07-25-2022, 09:21 PM | #1 |
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Dave vs Ahriman - DAVE WINS BY NS, OPEN FOR FEED
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07-26-2022, 02:19 PM | #2 |
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07-28-2022, 05:27 PM | #4 |
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Stealing identities online is really pathetic you bum
Only time Dave ever deep-fake is when Ahri’s ugly bitch is tryna get me to cum Everything you write is buttcheek, don’t even know why this cunt tries it If assymetric of deciding battles? this is bound to be totally one sided The ladies love me til I ditch em.. I stay messin with these hoes If Ahriman ever turns heel… it’s a pirouette into a vogue The fruitiest of aliases, if you’re shook then you should scarper You pick that name from the list of personality traits your look for in partner?
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07-29-2022, 08:15 AM | #5 |
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Cool verse
Wasn’t overly feeling the opener Asymmetry was a good idea but it was just off for me Turns a heel was funny, just slightly worried you know about pirouettes to vogues lol Closer was cool and funny Liked the humour overall and particularly liked you last 2 bars |
07-29-2022, 08:46 AM | #6 |
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deep fake was a cool idea
Assymetric threw me at first, still kind of jarring. i see it works but I’m not it’s biggest fan turns heel was okay closer is cool but maybe lacks a little in delivery with it being in the form of a question nice verse |
07-29-2022, 09:42 AM | #7 |
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Ahriman robbed me last week and then got out while he still could...tsk tsk tsk
This was an alright verse, obviously not one of your best but you really haven’t had much competition the last couple weeks so you’re just throwing together throw away verses and that’s all fine, some bars the concept was there but didn’t really hit (asymmetric was one of them) last four were solid, keep doing your thing David |
07-30-2022, 08:54 PM | #8 |
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pirrhouette leaned me haha
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07-31-2022, 10:40 AM | #9 |
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Deepfake is solid. Asymmetric isn't pronounced that way on US English but I'll give it a pass. Heel turn was lol. Closer took me a second read to get... Are a man works though. That's on me
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