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Seismic trembles and faults in the surface from the march of formations
The vast Army bends the horizon with strategic archery placement The arrival tilts the Earth's axis and turns every ministry gothic Battles left physically exhausted...too stoned for infinity gauntlets War ensues, giving a conscious to infantry prophets They pay attention to dwindling stocks with an interest on profits Basilisk tongues in native language curses an innocent goddess Mercenaries visit a homage and take a citizen hostage Darkness from the clouds form to blanket the swarms of the mourning Storms in the morning...lightning strikes the swords of Hattori! ...The battles resumes... A chainmail breastplate covers the heart of a warrior His unorthodox stance defends how the art is notorious He strikes fear into his enemies and all who oppose Rulers cower in fear from the loss of control A lone hero emerges to claim the throne of the people He dismantles the seat and proclaims,"You cannot own what is equal"... |
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dope.. reminds me of my boy Prominence from an old ezboard forum that myself and a dude named, "Nous Novelty" use to run called, "The Forbidden Grounds"..
My boy prom said something like.. "I'll blow up in your face like a nuclear warhead, and something, something, something.. gravity compresses your forehead" I cant remember everything to be exact, hence, I used the words, "something, something, something".. lol but in retrospective, this shit was dope.. You know nous was curse right? He was around on ncs1 before it crashed and this site was made... Had his number.. He dissapeared though aint heard from him in forever... Think i still have one of the pieces we dis before he vanished...
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Thanks for the feed
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This was dope
I can easily picture GZA or Inspecta Deck talk-rapping these bar. I like the epic battle laced poetry kind of vibe this piece gives off. Well worded and crafted. I dug it. Let’s collab. Peace.
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To stoned for infinity gauntlets ...unghh
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Dope. The imagery and use of vocab was crazy in this. You painted a picture of war in a short piece with nothing wasted.
"The arrival tilts the Earth's axis and turns every ministry gothic Battles left physically exhausted...too stoned for infinity gauntlets" Compound rhymes were tight but never forced. It's too easy for writers to go too much or too little with that but you got the balance right. Great job. -6 |
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Cool joint...flow wise it's nice, imagery was tight... Don't really have anythin' left to say lol.
I liked it fam, stay upright. |
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