05-17-2019, 06:59 PM | #1 |
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They got that elephant’s memory - yall are never forgetting me
so tell em to keep it moving, tap potential kinetically you light in the field, diracs don’t come w/ negative energy know how to get a reaction, that's just a question of chemistry put everything on the table, tell em check it w/ mendeleev the bulk of my jeans tighter, that means i'm better genetically those before me passed on - gave me a sense of heredity That’s why this gift ain’t a surprise - they had it set in the registry some know what it’s like to pop & some just get a vasectomy me? I get to Icing - beretta decked with plenty accessories Concuss ‘em out on the lawn without expressing obscenities heat pumps every room in your house, its an impressive amenity whole fam dyin ya arms, like "that's an excellent henna sleeve!" Those flowers around your home make it look better aesthetically so furious, flow serious - dead as a Kennedy of course they shot @ the Lincoln, that's just the president's legacy gave up on the promised land & manifested a destiny Go blind looking at The Sun - deflect dissent with celebrities True religion has more holes than the distressing of denim jeans been fightin over capital since they set up an embassy @ the center of tel aviv countin checks from the sheep got ‘em dead asleep, execs invested in feta cheese if these bars are in bad taste then let em edit the recipe its the same however you flip it, you can’t correct it symmetrically Any imitation of me can get burned quick as protesting an effigy a different type of an animal, i don't descend from the pedigree Make one call to have u taken out like a professional referee I don’t hash out for the cash, tell em to check the dispensary if I fuck w/ a bedroom DJ she's spread together with Stephanie a monster under the sheets, dick w/ embedded supremacy i speed date these chicks while taking excessive amphetamines Antivaxxer took her shot, she tried to message aggressively Dudes gas her up to get in her mouth, shit’s like the premise of dentistry I’ll only temp check w/ these hoes if I’m assessing them medically Called her a piece of shit then swiped so far to the left it offended me yall looking at the future, give ‘em the message prophetically On the level, my goals is lofty - platform stems from the mezzanine catch flights in every direction like the steps in an escher piece I go through the 4 seasons, no sweat - the pension is evergreen the people that don't feel it must be developing leprosy make em drop they arms.. & every other severed extremity One cut is shreddin your tendons see, quick as ending propensities All in their hair like people having sex in the 70's a menace in elementary, not even professors were testing me wouldn't even try me as a kid when I was arrested at 17 Smacked & robbed a 3rd grader cuz he was dressing as fresh as me I put myself in his shoes, that’s just me flexing this empathy Know how to get in they heads, this shit is next to telepathy Said give me a fortune, teller - she passed the presidents readily if u in the middle of a banquet the runner ready its cuz ur head is the centerpiece idk why u thought there'd be something at the end of the credits scene Last edited by Answer; 12-14-2022 at 01:12 PM. |
05-17-2019, 09:24 PM | #2 |
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Multi scheme was fire
Liked henna sleeve and some other clever metas Props
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05-18-2019, 03:50 AM | #3 |
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09-15-2019, 12:47 AM | #4 |
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09-15-2019, 10:00 AM | #5 |
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don't know why this didn't get more distinction.
a lot of quotables. some times i think it may have gotten tacky but then the next line would just be another smooth transition, with another clever little attachment. the thing here was consistency which is a huge flaw in a lot of writing. you'll see 2-3 good lines then the rest just stumble in, taking away from the luster of the first few. but this was pretty good throughout. i liked the correlation of slang/euphemisms constantly, and being used with words that fit the scheme -(thats the crux of what you did) the flex piece was very cool. some ones made me chuckle, and you actually got a few thoughts across - religion, and the tel aviv reference. antivax gas dentist put together was cool. you can see the flow of your thoughts and the knowledge of things going on in the world to connect it better. really good put together |
09-15-2019, 03:30 PM | #6 |
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Dam no idyiot from bb? This must be good
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09-17-2019, 01:00 PM | #7 |
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Hello, Answer.
Nice to see you in these neck of the woods; this was quite the impressive display of rhyming; your talent is nice; and I enjoy your writing. Good work on this piece. The punchlines are quite dope as-well. Good work, you're a good rhymer and writer. Nice work, Answer.. |
09-18-2019, 09:04 AM | #8 |
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Your first 4 lines are just chea, fuckin' awesome...
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12-01-2022, 02:20 AM | #9 |
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@Answer
Did you spit this? Practice at all back when you wrote it? I haven't. YET Syllables counts look OK at a glance tonight. You're a good writer so I'm making an assumption that it'd work. But even if it's good, I don't know how so many rhymes in a row would sound. With this many end rhymes there's GOT to be some reaches in there, but, let's just say I'm upping again for the culture and will try it when I'm free Friday night. *Edit: That is the long way of saying let's give it the old college try. Shit's dope. don't get me wrong with the "sizing up" above. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 12-01-2022 at 02:25 AM. |
12-06-2022, 11:02 PM | #10 |
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Rhyme schemes crazy asf. Had me hooked from the beginning. This the typa shit i enjoy reading. I can pick up the flow in my head and this shit flows smoothly the whole way through. 50 bars same rhyme scheme? I aint never tried that we might have to make it a challenge. Punchlines was fire, rhyme scheme fire. This some top tier shit right here for a “bored just writing” typa post. You did this shit for real.
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Creative vs there
The flow so tight Full of energy |
01-10-2023, 05:20 PM | #12 |
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01-10-2023, 05:53 PM | #13 |
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01-10-2023, 08:46 PM | #14 |
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