03-15-2014, 03:23 AM | #1 |
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Alex Trebek
You think Alex Trebek is an unassuming quiz show host?
The kid’s no joke – trust me, fuckin with him’s a big no-no See, by all appearances he’s lived the life of a scholar He’s read the Brontës and Chaucer, Jane Austen and Faulkner He’s studied the sciences: biology, physics, chemistry And it’s this acumen that’ll put your whole family’s lives in Jeopardy! His occupation’s often taken lightly cuz he’s viewed in your homes But with his intellect, he could fuckin’ crack the nuclear codes I say, the man is a maniac, driven by his disdain for insipience Thinks the whole American populace are miscreants and idiots That evil Canadian bastard sits up on his high horse And takes a splattery shit on a U.S. flag every July 4th ................................................. Trebek tinkers with his creation, sworn to a fanatical pledge Attaching the robotic torso to its mechanical legs He mutters… “A handsome, muscular TV host who demands his respect” “Who is Alex Trebek” “With his chiseled body, he could swim the English Channel, no sweat” “Who is Alex Trebek” He constructs his monster, smirking at his mathematical charms As he solders the robotic torso to its mechanical arms He mutters… “Masculine, dick like a javelin, but holds his malice in check” “Whooooo…… iiiiiiis…. Alexxx Trebek” “This studmuffin hasn’t met an intellectual challenger yet” “BITCH, I’M MOTHERFUCKING ALEX TREBEK!!!!” “MUAAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAA” ................................................. His beast comes to life, Trebek smirks in elation A murderous robot, he’s finally birthed his creation An electronic manifestation made to showcase his wisdom And they take off in his Aston Martin to locate his victims *Knock knock* Pat Sajak has just finished a huge mountain of coke His magic dust to appeal to the nightly crowds he invokes He answers the door, suddenly aghast as he’s met… By a giant blue-faced robot, and fucking Alex Trebek “Hello Pat, you faggot, by now my hate should be obvious… Cuz your show ahead of mine is a disgrace to my audience See, your pussy ass is dead, this robot’s really a weapon To kill plebeians who can’t answer a simple trivia question: “This blonde idiot is broadcasted on all of the biggest stations Let’s call this ignoramus the hugest bitch in syndication. Lacking innovation, plus me and this bitch go way back…” Pat shudders, “Who is…. P-P-P-Pat Sajak?” BOOM The robot left Pat’s brains splattered on the veranda light Alex smirked, “Wrong bitch.. who is Vanna White” Trebek drove off, with his robot, feeling refreshed Showed up on the doorstep of that douchebag, Ryan Seacrest The door opened, Trebek said, “Ryan, you midget queer.. Your show’s lack of acuity is what brings me here I’ll let you maintain your job and your faggoty rep If you can answer this pop quiz, bitch, I’m Alex Trebek!” “This Jackson bitch inspired madness with their musical knack But turned light-skinned in the 80s when they refused to be black” Seacrest stuttered, “Who-o-o i-i-i-is Michael?” That’s when the robot blew off his frosted tips with its rifle As Seacrest’s blood pooled around his head in the foyer Trebek chuckled, “You fucking fuck, I was talking about LaToya” They sped off, as Trebek cleaned the blood from his fingernails And drove to the front door of Wikipedia’s Jimmy Wales “Hello you British bitch, we gotta be man-to-man with shit Your website singlehandedly dumbed down our College Championship That’s why I’m at your door with the most callous of threats, Are you ready to die, limey? I’m fucking Alex Trebek!” “Before your shitty site, there was a volume encyclopedic And every grade school child in the world was forced to read it” Jimmy cried, “Oh blimey, it must be the Britannica, chap!” Trebek threw his head back, “Nice try, with your amateur ass… Welcome to America, I guess consider this sort of a lesson Faggot, your answer must be given in the form of a question” Trebek laughed and winked, then motioned to his machine The robot opened fire and Wales was blown to smithereens See, there’s a TV host that needs his chemical imbalances checked But no one dares to fuck with the man that they call Alex Trebek
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03-15-2014, 03:27 AM | #2 |
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pretty cool
. good to see your name back around. just dropping in to say hello, pinot bump
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03-15-2014, 11:18 AM | #3 |
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Ayo.
This is my favorite topical i ever read. No lie. Just the idea of him being this twisted evil genius pulled me in off the jump.....when he was asking himself trivia questions based on himself as the answer.....shit felt straight out of a comic book on sum riddler type shit LOL...awesomely done.....then when u had him hunting down rival gameshow hosts .....just awesome..... Oh...an it was hilarious how u had him talking....."u fucking fuck" "canadian faggot queer" ...lol...everybpart of me prays that he really talks like that behind scenes. HOF nod. |
03-15-2014, 11:26 AM | #4 |
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Mad smart stupid funny
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03-15-2014, 11:48 AM | #5 |
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I don't get some of the TV host references except for Alex Trebek's, but that's because I barely ever watch television. The humor and entertainment value of this was undeniable. Very solid construction and flawless wording. I wonder if you used the word 'faggot' so many times to appeal to a Netcee affiliated audience, lol. If I watched TV, I would've understood and enjoyed it 40% more. The beginning was hot.
I'm going to HOF nod it because it was so well done, and I'm sure others would enjoy this in the future if it were archived properly. Keep doing you |
03-19-2014, 06:10 PM | #6 |
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really good! this is the template for a creative topical. something off the wall and very open. Its content was simple, but the storyline in itself made this really really good!!!
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03-20-2014, 03:17 AM | #7 |
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holy shit. this is seriously dope as F-word bruh. one of, if not THE single most original open mic i have ever read in my life. that may be exaggerating(although i can't really think of anything more original at the moment) but i DO know for sure that along with being original it was also skillfully written and smooth as shit, which makes it EASILY one of the best things i've ever read, period.
hard to accomplish having a good/different/original/new idea AND still incorporating some complicated schemes and vocab etc. so major props here. the insertion of pictures was also a nice add. not sure what else to say really man. i'de vote for this too. super sick
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03-20-2014, 09:19 AM | #8 |
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Very humorous and a good conversational writing style. The part in italics was a top highlight. Not familiar with any of the references but it was still extremely funny so the characterization and introduction at the start was really good to set everything up.
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03-20-2014, 12:11 PM | #9 |
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Pinot writes these type pieces the best imo
dialogue is dood's strong suite. They r always wiity af, fluid, and smooth. def a nice piece. I enjoyed the read.
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03-20-2014, 04:03 PM | #10 |
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I actually loved this piece, read it last night for the first time. I really loved where you went with the topic. Good Luck this week. Respect.
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Dope.
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03-20-2014, 05:34 PM | #12 |
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HOF nod imo
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props. dope verse
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03-20-2014, 07:56 PM | #14 |
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You're the best on the site at writing funny topicals, a skill no one really uses nowadays. This was awesome.
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03-20-2014, 07:59 PM | #15 |
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This reminds me older Hip Hop that wasn't so aware of itself. It's fun, basic and refreshing.
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this was hilarious, good shit.
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Rest in peace.
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