WEEK 5: Universe 1-3 VS Jayfresh 1-2 JAYFRESH WINS

UPN Zuch · 11-01-2020, 06:45 PM

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Universe · 11-02-2020, 08:30 AM

Hello, JaysonFresh.

I'm good for 16 whenever.

Universe · 11-03-2020, 09:32 AM

You couldn't steal a win from INF... You must be seething a little bit
How small is your room for improvement? Man, I couldn't BEGIN to get into it
Always PM'ing ya shit to Zuch, never risking an entrance
You dead kid? Cool. I'm a dust all Fresh prints like forensics
Your expiration date was yesterday, now you sittin' all rotten
If that name's supposed to make us want to punch your face, mission accomplished
Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public
Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it
Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times
Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright
You like, "I've been to prison all my life but I'll never be gay, dog"
And you know what? You bang on... double bunks and stained cots
You talk about knives, guns & residue - we don't once wonder if it's true
Funny how you always discussing exit wounds but nothing's gettin' through...
It's Fresh and me on netcees screen - yeah voters got options
But if Jayson's who dey kiss up to... we must have Horrible Bosses...

JaysonFresh · 11-05-2020, 04:01 PM

ok. so..

Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb
I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one
I drop punchlines. The crowd responds beyond measure
One punch sends Universe far deep into a black hole it'll connect with daughter from Interstellar
quick headshot bruh I gotta tight hand on trigger
make one move and I'll turn Universe into a dead body- You can call me the Zodiac Killer
plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue?
Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you.
last chick call me yo Fresh com over I need a massage
End up giving her pussy kinda Drill that cued up Eye of the Tiger n EVERY training montage
Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure
skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor
Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs
so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours.
Get choked the fff up , hands 'round ya throat squeezed for a minute or 2
..so when i put u ina State of Blue NOT even Trump will contest those votes too

UPN Zuch · 11-05-2020, 04:27 PM

Just stopping by to say great job guys.

iSpaz · 11-05-2020, 06:33 PM

Your expiration date was yesterday, now you sittin' all rotten
If that name's supposed to make us want to punch your face, mission accomplished
You talk about knives, guns & residue - we don't once wonder if it's true
Funny how you always discussing exit wounds but nothing's gettin' through...

vs

Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb
I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one
I drop punchlines. The crowd responds beyond measure
One punch sends Universe far deep into a black hole it'll connect with daughter from Interstellar
plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue?
Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you.
Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure
skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor
Get choked the fff up , hands 'round ya throat squeezed for a minute or 2
..so when i put u ina State of Blue NOT even Trump will contest those votes too

v/fresh. he went in compared to last week. universe had some bars too, i feel like a lot of the bars were complex enough but just not damaging. Like the posting bale/scarecrow, him not being able to post bail, and putting up a scarecrow, both are not a diss really.

Aero · 11-05-2020, 10:39 PM

Universe - posting bale I liked concept. Cleaner wording and it hits.. exit wounds was lol good wording .. cool verse.

Fresh - zodiac killer aiiiight, eye of the tiger LOOOOOOOL you gotta be a special type of person to think if this I laughed out loud, riding coach clever but light, dead beat dad yours was hot...

Uni was cool but Fresh came fresh. Unique style with punchlines that hit.

Mgt Jayson Fresh

Culture · 11-05-2020, 11:45 PM

universe
room for improvement is fire
fresh prints was a miss, not really sure what ur trynna do here tbh. printing his text lines? nahhh
not feeling the mission accomplished shit
bare bones is cool
postin bale is unique, wording mightve been better but i like it
wording on the double bunks bar just kinda misses for me
exit wounds is ok
wp is a bit cringe and wording doesnt help it

fresh
opener is kind of an okay concept worded well
i didnt fully get the interstellar concept tbh but i can infer enough from the wording and it seeems okay, a bit long either way
zodiac bar seems like it means something but it doesnt
space idea is a bit corny and obvious to me
not feeling the eye of the tiger shit
peloton is ok
dead beat dad is dope
blue state is an ok closer

overall fresh had much better wording but universe had more substance. im really tempted to vote against universe for that sudeikis wp but for me it just comes down to the hits in this one

You couldn't steal a win from INF... You must be seething a little bit
How small is your room for improvement? Man, I couldn't BEGIN to get into it
Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public
Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it
Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times
Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright

vs

Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb
I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one
Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs
so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours.

v/ universe by a really, really small margin

UPN Zuch · 11-07-2020, 01:09 AM

Up over no shows

Eviction · 11-07-2020, 06:53 PM

@Universe
dust all fresh prints was cool, mission accomplished was cool, mission accomplished I think hit harder than the rest of your verse.
@JaysonFresh
count on you for a decent one was cool, universe / space from you was killer

/V jayfresh
I have this coming down to the the opening bar, and jayson's hit harder than uni's, also the space from you was a killer play on his name and bar of the battle.

