08-22-2014, 02:40 PM | #2 |
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08-25-2014, 12:13 PM | #3 |
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ya girl give me head in park, she feelin this aim, drive
and she dont mind if you put her in gear.... cause yo scronny ass wears the same size |
08-25-2014, 11:31 PM | #4 |
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speaking of girlfriends..
u think that fat bitch gets called beautiful like she's attractive but when people say she Gorges, its to describe her eating habits |
08-26-2014, 01:36 AM | #5 |
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Wow great battle. Similar themes. Both came with it. Jil has never done better imo. He is really stepping it up. Only fault I could really find was the pronounciation of the gorges wp. When I say it as gorgeous and gorges they have a different sound. Such as gorjiss and gorjiz. Other than that I would say best battle I seen so far. Knowp I thought was a little bit more creative with the entire concept and misdirection but that isn't taking anything away from Jil.
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08-26-2014, 01:49 AM | #6 |
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KnowP: The setup was terrible. The punchline was fine, but I don't like generic lines in 1-2 punch leagues. All you have to do is come up with one line about a guy. Make it at least a nameplay if not a personal.
jilti: This was a very cleanly executed generic punch. So the same problem exists, but you handled yourself better. Vote: jilti
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08-26-2014, 03:04 AM | #7 |
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Both had cool wordplay here but IMO jiltis was smoother
And harder hitting so my vote goes to j |
08-26-2014, 10:38 AM | #8 |
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V jilt. Read smoother nhad a cleaner setup. Thought kp's wording was a little jumbled.
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08-26-2014, 10:49 AM | #10 |
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08-26-2014, 03:38 PM | #11 |
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Nice battle.
KnowP: Your bar could've been far more awesome if you tweaked that first line. I might come off picky, but that "feeling this aim, drive" took away from the bar a little. Filler'ish. But, still, I found this to be a pretty dope punch with some unique wordplay...although, we don't know if Jilti is actually scrawny or not. That's an unverifiable personal, lol; but, other than that, I dig it. Jilti: These are some clean lines. You didn't slack off with the set-up, and it flowed nicely into the Gorgeous / Gorges flip...giving us a pretty enjoyable bar that's more "in-your-face" than anything. Vote: Jilti. Much cleaner and hard-hitting. I just sensed more consistency. |
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