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08-27-2014, 04:27 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 6,473
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Muah!
I love my bitch, servin me grub on fresh plates and platters.
Plus, she sucks my dick until the cum changes states of matter. With a glowing, red-hot dick head, I bone her beastly Tryna get it till it cooks her ovaries over easy. Each egg's like a breakfast snack, but bloody. Oh buddy, I beat the crap out of that infected snatch. I'm pumping fast. It's out of this world. My dick's in orbit. Shit, she kills it. Then I let her fuck it rigamortus. Sit on my face. I want to be waterboarded. A tongue so sharp, when I start, you'd think she got aborted. I'm on her to force in this foreskin until it tears open. Hopefully it stops at the ball seam. I'm scared, stroking Like I was epileptic. My cock foaming at the mouth. I plug it shut. My balls inflate and I am floating now. Let her lick my ass while she's jerking it too. Her tongue slidin through my bowels and playing peekaboo dude; It sticks out real quick, from the tip of my dick If I spot it, and grip it, then I'm the shit and I win! Put my hand in her puss. Tryna push out her navel. I succeed in my endeavour and achieve what is fabled. Orgasm. Her spasms run deep as a chasm. So deep in her throat, she's basically eating my ass. Yum.
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Posts: 12,072
Battle Record: 40-19
Champed - AOWL Season 3
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You might be spending too much time around @CopyPat. This verse was excellent, though. The rhymes were fresh, and the humor actually was funny. I'm not sure how I'd prefer to hear this rapped: A deadpan style could work, but the humor might be better with a more goofy, off-center delivlery. There were a couple of bumps that I think would be evident upon edit, but these were my favorite sections:
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08-28-2014, 02:17 AM
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Join Date: Mar 2013
Location: Calgary Alberta Canada
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haha certain how did u know??
dope shit OBV
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08-28-2014, 04:49 PM
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Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
Posts: 5,716
Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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sucked. maybe if u were better itd be good
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08-28-2014, 05:05 PM
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Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 16,801
Battle Record: 30-41
Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded
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This was dope, I liked it a lot.
You can do better tho.
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08-28-2014, 05:37 PM
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Om
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08-28-2014, 09:59 PM
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Join Date: Sep 2013
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FIG, WHO DO YA LOVE?/...
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08-28-2014, 10:53 PM
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Join Date: Aug 2014
Location: on the couch
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I thought this was pretty cool.
I've not viewed raps or poems about dirty sexuality in this manner. I give a thumbs up. props to @Certain for giving honest and detailed reviews of users' posts.
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08-28-2014, 11:22 PM
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08-29-2014, 08:22 AM
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Join Date: May 2013
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This was my favorite part great word play and rhyme scheme.
"Plus, she sucks my dick until the cum changes states of matter. With a glowing, red-hot dick head, I bone her beastly Tryna get it till it cooks her ovaries over easy. Each egg's like a breakfast snack, but bloody. Oh buddy, I beat the crap out of that infected snatch. I'm pumping fast. It's out of this world. My dick's in orbit. Shit, she kills it. Then I let her fuck it rigamortus."
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08-29-2014, 03:20 PM
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disturbing.
when you lick her out she thinks she was aborted? Oh i get it a tounge so sharp...(I went back and reread it) still disturbing ... Nah this is awful I dont wanna know about yout dick Last edited by Plot; 08-29-2014 at 03:24 PM. |
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