Destroyer · 11-07-2020, 09:51 PM

Opener, exit wounds

Vs

Opener, needed space, closer

Fresh eked it out but it was close

V/jf

Scout · 11-08-2020, 08:00 AM

Univ

Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public
Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it
Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times
Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright
You like, "I've been to prison all my life but I'll never be gay, dog"
And you know what? You bang on... double bunks and stained cots

Exit wounds almost hit

Jay

plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue?
Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you.
last chick call me yo Fresh com over I need a massage
End up giving her pussy kinda Drill that cued up Eye of the Tiger n EVERY training montage
Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure
skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor
Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs
so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours.

Yo honestly
Jay's rhyming was so lazy, it took away from his great ideas
Luckily he did have JUST enough great ideas to edge this out
Barely

Voting Jayson

UserName · 11-08-2020, 01:49 PM

Uni:

Always PM'ing ya shit to Zuch, never risking an entrance
You dead kid? Cool. I'm a dust all Fresh prints like forensics
Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public
Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it

Jay:

Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb
I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one
plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue?
Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you.

damn this was close. got it tied in quotables for me. I liked Uni's ideas, but he had some supppppper old shit mixed in there, like a room for improvement line. I think Jay was a bit wittier but his wording wasnt as crisp in places due to his lackadaisical style.

I'm rolling with Jay on this one, but this is so, so, so, so very close.

V - Jay

Inno · 11-08-2020, 03:04 PM

uni had some dope cocnepts that ddint hit like they should due to wording...that bale line was cool but the wording fucked it all up and it ddint hit hard.

fresh had a much cleaner verse but his concepts was ok. for example that interstellar line was ok but could of been much doper.

close one tbh i know the votes dont szay that but for me it was much closer. ama go with fresh on this one as he had more punches that landed.

fresh

11-02-2020, 08:30 AM	#2
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 999 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178702	Hello, JaysonFresh. I'm good for 16 whenever. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..

11-03-2020, 09:32 AM	#3
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 999 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178702	You couldn't steal a win from INF... You must be seething a little bit How small is your room for improvement? Man, I couldn't BEGIN to get into it Always PM'ing ya shit to Zuch, never risking an entrance You dead kid? Cool. I'm a dust all Fresh prints like forensics Your expiration date was yesterday, now you sittin' all rotten If that name's supposed to make us want to punch your face, mission accomplished Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright You like, "I've been to prison all my life but I'll never be gay, dog" And you know what? You bang on... double bunks and stained cots You talk about knives, guns & residue - we don't once wonder if it's true Funny how you always discussing exit wounds but nothing's gettin' through... It's Fresh and me on netcees screen - yeah voters got options But if Jayson's who dey kiss up to... we must have Horrible Bosses... __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future.. Last edited by Universe; 11-03-2020 at 11:38 AM. Reason: Jason Sudeikis

11-05-2020, 06:33 PM	#6
iSpaz Gang shit on my brain Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 265 Battle Record: 10-11 Rep Power: 161231	Your expiration date was yesterday, now you sittin' all rotten If that name's supposed to make us want to punch your face, mission accomplished You talk about knives, guns & residue - we don't once wonder if it's true Funny how you always discussing exit wounds but nothing's gettin' through... vs Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one I drop punchlines. The crowd responds beyond measure One punch sends Universe far deep into a black hole it'll connect with daughter from Interstellar plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue? Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you. Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor Get choked the fff up , hands 'round ya throat squeezed for a minute or 2 ..so when i put u ina State of Blue NOT even Trump will contest those votes too v/fresh. he went in compared to last week. universe had some bars too, i feel like a lot of the bars were complex enough but just not damaging. Like the posting bale/scarecrow, him not being able to post bail, and putting up a scarecrow, both are not a diss really. __________________ But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God, Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw

11-05-2020, 10:39 PM	#7
Aero GOAT Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 4,827 Battle Record: 14-17 Champed - Site Diss Competition - Tag Tournament III - Lyric Olympics - Tag Tournament: "Omicron Variant" Rep Power: 0	Universe - posting bale I liked concept. Cleaner wording and it hits.. exit wounds was lol good wording .. cool verse. Fresh - zodiac killer aiiiight, eye of the tiger LOOOOOOOL you gotta be a special type of person to think if this I laughed out loud, riding coach clever but light, dead beat dad yours was hot... Uni was cool but Fresh came fresh. Unique style with punchlines that hit. Mgt Jayson Fresh __________________ Too Rich IRL to Be Here. I'm Out.

