10-19-2014, 02:51 AM | #1 |
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Battle Rap 10
This is a guest specialist lecture that you better remember, there’ll be a test worth 100% at the end of semester.
First, get it together, challenging me is not an adventurous venture, it’s a pathetic endeavor. Any attempt is an error. Wherever whenever I sever contenders, every competitor’s lesser. I’m a billionaire - you’re a beggar, The aggressive oppressor, I target your temple like Nebuchadnezzar, Your wounds infect and then fester, you’ll get beheaded, dismembered. This is chess against checkers, respect your intellectual elder. I pressure the center and then accept your surrender, Out rhyming me is an unlikely dream like finding a chest full of treasure with a metal detector. “Zygote is not the best!” - I reject that conjecture, My best has yet to be measured with conventional methods. I sweep opponents aside with an effortless gesture. The Executive Censor reciting eloquent maxims to the Plebeian masses, My rhetoric’s classic - each memorable adage can render you frantic with an envious panic. Every sentence emphatic. I far surpass your irrelevant transcripts. My temperament is to experiment, I test and examine. Your temperament resembles sediment and stands as a testament to a sense of inaction. You’re weak, decrepit and passive, I’ll defeat your supporters with an aggressive advance and envelopment tactics. My prefrontal development massive, make your face resemble an impressionist’s canvas. You’re simply outmatched, our literal gap is a desolate vastness of a size that’s yet to be fathomed. By comparison you’re less than an angstrom. You must be as dense as a molecular lattice to think you’re better than average. Are you chemically imbalanced? Mentally challenged? You’re up against a zealous fanatic. My method is madness - one session will turn your therapist into a melodramatic hysterical manic. I press the advantage. Court is in session it’s your Honor presiding - Now arise for the all defying awe inspiring stalwart of rhyming. Comparing you to me is like comparing crystal quartz to a diamond. I’m an organism that can crush your organs with the force of fault lines colliding. As tough as cephalopod chitin. The top position is filled so don’t bother applying, Facing me is like facing down a band of northern Vikings or a clan of Hunnic horsemen riding towards where you’re hiding. Upon arriving you feel feeble and nervous as your position increasingly worsens, Every reasonable person agrees with the assertion that your defeat will be certain. You’re seemingly worthless, I target the flanks when I start the attack, This is a Volkswagen car vs a tank, a single dollar vs the vault of a bank. You can’t match my hierarchical rank. The Patriarch’s back, your initial submission was foolishly worded, You’re challenging a brutal usurper. It’s clear even to the most neutral observer that you’re soon to be murdered. Aggressive rhymes act as a precursor to an all-out collision - You went all out with a submission that was an out and out fiction, so get it all out of your system or I’ll put you out of commission. You claim you can fuck me up? “Yeah, well, you know, that's just, like, your opinion.” Man, I’m the apex in this animal kingdom. Astounding precision, leave you disorientated like Alzheimer’s symptoms. I denounce competition. A Vandal chief rampaging through your castle keep with no merciful thoughts spared, Off on a tear, I capture and pillage like a Barbary corsair. Trauma and warfare, all opponents are left gawking there with a thousand yard stare. So step in the square with the self-aware software. A debonair extraordinaire so far beyond all the norms. According to law my creative defamation causes such bodily harm that it's a tortious wrong. My corporeal form is remarkably evolved - your corporeal form belongs in a primordial swamp. If you believe you can defeat me - your logic is flawed. Thinking you’re skilled? You’re an autistic savant without the savant. You’re just a fraud. I’ll discharge millions of watts until your nervous system shuts off. |
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fuck i missed reading these.
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one of your better in recent memory. glad to see you back man. whether youve been ghosting an alias or not. thanks take care
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10-19-2014, 05:11 PM | #3 | ||||
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zygote's back!
Welcome back, @zygote. It seems like these generally get better with each one. This was exceedingly polished. The only knock is that it got repetitive. You didn't really try anything outside the box, as you have in others, though I noticed I still got a mention because my user name is a very common word. Here are the parts that stood out to me, though I might as well quote the entire thing: Quote:
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10-19-2014, 06:08 PM | #4 |
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this shit is the epitome of ridiculous rapping
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10-19-2014, 11:00 PM | #5 |
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I like Zyg
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10-19-2014, 11:31 PM | #6 |
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10-19-2014, 11:45 PM | #7 |
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I was sold @ Nebuchadnezzar nigga
Dope read
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10-20-2014, 02:03 AM | #8 |
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Bravo! Not much to critique, although it did become a bit monotonous.
Yet, an applause is in order for the superb execution of technique & wit. |
10-20-2014, 12:28 PM | #9 |
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FUCKA sucked
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10-22-2014, 04:08 AM | #10 |
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Reject that conjecture Fault lines Impressionist sketch Dollar/ bank Foolish observer rhyme scheme My favorites One of your best flexes. Certainly one of the best flexes in the OM in the past two months. Wish the rhyming was as snappy throughout the piece with more consistency, though I realize that over-rhyming can be very tiresome for the reader if not carefully managed. In this respect, I think you could improve. You have a great control over your meter and rhythm, and IMO certain portions of your drops are the site benchmark for having natural sentence structure while maintaining buttery wording. Juggling act. But you can improve your drops in the holistic sense, like when and where to apply what talents and to what degree For someone coming off of a half-year hiatus this was unreal
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10-23-2014, 05:43 PM | #11 |
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“Zygote is not the best!” - I reject that conjecture,
My best has yet to be measured with conventional methods. I sweep opponents aside with an effortless gesture. The Executive Censor reciting eloquent maxims to the Plebeian masses, My rhetoric’s classic - each memorable adage can render you frantic with an envious panic. that whole section just drew so much confidence it flowed together so perfectly and showed your skill I remember reading these a lot before I left and this seems like a very huge improvement since then not saying there was much too improve..it's just amazing.. nice work my dude
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10-23-2014, 11:35 PM | #12 |
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“Zygote is not the best!” - I reject that conjecture,
My best has yet to be measured with conventional methods. I sweep opponents aside with an effortless gesture. that was TOUGH. |
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10-25-2014, 01:27 PM | #14 |
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One of the g.o.a.t.'s imo
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