12-15-2022, 01:31 AM | #1 |
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XI WK III: Cereal (2-0) vs. Civil Rawr xD (0-2) (CEREAL WINS)
Season 11 XI VERSES: Tuesday, December, 20th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion VOTES: Friday December, 23rd, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON! Goodluck! @Cereal @Civil Rawr xD TOPIC:
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12-15-2022, 10:56 PM | #2 |
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ROSEBUD .. Secret handshakes, shaken keys Bleed blood blue all dreams golden by the teeth for the teat.. Souls sold on the block In the radio station talking.. Warning SHOTS "every time you on those streets.. it fades like chalk and bubbles pop real soft as it drifts off Names named if they even cross the road - snow blown with coke on the nose - soaked shown people in the suburbs like broke ass hoes round xmas time to the catholic virgins behind glass while they stay during fresh desk mind --- expansion shine like goose down, expanding from reading and writing, remembering everything through hotel to prison the best girls and boys to sleep next to a little christian born atheist glue sniffer school skipper like im waiting for those superman to say "i do" i keep flying straight what could bend my neck from my chosen art hip hop pure as belief my single moves over the net, but the album by face to face i hit world wide and become a new york legend in a minute off my dead fathers watch saving gace.. amen .... As day drifts in and out, i got the world i built it is what you make it, the la cats told me on the way to my field but now the name in the air and they def after the fans with death threats and round ups like virus spam pop ups peeps banned neighbour wise when we was cool im gonna have to come up out the piss pool flash the monopoly money and start clippen niggers for their fools gold i go from gangster art to ganster in the blink of an eye ... but i keep the people that built my castle alive knowing though im living day by day any moment i could be killed but the villiage that built the hip hop star sleep at night still.. -- is it a pillow over the face a bullet to the head od on the toilet an arrest in the streets all i know i lived for me, and people found their way to the sheets.. http://www.netcees.org/showthread.ph...027#post829027 http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=152263 http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=152251
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12-19-2022, 02:36 AM | #3 |
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If it’s mutany. 8 wouldn’t solve the puzzle
Behold thy realm I caught her sleeping with another No If we were to ever live happily what would your first words be? I can’t sing along to sad Melodie’s when they aren’t real Cereal? I beg of you Please kiss the glory of the light Respect. Do you have it? I think not I doubt you’re even alive Pass the fire like a pacifier to the Pastors fire That’s right! I said it I went to church and all I thought about were spiders Wishing they would read me verses from the webs past Fuck this Dreaming of spiders Praying to spiders Living with spiders Thinking of spiders Playing with spiders Talking to spiders Laughing with spiders Eating with spiders Drinking with spiders Betting with spiders Listening to spiders Sharing with spiders Cumming to spiders Cumming with spiders Holding hands with spiders ( all 8 of them) Fuck u cereal I hope you rot in shit
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12-19-2022, 02:55 AM | #4 |
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Cereal vs had more swag compare to Civil. Cereal vs flow better.
Civil vs alright to me not my cup of tea Vote-Cereal |
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Cereal -
I've decided to read your pieces by imagining some dude on a stage, half spoken word style, half rant. it feels like a piece about a drug dealer who built a small empire, who knows at the end of the day, despite the money coming in, they're just a small fish that's gotten a bit too big for its pond and every day the sharks come closer. Quote:
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Civil - I know last week I said "gosh guys give some feedback that is useful" but this is a fucking struggle. your writing style lives up to your name and there was no connection to the topic. I think the imagery of going to church and thinking of spiders could have been a really cool central theme if handled, but boy was this not handled — no dope lines. vote: Cereal, the lesser of two evils |
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12-19-2022, 04:59 PM | #6 |
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Got zelph here. Just outclassed serial
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12-19-2022, 07:02 PM | #7 |
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I got Civil rare here
Respect Peace
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12-20-2022, 05:52 PM | #9 |
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Cereal - This was actually a bit more structured story wise then your usual stuff the metaphors behind money the struggles for it and the consequences that come with materialism the highs and lows of drug dealer /addict i mean you wrote this within a few hours the topic was posted but it wasn't a bad read considering it was possible troll post i never know with you nor do I care tbh it was better then your opponents.
Civil - Listening to spiders Sharing with spiders Cumming to spiders Cumming with spiders Holding hands with spiders ( all 8 of them) lol that's just crazy i mean you could have taken this battle storywise if actually continued what you started with.. but once again troll posting.. i should give you the W for the simple fact Cereal gave Sral a W over me about a emo snowman and someones dead father I personally hate soft emo verse's that read like a hallmark card and simple rhyme schemes that use frail but decadent wordplay...but i been around the site long enough to know people play favorites and have there own styles they prefer .. regardless I can't be salty bout it and have to keep it fair not everyone gives two shits about these man poem tournaments and your verse this week clearly shows it ..I did laugh at cumming with spiders tho lol.. Vote- Cereal Last edited by brokenhal0; 12-22-2022 at 05:54 PM. |
12-23-2022, 03:53 PM | #10 |
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I am sure Civil has potential but I am not seeing it here. Cereal this is an easy W for you Brother for obvious reasons.
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12-24-2022, 12:40 PM | #11 |
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Tied at 2-2
Let’s get more votes in fellas
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12-26-2022, 09:40 AM | #12 |
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I got Cereal here, by default.
Rawr, I laughed at a couple lines for sure. Just too trolly to steal a W in a writing league bro, even against someone who writes so loosely and abstractly with room for improvement. |
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