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Old 11-25-2020, 11:09 PM   #1
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I think back to the formulation of where my rhymes start
I'm composing vibes, the metronome beats to my heart
I want to paint a picture, a room with all the fixtures,
a world with all the pictures worth a thousand words
in a universe where a dream isn't deferred
however reality occurs,
in other words,
drifting with the wind,
I flow,
deep within the echoes,
double talk, rethink memento...
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Old 11-26-2020, 04:23 AM   #2
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this is nice. i liked the pacing shifts.
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Old 11-26-2020, 11:53 AM   #3
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I like how natural and conversational this piece flowed. Dope switches between lines. Pretty philosophical. And maybe intentionally introspective in concept? Idk. But I dug it.
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