11-08-2020, 01:49 PM	#13
UserName K I N G Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 685 Battle Record: 15-10 Rep Power: 3228862	Uni: Always PM'ing ya shit to Zuch, never risking an entrance You dead kid? Cool. I'm a dust all Fresh prints like forensics Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it Jay: Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue? Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you. damn this was close. got it tied in quotables for me. I liked Uni's ideas, but he had some supppppper old shit mixed in there, like a room for improvement line. I think Jay was a bit wittier but his wording wasnt as crisp in places due to his lackadaisical style. I'm rolling with Jay on this one, but this is so, so, so, so very close. V - Jay __________________ First Class

11-05-2020, 04:01 PM	#4
JaysonFresh Member Join Date: Jun 2019 Posts: 45 Battle Record: 3-5 Rep Power: 263272	ok. so.. Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one I drop punchlines. The crowd responds beyond measure One punch sends Universe far deep into a black hole it'll connect with daughter from Interstellar quick headshot bruh I gotta tight hand on trigger make one move and I'll turn Universe into a dead body- You can call me the Zodiac Killer plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue? Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you. last chick call me yo Fresh com over I need a massage End up giving her pussy kinda Drill that cued up Eye of the Tiger n EVERY training montage Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours. Get choked the fff up , hands 'round ya throat squeezed for a minute or 2 ..so when i put u ina State of Blue NOT even Trump will contest those votes too

11-05-2020, 11:45 PM	#8
Culture Beast Join Date: Jun 2020 Posts: 36 Battle Record: 3-0 Rep Power: 375064	universe room for improvement is fire fresh prints was a miss, not really sure what ur trynna do here tbh. printing his text lines? nahhh not feeling the mission accomplished shit bare bones is cool postin bale is unique, wording mightve been better but i like it wording on the double bunks bar just kinda misses for me exit wounds is ok wp is a bit cringe and wording doesnt help it fresh opener is kind of an okay concept worded well i didnt fully get the interstellar concept tbh but i can infer enough from the wording and it seeems okay, a bit long either way zodiac bar seems like it means something but it doesnt space idea is a bit corny and obvious to me not feeling the eye of the tiger shit peloton is ok dead beat dad is dope blue state is an ok closer overall fresh had much better wording but universe had more substance. im really tempted to vote against universe for that sudeikis wp but for me it just comes down to the hits in this one You couldn't steal a win from INF... You must be seething a little bit How small is your room for improvement? Man, I couldn't BEGIN to get into it Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright vs Last week's DQ was a tragedy. what he did was dumb I aint worried about u counting lines when I cant even count on u for a decent one Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours. v/ universe by a really, really small margin

11-07-2020, 06:53 PM	#10
Eviction Detained Join Date: Oct 2020 Posts: 1,838 Battle Record: 16-11 Rep Power: 0	@Universe dust all fresh prints was cool, mission accomplished was cool, mission accomplished I think hit harder than the rest of your verse. @JaysonFresh count on you for a decent one was cool, universe / space from you was killer /V jayfresh I have this coming down to the the opening bar, and jayson's hit harder than uni's, also the space from you was a killer play on his name and bar of the battle.

11-08-2020, 08:00 AM	#12
Scout Jeice! Who's that? Join Date: Oct 2020 Posts: 293 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 1230370	Univ Checked his accomps list... Fuck. It's like a horror show in public Shit's so bare bones I found Timothy Treadwell's torso among it Fresh outta bars, no parole - he's in jail broke, tough times Only way ya postin' bale is tryin' to keep a scarecrow upright You like, "I've been to prison all my life but I'll never be gay, dog" And you know what? You bang on... double bunks and stained cots Exit wounds almost hit Jay plus ya relationships r disaster. whos the creepy faak ..wanna clue? Funny we call u Universe... every girl u dated needed space from you. last chick call me yo Fresh com over I need a massage End up giving her pussy kinda Drill that cued up Eye of the Tiger n EVERY training montage Fresh smoov as faaak. ya bars got that choppy structure skillwize I'm flyin first class while u Riding Coach.. thats a Peloton instructor Zuch favored me at -190 . so i procrastinated writing till Thurs so thanks for doing a great job at raising my win pct while I dead beat dad yours. Yo honestly Jay's rhyming was so lazy, it took away from his great ideas Luckily he did have JUST enough great ideas to edge this out Barely Voting Jayson

11-08-2020, 03:04 PM	#14
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,005 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899400	uni had some dope cocnepts that ddint hit like they should due to wording...that bale line was cool but the wording fucked it all up and it ddint hit hard. fresh had a much cleaner verse but his concepts was ok. for example that interstellar line was ok but could of been much doper. close one tbh i know the votes dont szay that but for me it was much closer. ama go with fresh on this one as he had more punches that landed. fresh