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12-28-2021, 03:26 PM | #1 |
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[Round 1] 4. Blue chews for Jaden vs 9. Ryno/Spree [Blue chews for Jaden advances]
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01-05-2022, 12:03 AM | #2 |
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Spree will… Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip Last edited by Ryno; 01-05-2022 at 02:21 AM. |
01-05-2022, 07:44 PM | #3 |
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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home Frac How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention Last edited by Fracture; 01-05-2022 at 08:41 PM. Reason: Missing word |
01-07-2022, 08:09 AM | #4 |
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Spree will… Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to lollll.. nasssty imagery... miscarriages are boring for des nowadays though Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list light.. basic angle Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth not feeling this Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side okkkkk.. setup needed work Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street coool I dig this Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories lol I like this.. this is fire Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse nah & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip execution is off.. concept is there. didn't really like this closer vs. i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write wordy but cool. hits. tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home ehh How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed lol nice Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter light at best I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 I kinda like it but the connection is weak.. fell flat at the end Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording LOL.. simple but I dig this U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up lmaoo Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention nahh.. not feelin this closer bro shiiit. close battle. Even though I got spree/ryno with the em pact LOTB, I got blue chews jaden with fewer misses and bit more consistency. I felt there were some throaways here and there.. now I agree with answer that 8 lines is best.. just grab your best 4 bars and hope for the best. good shit fellas, but I got blue chews for jaden here.. it could go either way tbh |
01-07-2022, 08:15 AM | #5 |
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Spree will…
Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to Oh shit, straight out the gate with a heater. This was brill, liked the personal angle and misdirection used tbh. I think this started strong, definitely felt damaging to the opposition off rip. Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list LOL this one was a little lighter, but a decent jab none the less all in all. I liked the flip on the forced someone’s hand as I haven’t seen that before. Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth I liked the concept and nameflip somewhat, wording felt a little unnatural to me with the under a mound of Earth but not bad it’s felt it needed wording a iittle differently tbh Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side I wasn’t such a fan of this one; training wills made me think you were gonna talk about Des’ age and him writing a will or something so I’m glad you steered away from that here but the execution here felt a little too simplistic and flat, it lacked some sting it may otherwise have had Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street Not a fan of this one, not sure who Jaden is or if it’s Frac’s chick somehow but either way that’s the just I got and referring to her by just a single letter felt like low hanging fruit and not all that difficult to come up with to me. Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories This was a bit of a stretch for me between Em Pact and Impact, maybe it works better in your accent than it translates to me in mine. I like the idea, felt the execution lacked a little or maybe I’m missing something where Des has stated he would throw himself off a building rather than battle you guys or something. I dunno, just didn’t really connect with me for whatever reason. Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse I liked this, simple but effective, not seen Sinacog post up for a short while but his infamy lives on I see. & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip This was a better line to close things out, I enjoyed the personal angle and line, thought it was worded cleanly and executed well. Overall a consistent verse, only 1-2 dry spots where I wasn’t feeling much but the majority of the time you guys worked well together I felt
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01-07-2022, 08:30 AM | #6 |
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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write This was a light jab for me, off to a slower start than I felt your opponents got for sure, the bud light reference so early in the line made it a little predictable as to what you were going to do also here so the payoff lost a little moment for me when it came to the end of the line. tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home Rhizome, right? I get it, not seen this name play done before on him though I’m sure he’s seen several similar but I liked this one as I haven’t seen it. How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed Henry Ruggs? Best I’ve got for this one and that seems to make sense to me. I thought this was just okay, could be that I’m missing something completely here but the one I’m thinking of involved a car crash that would make the out of turn reference applicable. Either way, it was a light jab to me here. Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter This was nicer, clean and worded well, I enjoyed the target audience flip. This is probably your strongest so far. I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 This one feels too simplistic for me, I dunno, it’s not necessarily bad just not particularly fresh feeling or executed harshly, it reads more statementish and that kind of took away from the sting of the punchline to me in truth. Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording I liked this one, good misdirection and a double-attack on the opposition but saving the butchers wording til last kept the payoff until right at the end which worked really well. U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up This one was simple and effective here, definitely a marked improvement over the past couple lines and I’m feeling it in terms of wording and execution. Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention Nice, enjoyed this closer also, thought you ended this very solid with back to back lines toward the end. This is a difficult one to vote on for me because Spree at the beginning came out the blocks wilding, that first shot at Des was fire, then we got a kind of mixed bag of stuff I either thought felt like a light jab or missed got me for whatever reason and opening with what was essentially the LOTB kind of made the rest feel a little undercooked, you know? Frac and Des started off a little slower but definitely gained traction as this went on, got stronger towards the end and went on a run of back to back bars I was feeling somewhat. I think here it’s that consistency of back to back bars that had me leaning their way over that one crazy line from Spree at the start. Vote - Des/Frac
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to wording butchered this but I like the idea Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list lol @jaden Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth was confused until I saw you pointed out his aka, I never like that cus it needs to be said but cool nameflip, nameflips don't do it too much for me anymore but creative Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side ehh bit forced in my accent at least Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street Ok concept, good personal Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories the em sound in empathy and impact are different so a bit forced. good wording otherwise. Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse lol cool does sin say snakes too thought it was all about THE DRAGON THE DRAGGIN DRAGON THE SNAKE DRAGON okay got it & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip light but nice personal vs i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write cool, wording could be better. punch was a bit drawn out tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home rise home? I don't think you shoot anything to raise a house How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed lmao Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter eh bit dated, good wording I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 scream/jaw dropped i've seen Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording lmao okay, idk if butchers is the right word for removing trees though. coulda said he destroys life while ryno destroys wording or something. can spree confirm if he uses cleavers to cut down trees? U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up :deadguy: Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention ehh ok ok Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip these were the quotes but all were really light, you guys kind of missed the mark on making a really brutal flip on the personals you had. creative enough and well worded but no killer instinct vs i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up theres some maybe I could call quotes, frac had a few dated references which was eh. Seen those flipped during their times maybe not as well but still. But those last two quotes by frac were better than anything ryno and spree wrote so it's a tough call... imma have to break it down further and get the numbers out 11 for spree and ryno 14 for frac and des It comes down to the bangers for me, a meh but consistent verse isn't enough against a team with someone like frac on it that can hit your gut once or twice for the finisher hard to vote on this and feel right with either choice but gonna go with Frac/Des
