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We're all alone inside..... except for the ecoli that lives with you from that old country buffet.
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My grandparents took me to that place on every visit when I was a buck. I used to think it was a fancy as fuck place as a young man.
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Nah I was about that roast beef and free ice cream dessert. YOU COULD MAKE AS MANY CONES AS YOUR HEART DESIRED.
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Welcome. Do you write?
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Cool, looking forward to it.
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@Vulgar Reading and re-reading your critiques of not only my verses but others, I feel as though you have this well-earned air of superiority. That cute, no one knows what the fuck you're talking feed is belying you now. You miss the point and heart of a lot of verses when I review feed.
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@PancakeBrah, upon review, the feed I gave on your Pale verse was horrible.
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In on Pinot Grij alias thread
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My goal with feedback is to provide commentary that could be relevant toward future verses. I find myself often talking almost exclusively about the writing rather than the content. In votes, I try to bring up a person's approach to a topic and maybe talk more about the content, but even then, the goal is to highlight strengths and work out weaknesses.
I think a lot of people here seem more focused on discerning meaning, in finding their own value in verses. I do that while I read, but the reason we want feedback is so we can improve, right?
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