01-12-2021, 10:41 AM | #1 |
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Rnd 1 - Dave vs Adverse - OPEN FOR VOTES
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01-12-2021, 10:43 AM | #2 |
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01-12-2021, 11:56 AM | #3 |
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Haha g’luck brother
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01-12-2021, 04:41 PM | #4 |
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You got family? Pets? Say deuces. No truces when I empty shells
You pissed me off now I’m making EVERYTHING disappear like Zuch did with the NBL Trying to prove your ass belongs? I’d rather have this stupid bastard gone Next time they ‘remove you from the ‘Cord’ hope it’s weeks after u kicked the stool u standin on This 4-5th gon’ flex, if I threaten it you’ll feel that chrome hit your chest While Dave ain’t made a ‘scratch with them arms’ since the Tyrone Biggums sketch Dude’s getting sprayed fast, I’m ruthless and stay strapped So next time ‘a UPN dude gets hit with a 40’ it won’t be from Blue on the Chase App |
01-13-2021, 03:27 AM | #5 |
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I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss
The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body Your mother must’ve been reeeeal ugly.. messed up grill n a big snout The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree and it wouldn’t look out of place in this pig’s mouth
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01-13-2021, 03:37 AM | #6 |
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Some good light jabs. Liked the closer most. Dave: I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body This is all dope. Closer was close to being quoted. Breakdown was LOTB. Best verse of the round. Vote Dave |
01-13-2021, 11:42 AM | #7 |
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Ad cord concept was a cool discord attack line...chase app a good generic UPN concept and punch
Dave opener was a cool personal , breakdown flip was nice, headquarters a dope murder concept, wasn't a huge fan of the idiom flip closer Got Dave here cool battle |
01-13-2021, 11:48 AM | #8 |
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You got family? Pets? Say deuces. No truces when I empty shells
You pissed me off now I’m making EVERYTHING disappear like Zuch did with the NBL okk simple Trying to prove your ass belongs? I’d rather have this stupid bastard gone Next time they ‘remove you from the ‘Cord’ hope it’s weeks after u kicked the stool u standin on nice This 4-5th gon’ flex, if I threaten it you’ll feel that chrome hit your chest While Dave ain’t made a ‘scratch with them arms’ since the Tyrone Biggums sketch not feeling this Dude’s getting sprayed fast, I’m ruthless and stay strapped So next time ‘a UPN dude gets hit with a 40’ it won’t be from Blue on the Chase App okk vs. I’m a manager. You’re a janitor. Try and be real when you diss The only time you tool up is when the school wants you to clean up some piss loll Depressed topical nerd unloading feelings into some new haikus I’ll force this overgrown prick into a breakdown.. just call me blue bayou ehh why so many blue refs on this tourney My headquarters where I bag up, any intruders get the shotty Your headquarters will be bagged up after I’ve finished dissecting ur body coool Your mother must’ve been reeeeal ugly.. messed up grill n a big snout The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree and it wouldn’t look out of place in this pig’s mouth i dig this but im not sure why i feel its played got dave here.. nice show both but got dave here more creativity |
01-13-2021, 02:17 PM | #9 | ||
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Close: Tyrone Biggums Solid verse. Creative references and you did a good job on the execution side also. Quote:
Close: headquarters, pig's mouth Solid verse. Nothing was bad per se but there were a couple stylistic things that that didn't work as well for me and the missed reference hurts in a 4 bar contest. Vote: Adverse I had Ad with a slight edge in a close battle. If Dave had switched out one of his bars for another quote that could have leaned the needle to his side. Good stuff on both sides. |
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01-13-2021, 03:20 PM | #10 |
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Thought as had some good concepts just worded a bit rough.... idk seemed a bit choppy I did like the cord angle and the chase app
I pretty much liked all of Dave’s verse tbh I got him taking this with the more polished/wittier verse |
01-13-2021, 04:04 PM | #11 |
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Dave was solid throughout.
Ad opener aight, a bit wordy cord concept ok flip, seen a few many recently Chase app - ok Dave just out punched him bar for bar imo. Cool key battle V Dave |
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