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01-08-2022, 09:12 AM | #8 |
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to Okay I like the concept but I have questions. My questions are 1) what is a juice poon and 2) why 7? You can pretend to have a bigger dick than that here it’s OK Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list Yep, that’s cool. Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth Cool. I was about to tell you embank isn’t a word but I looked it up and it is - a verb meaning to make an embankment. I think you could’ve made embankment work and it would’ve been better but anyway, it’s overall still cool Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side A little stretched conceptually IMO but not a miss, it’s kinda cool Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street Eh this is a boring letter play to me Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories Cool. Solid. Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse Lmao. I dig it. & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip Cool. i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write Seen bud light flips before. Assuming spree actually does drink it then the personal makes it OKish. tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home Would’ve missed this if I hadn’t read Lars’s vote. A little stretched sound wise but passable and the shoot and gingerly tie ins make it better. I like. Frac How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed Cool personal Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter Execution v smooth which helped a lot. The wordplay/punch is just alright. I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 Wp concept feels old and the bar is centered around that more than a diss, this one’s meh to me Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording Nah. ‘Butchers’ isn’t the right word to make this work. U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up Lol. Cool. Smooth execution aided the humor. Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention The jackass/hurting for attention play is dope but the rino/jackass thing is corny IMO. I still fuck with the bar but think it couldn’t been worded more harshly. I’ve got Rino/Spree
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Kinda disappointing from both. Spree and ryno started strong but tapered off a bit with the empathe name play getting repetitive. Fracs whole section seems rushed and des had one hit and one miss. Target audience was nice but I think ryno/spree edged it
Vote - ryno / spree
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to way to start off lmao this was brutal imagery but u could have done more with the personal angle with some better wording Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list cool jab, pretty funny Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth idk the wording felt a bit clunky to me..the wording is cool but could have used some more polish Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side this was cool i actually liked this Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street cool wording but angle's a bit predictable Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories solid bar, gets it done but not the strongest Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse havent read many sinacog verses but even if i did this would still be a light jab for me & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip this was pretty light too blue chews for jaden Des i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write okay punch, wording could be smoother tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home this one missed for me. saw lars' vote and got it but even then it still wasn't hitting Frac How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed dont know the reference but the other votes say its a personal. good wording though Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter this was the best bar of the battle so far imo I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 punch was set up nice but the set up before that seemed winded. decent jab still though Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording decent jab. i like how you extended the personal angle U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up wording was cool but i wasnt feeling the line all that much Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention cool jab not bad im giving this to blue chews for jaden. ryno/spree did their thing, and the battle was decently close. i just though frac's portion was consistent enough push past des' shortcomings. cool battle |
01-11-2022, 01:21 PM | #12 |
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to eh, i feel like the miscarriage bars have been done a lot and this didnt resonate with me as a fresh angle Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list cool Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth not really feeling the wp style here but it's alright Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side wheels/wills is a little bit of a stretch, wording on this is a bit awkward but i like the idea Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street I think the second half of this couldve been flipped a little better. you're kinda talking about the same street in both sides of this metaphor Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories cool Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse kind corny tbh & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip nah not really feeling this i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write eh, kinda played tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home ok How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed cool Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter this ones dope to me. wording mayybe couldve been harsher, but i like it I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 eh it's okay, kind of an old reference and wording couldve been smoother Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording ok personal, but not off the charts on creativity U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up I feel like there's a missing tie-in with the space reference here Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention cool idea, again the wording couldve been stronger but I like the idea ryno/spree Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side frac/des Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention of the 4 lines i quoted, I prefer the 2 from frac/des. I'd say that ryno/spree had the more effective wording, so their concepts landed with more of a sting for me, but conceptually nothing really stood out to me and I feel like the momentum tapered off for the last 4 lines of it. Frac/des had fresher concepts and decent wording, but could've gotten a little more out of them if they took a harsher approach. V/ frac and des |
01-11-2022, 03:11 PM | #13 |
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to this angle has been done too much like this...nice try though Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list better, we dont need the quotes Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth what i dont like about these name flips is it hinged on an old alias thats irrelevant. line was ok Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side liked the two extensions part. wheels was eh aight Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street not enough here doing it for me Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories i liked this nameplay better. youre kind of reaching though w/ a partial name of a old ass alias tho lol Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse i didnt like this... sin mostly talks about dragons & shit. even if he mentioned snakes most his stuff is just non sensical anyway. i like these ref lines when done well but missed for me. & you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip needed a different spin. i think the personal of a hotel clerk is good but needed a better meta imo.. i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write feels done/predictable & this was long winded tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home alright, though the wording couldve been better How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed cool current event Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter solid hit, another ref I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes? ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2 Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording these were eh oks to me. i didnt like that scream reference as much, 2nd wasnt doing for me w the butcher trees U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up Fresh concept.. couldve used a better tie in Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention hurting for attention helped this ive got blue chew for jaden w/ a couple more effective hits w/ the first 2. other team had some shit too like forced hand but i felt the best stuff were Em flips which felt borderline grasping for nps. vote- Des/Frac |
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