Nevermind I'm Done

[Mr. J]

As it...cascades my brain, this most abstract pain
this absent gain, in what was once called passion
Rain, hits the window and brings life when the sun's out
covering the traveler lost on I-5 when your thumb's out
wrung out, another pair of socks pruning my skin
I found my mind the other day but I'd like to lose it again
proof in the limb, the hill, & gravity where the apple falls
if I'm far from the tree, I wasn't supposed to be rooted after all
backward drop, I guess it's all an example based on faith
judgement from others that's simply based on race...
but I continue this forward route, bored or loused...
lost...whatever it means to be the one tortured by doubt
I'm an example of nothing, but everything based on that
just another reason for someone to come and embrace y'all act
but I'm far more constructed when I remain uninterrupted
when I stay on balance and come rounded like sir cumference
I don't understand the idea y'all drop seems errrrrredundant
I'm sad for y'all but I applause like that's part of the everyday grind
I'm bored right now and thought I'd different pace to ride
hey.....I'm fine....like wine and such
but before I go....nevermind I'm done

[Camp Bell]

i always feel like some of these open mics
is our way of saying wats wrong with netcees
and this is where this piece took me. i also
liked the way it flowed, not sure if you misspelled
some words purposely (pet peeve) but either way
shit was still dope. not much more to say, i dont
really like critiquing cuz an artists work is what he
intends it to be, not what we feel it should be. rock
out bruh.

[AndyHiro]

Originally Posted by Mr. J

I'm an example of nothing, but everything based on that
just another reason for someone to come and embrace y'all act
but I'm far more constructed when I remain uninterrupted
when I stay on balance and come rounded like sir cumference
I don't understand the idea y'all drop seems errrrrredundant
I'm sad for y'all but I applause like that's part of the everyday grind
I'm bored right now and thought I'd different pace to ride
hey.....I'm fine....like wine and such
but before I go....nevermind I'm done

Don't leave Mr. J the game needs you! But I feel you.

[Listen]

Simply put... this... was...very...well...written...

Now,

Question... I was going to start quoting stuff etc... and realized "The chap just dropped back to back great lines"... and then it started declining towards the end... and I was going to comment on this "dropped off" etc...

Then,

Digressing back to my question...

I thought - maybe this was the whole meaning of the piece... a continuation into nothing concluding in:

"never mind im done"

If so,

Brilliant.

Well written. Hopefully you are not done. We write for us, not for a reply, we write for us and sharing in the hopes someone will give us feedback to help us grow in expressing ourselves.

[Scripter]

makes you wonder how many people on here have multiple accounts...
nice drop