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samurai soul. self sacrifice who sat in a grove watched the valleys grow to cityscapes and vanish below it could be simple. like a ripple in a glass of merlot a flash of the bulb, grainy photograph, thumbtacked to a post let me relax. pass me a bowl. inhale. catch me a cold keep our conversations light. mindset blackness. the crow flamethrow the industry. incinerate her majesty's throne embers ashy like your knuckles when you wrinkle your nose have a toast. when we celebrate it's laughter and jokes then it's reminiscing. buried issues. acid we dosed alleyway and misdemeanors. phantoms and ghosts we've never crossed the cliffside. but we have to be close take notes. abstract smoke until we've graveled our throats live in squalor but we dream inside a palace of gold i've decided to go. summarize the visit, tell me goodbye fare thee well synthesized. doors that slam in the night desert sand and pentagrams and mescaline highs not another vice is so self-centered as pride don't let me down, just let me die. every sentence is fine tuned like blues musicians in a century's time exhibitionistic emperor who's dressed to resign the Peoples Temple accepted me then left me behind death in your eyes. becoming beautiful is only a slice away from bathtub runways and celebrity life. open you twice, steel wool stitch design recapture your light before the black is permanent instead of alright. gnats and mice. pork and rice, pad thai dinner arrangements kissed her grave just to think about how bitter it tasted that sinking sensation, all too familiar, let it dissolve alka seltzer. aspirin regiments and medicine balls telephone calls collect like a fortunate lick i've been victimized by imitation more than a bit his lordship. mighty morpheme power laser equipped horseback ranger with an arrow pointed straight at your neck leave me exempt. forget your hall of fame and respect probably rated best. i haven't bothered to check molten lava. magma melodies that melted the wax whether crystalized or fluid our intelligence stats candles and chrysanthemum, that sensory snap crackling like cherrywood. that's Frank with an axe make me detach. watch it petrify and fade into blue i'm only strange serendipity like you.. DEADMAN
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i challenge you to write something happy.
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Weird. I read this and it reminded me of something you wrote before, and I couldn't remember it except for one description ("oasis of fidelity and honest compassion). So I googled that and voila, here it was:
http://m.datehookup.com/forums.aspx?...3895&rewrite=1 So don't listen to pancake. People out there need these lyrics to get pussy.
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Omg.
I need to stop this.
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Life is ruff and your passion to express your inner conflict is a cry for someone to love you, even through your countless betrayals. Perchance, two wounded hearts will line up with Cupid's aiming bow! Maybe after that Casablanca tape runs out.
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This is what I like. never change.
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Is that a DIFFERENT dating site too? Ugh
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If you google the name markuschristoph you can see how many of my fucking verses this scumbag faggot has posted as his own on that site. One was kinda funny but this is too much. I am legitimately fucking heated right now but I'm mobile and there's nothing i can do about it.
Formally requesting anybody to make an acct there and expose this fucking idiot. If not I'll just do it when I get to a computer. Jesus.
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wonder who the fuck it is.
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I just messaged him. He said he hasn't gotten laid.
explains the sad verses. lol jk Life is ruff and your passion to express your inner conflict is a cry for someone to love you, even through your countless betrayals. Perchance, two wounded hearts will line up with Cupid's aiming bow! Maybe after that Casablanca tape runs out. jk again. But yeah, this was nice. The thing about your verses is that it's heartfelt and monotonous, yet very smart and underlined. One of my paragraph verses couldn't prompt such a response but the weirdness allocates a different emotion - which is more closely constituted to weirdness, abstract, and spontaneity, where yours is a more of a commercial emotion , sadness, confusion and empathy. More regular people, whether into cadence or not will always understand what that is moreso than the former emotions. This was good. I stopped reading about 9/10ths of the way through, not due to boredom but because Pancakes comment prompted me to scroll down. I see |
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"markuschristoph reseda"
thanks bwhahahahaaha i didnt know emotions worked that way. is happiness commercial too?
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lets kill this loserrrrr
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Lmao it seems like this guy hasn't stolen a verse since 2012 though
I'd say let it go. Obviously nothing became of it. Dude's just a loser.
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True. Didn't even check the dates of the posts... You are a calming presence fig
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opener was serene. how Jack and Aku.
bathtub runways was unreal, really enjoyed the original idioms throughout. things that aren't consciously conceptualized but exist in all of our lives. If this little forum had any readership the effects would be shakespearian. I think about that all the time. this verse felt dusky. anti-finite but limited. the fuzzy scrapings of shadowfall within the in between. commuter rail nostalgia. I feel as though this piece was a search for a feeling or idea too subtle for description, too many shades of gray, but perhaps it is a very particular feeling or idea that isn't as commercialized as hallmark greeting card emotion tones it was all very comfortable and personable, but not emphatic. well-written vent or release without being contrived literature like so many drops seem to be (not u personally I mean everyone's always grinding for recognition). I enjoyed it though. Keep writing black.
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If he's smashing a considerable amount of punani tho....then would this dissuade you....or infuriate u further? |
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dont call me bwhaha david. dat not me. also, yes. good 2 no im teaching u a lesson
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on one hand, it would give me pride that something i wrote makes depends drop off the bedridden whales that likely frequent that site on the other hand, those whale diapers are clearly being dropped for the wrong reasons in the hands of the wrong person. so that is infuriating. i still want this motherfucker dead. but that is a unique perspective. thank you bags. @Split you are awesome. good looking out.
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black is ur first name actually Dave?
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