This My I Love You Then Get Fucked Piece

Exis · 10-05-2015, 12:04 PM

Ayo,

Until the globe isn't down for spinnin'
or time freezes over and we cannot count the minutes
I'll continue to leave you astounded princess
show you that with love there's no bounds or limits
I'd move mountains
some clouds
few rivers
just to prove this to you is all,
'less I'm hand in hand with what's beautiful
then it won't make an ounce of difference
as I don't care what the future holds
if my arms ain't around you in it
I'll keep you close in manoeuvre mode
as we together move from the moment
blissfully coast on emotions to where only us two can go,
a place for the truly devoted...

Well how things have changed thru the ulterior usage of motives
what once mattered has faded
shit's vacated all rapid,
bitch I'm givin' you back all the crap that your fake ass has gave me
maybe in time that'll prevent you from creatin' a pattern,

As it's now fuck my life that I say on the daily
really wanna touch my wife but she's havin' a baby
to another man
wants me to understand
how her love for me's shady while nursin' this skull in my hands
your words are nothin' but bulldust whenever you've sumthin' to share
the relationship's caved in
we failed to maintain it
we've become strangers you cruel slut
done drifted
let's face it,
there's been distance for ages
really thought it would kill upon break up
'til I replaced I miss you with hatred after not makin' it last,
you were always considered an angel
now those feelings are ancient
bitch I constantly wish you were strangled
maybe disfigured all heinous,
or get minced up overtakin' as you stray out and fatally crash
I may just hope that your figure's disabled for bein' played in the past
yeah,
I'll be prayin' for that.

CopyPat · 10-07-2015, 08:23 PM

hahahaha heinous!
"Especially Heinous" - Law an order DUN DUN dah dah dah dah daaaa daaaaa
lol

eh ex sup homie.
this was cool. nice to see somethin different from u. outta ur comfort zone a little so it didn't feel quite up to ur full power but still deec. i know u wrote this pretty fast so im not gonna nitpick, but just wanna say one thing. i think this had good potential but coulda been a lot more dope if the vocab was a little better. just felt a lil basic to me is all. i know the feeling though. u havent written in probly a long time so sometimes it takes a bit to get back into it. i havent been around either and found my first few posts were pretty weak, doesn't take much to get outta the zone, and prob doesn't take much to get back in either. keep posting man, and hit up the cypher too

Exis · 10-09-2015, 04:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by CopyPat

i think this had good potential but coulda been a lot more dope if the vocab was a little better. just felt a lil basic to me is all.

Dumbed down shit was apparently what resonated with the reader, but I havn't been here for like 18 years so maybe that's changed lol, thought scheme made up for that but chea.

It's always appreciated when you feed bro.. I'll send you sumthin' shortly to collab on yeah...if you wants.

I'll also get @ the piece you bumped lol.

Stay up Mr. Mapleleaf.

2tripple0 · 10-18-2015, 10:38 AM

Lol I always heard Canada better than America. Never seen or been anywhere in Canada but That's what I've heard....don't know I grew up in northeast, ya know, da baystate

Anyways sorry for posting to copypat when I should be posting feed for exis. Yeah anyways this piece was splendid with a cool approach I thought as well that the vocabulary was high grade and there needs more pieces like this in the open mic

Ego · 10-30-2015, 05:57 PM

Great poetry, I love how deep it is, very complex. I love it

JESODIST · 11-01-2015, 05:13 AM

The height of my love for you was Pass Unreachable
The fight to keep it Alive? Marked Unbeatable,
So Unique when it came to sex we could make it an Art thats Teachable,
Your tempting breasts and butt were so Soft and Squeezable,
Indented a couple bite scars on times I Thought they were Raw and Eatable,
My face was an open book so Charm and Readable,
Always gave you the won when we would quarell Calm and Agreeable,
For us to be apart from each other was Not Forseeable,
What you did to me was Mad Unbelievable Sad Dispicable Damn Unforgivable,
The punishment didn't fit the crime a Charge Unreasonable,
No satisfaction in mind Swap UnPleasable a relation Flogged as Seasonal,
But I moved on a Path Redeemable so For you to repeat those actions is a Task Unachievable,
The ways were parallel equal you Should have known that my Heart is Freezable,
Now you are happy with another man while these Dudes are Grinning,
Don't bother I'll gladly Seek a New Beginning...

Exis · 11-01-2015, 06:28 AM

You know what...your rhymes are dope, not sure why you add onto my shit tho lol...this the second time you've run up in a thread of mine & ain't leave no feed nigga.

Nameflip · 11-01-2015, 09:32 AM

This was a good read and flew was good too..

Good shit mayne. Looking forward to reading more

Blaccalicious · 11-05-2015, 02:39 PM

Yea shit was nice my G...like the wway you rhyme thru rhymes.. that 1st verse was the best for me.. good shit G

Exis · 11-06-2015, 03:04 AM

Gracias...I will return the favor when I is able too.

