09-30-2020, 04:08 PM | #1 |
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High plains drifter, with six shooters & a blood colored sash Eyes remain fixed without a quiver as slugs hover past Wind swept lined roads witnessin' vignettes of dyin' souls Brutally executed in firin' squads with cigarettes & blindfolds A murderin' menace, never burdened with penance Filled with a death wish & remnants of bourbon I've finished Once conspired for the type of life that some admire Not a gun for hire, rather righteous like in the sun retired Somewhere on a ranch raisin' livestock with chicken feed Maybe rescue a chick in need, together raise up a gifted seed A wish indeed, from a sinner on a course of profound wrong 'Cause in reality, I'd fuck you & the horse you rode into town on No sight of good in this leader of a thousand hired hoods Burnin' towns to the ground, usin' housin' as firewood Breathin' an air of arrogance, with a rifle, a Terrorist Pillagin' villages, takin' the 'the' out of Psychotherapist Then harrow hits news of a new Sheriff in town Hope he's fast on the draw 'cause if not, that's a perilous crown No civilized talks just shots provokin' violence Instead of pennies for thoughts, usin' pennies to cover up eyelids Roamin' rollin' plains, bathed in the suns glowin' tint Face provided shade under the shadow of a beard growin' in Back in the saddle, the stranger with a smoulderin' voice Sippin' insecticide from infected hives, my poison of choice Drinkin' non stop until I vomit, needin' a pale or I'll drop An alcoholic physician, I'll nurse whatever ale that you got Death is certain & certainly for sale while demand is high Wish I could stop it but with this bondage fetish my hands are tied.[ |
09-30-2020, 06:06 PM | #2 |
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Damn.
Might be the best I've seen from you. Are you sure you wrote this? lol...
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09-30-2020, 06:25 PM | #3 |
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although, your a herb.. lol this shit was ill.. this is by far the dopest shit you've ever wrote.. I was impressed..
"High plains drifter, with six shooters & a blood colored sash Eyes remain fixed without a quiver as slugs hover past Wind swept lined roads witnessin' vignettes of dyin' souls Brutally executed in firin' squads with cigarettes & blindfolds A murderin' menace, never burdened with penance Filled with a death wish & remnants of bourbon I've finished" peace, - Cor |
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10-07-2020, 08:10 PM | #7 |
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This read like you were setting up for a series man. You painted a picture of a western world filled with archetypal characters with well chosen words and some nice compounds which helped the flow along nicely. I can see you're really elevating. It left me wanting to see where the story goes if you got in mind. The scene is set and the characters are there. Nice imagery. Good work.
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10-07-2020, 08:27 PM | #8 |
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Exis could you kindly PM me when you see this message, please?
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you herb.. lmfao you made me a fan, now I look and feel like you when you read my dope verses and comment with positive criticism.. lol this shit was nasty.. I must of read this like 2-3 times.. lol
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