good at it you continue or go into some other fields. Not to sound degrading to texts.

07-10-2013, 08:20 PM	#12
ill nik-A Super Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 7,411 Battle Record: 70-25 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Battle Arena - BA Picture - Picture Battle Tournament - Netcees Battle League (3x) - Netcees Writers League (2x) - Summer Classic VI - Fall Brawl III - Netcees Battle League Season X - Lyric Olympics Rep Power: 77164516	Haha yesss I agree funny thing is I rapped in high school __________________ Grumpy old man.

07-10-2013, 08:29 PM	#13
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	why do people think writing is easy ? __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

07-10-2013, 08:46 PM	#15
Coup Don't believe the hype Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 572 Battle Record: 4-5 Rep Power: 0	true true....it's not ness. the required next level....ya know what i mean __________________ What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope.

07-11-2013, 12:24 AM	#16
Otpeks LandLord Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 52 Battle Record: 2-1 Rep Power: 35	St John’s a bias but can’t argue with he who talks the wisest after he walked the mileage ^ Illy good read nik __________________ The LandLords

07-11-2013, 01:21 AM	#17
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182436	Hemingway > Rappers. There is no next level, just because it flows smoothly doesn't mean you HAVE to rap or do spoken word. There are even writers who internally rhyme in storytelling and the reader doesn't even know. There are writers far beyond what you think is 'good' or well written. yawn

07-11-2013, 01:22 AM	#18
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182436	This was good nikka! I didn't mean to sound mean, it wasn't towards you, but to that one commenter. I liked the ability to sound connecting and not talking about pagan stuff and religious blah super solar systems. Dope.