10-05-2015, 12:04 PM	#1
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	This My I Love You Then Get Fucked Piece Ayo, Until the globe isn't down for spinnin' or time freezes over and we cannot count the minutes I'll continue to leave you astounded princess show you that with love there's no bounds or limits I'd move mountains some clouds few rivers just to prove this to you is all, 'less I'm hand in hand with what's beautiful then it won't make an ounce of difference as I don't care what the future holds if my arms ain't around you in it I'll keep you close in manoeuvre mode as we together move from the moment blissfully coast on emotions to where only us two can go, a place for the truly devoted... Well how things have changed thru the ulterior usage of motives what once mattered has faded shit's vacated all rapid, bitch I'm givin' you back all the crap that your fake ass has gave me maybe in time that'll prevent you from creatin' a pattern, As it's now fuck my life that I say on the daily really wanna touch my wife but she's havin' a baby to another man wants me to understand how her love for me's shady while nursin' this skull in my hands your words are nothin' but bulldust whenever you've sumthin' to share the relationship's caved in we failed to maintain it we've become strangers you cruel slut done drifted let's face it, there's been distance for ages really thought it would kill upon break up 'til I replaced I miss you with hatred after not makin' it last, you were always considered an angel now those feelings are ancient bitch I constantly wish you were strangled maybe disfigured all heinous, or get minced up overtakin' as you stray out and fatally crash I may just hope that your figure's disabled for bein' played in the past yeah, I'll be prayin' for that.

10-07-2015, 08:23 PM	#2
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742221	hahahaha heinous! "Especially Heinous" - Law an order DUN DUN dah dah dah dah daaaa daaaaa lol eh ex sup homie. this was cool. nice to see somethin different from u. outta ur comfort zone a little so it didn't feel quite up to ur full power but still deec. i know u wrote this pretty fast so im not gonna nitpick, but just wanna say one thing. i think this had good potential but coulda been a lot more dope if the vocab was a little better. just felt a lil basic to me is all. i know the feeling though. u havent written in probly a long time so sometimes it takes a bit to get back into it. i havent been around either and found my first few posts were pretty weak, doesn't take much to get outta the zone, and prob doesn't take much to get back in either. keep posting man, and hit up the cypher too __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

10-18-2015, 10:38 AM	#4
2tripple0 death warmed over Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Downstairs illstreet dam Posts: 2,564 Battle Record: 6-21 Rep Power: 0	Lol I always heard Canada better than America. Never seen or been anywhere in Canada but That's what I've heard....don't know I grew up in northeast, ya know, da baystate Anyways sorry for posting to copypat when I should be posting feed for exis. Yeah anyways this piece was splendid with a cool approach I thought as well that the vocabulary was high grade and there needs more pieces like this in the open mic __________________ https://soundcloud.com/user-876573949/ https://soundcloud.com/user-634430314/

11-01-2015, 09:32 AM	#8
Nameflip I contribute nothing here Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 352 Battle Record: 1-6 Rep Power: 3679433	This was a good read and flew was good too.. Good shit mayne. Looking forward to reading more __________________ + SUMMER SICKSTEEN +

10-30-2015, 05:57 PM	#5
Ego EϛO Join Date: Sep 2014 Location: Yo momma room Posts: 11 Rep Power: 0	Great poetry, I love how deep it is, very complex. I love it

11-01-2015, 05:13 AM	#6
JESODIST Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 295 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 976836	The height of my love for you was Pass Unreachable The fight to keep it Alive? Marked Unbeatable, So Unique when it came to sex we could make it an Art thats Teachable, Your tempting breasts and butt were so Soft and Squeezable, Indented a couple bite scars on times I Thought they were Raw and Eatable, My face was an open book so Charm and Readable, Always gave you the won when we would quarell Calm and Agreeable, For us to be apart from each other was Not Forseeable, What you did to me was Mad Unbelievable Sad Dispicable Damn Unforgivable, The punishment didn't fit the crime a Charge Unreasonable, No satisfaction in mind Swap UnPleasable a relation Flogged as Seasonal, But I moved on a Path Redeemable so For you to repeat those actions is a Task Unachievable, The ways were parallel equal you Should have known that my Heart is Freezable, Now you are happy with another man while these Dudes are Grinning, Don't bother I'll gladly Seek a New Beginning...

11-01-2015, 06:28 AM	#7
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	You know what...your rhymes are dope, not sure why you add onto my shit tho lol...this the second time you've run up in a thread of mine & ain't leave no feed nigga.

11-05-2015, 02:39 PM	#9
Blaccalicious Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	Yea shit was nice my G...like the wway you rhyme thru rhymes.. that 1st verse was the best for me.. good shit G

11-06-2015, 03:04 AM	#10
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Gracias...I will return the favor when I is able too.