I Stand a Man

Blaccalicious · 09-09-2015, 02:14 PM

I stand a man so you can try to verbally beatdown
I pick myself up, from the concrete ground
with thoughts hard enough, if said it splits heads
like piss tests - you pissed off, got your boys instead
must interject, the impact of the disrespect
disc connects from kick back of the infa-red
6'S branded. No fingerprints but footprints
dome lookin like golf balls. Swung on.. Tiger Wood shit
put a bill on it, eye notted up like Bushwick
so called wolves get boxed like cookie crisps
..... dish in the general's meal (mill)
do you have genitals still? I'm here for gender appeal
femme fatales.. Blessed im a gentlemen still
I mean well but a mean L is what I'll instill
gental Giant, wars on I get my helmet n gear
quick to riot, warzone. Bring help up in here

Hook (2x)
I stand a man, a gladiator, with God in me
humble..dont under estimate the soft in me
rumble, like monks who meditate on rocks - do Chi
can turn the other cheek, same motion put you to sleep

Given foes can swallow on their syllables and choke
I'm african..I know all about the sticks n stones
so miss me with the threats
cuz it aint bout the fear put in a man's heart but the distance that you'll go
so if you put your hands on me, may
be like a animal cage... I'll show my mandible strength
bite force that'll mangle you, teeth laceratin to
the bone marrow. Pain goes beyond the bearable
In this modern day..... the genres terrible
petty - eye for an eye like Fetty. Causes burials
I stand a man as the bigger man to walk away
you lost niggas might as well bury your son like Marvin Gaye
couldnt fit in my boots, soldier
you'd be buried alive if you stooped any lower
talk sideways caution when i side walk
that chatterbox gets smashed to the curb of the sidewalk
in my humblest regards

Hook (2x)
I stand a man, a gladiator, with God in me
humble..dont under estimate the soft in me
rumble, like monks who meditate on rocks - do Chi
can turn the other cheek, same motion put you to sleep

Mr. J · 10-12-2015, 02:44 PM

Im not a fan of having hooks in verses but cool whatever...
I thought that first verse showcased some cool transitioning
it made for a smooth read because the flow is just rapid
having that hook in there just kind of skewered the joy I felt from the start
anyway I enjoyed what I did read, so good job buddy..

Exis · 10-16-2015, 08:11 AM

Hook is anal...thought the openin' was cool but needed some multies to really hit me flow wise.Like your content, not sure about word usage tho.

Enjoyable regardless.

Stay upwards brethren.

09-09-2015, 02:14 PM	#1
Blaccalicious Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	I Stand a Man I stand a man so you can try to verbally beatdown I pick myself up, from the concrete ground with thoughts hard enough, if said it splits heads like piss tests - you pissed off, got your boys instead must interject, the impact of the disrespect disc connects from kick back of the infa-red 6'S branded. No fingerprints but footprints dome lookin like golf balls. Swung on.. Tiger Wood shit put a bill on it, eye notted up like Bushwick so called wolves get boxed like cookie crisps ..... dish in the general's meal (mill) do you have genitals still? I'm here for gender appeal femme fatales.. Blessed im a gentlemen still I mean well but a mean L is what I'll instill gental Giant, wars on I get my helmet n gear quick to riot, warzone. Bring help up in here Hook (2x) I stand a man, a gladiator, with God in me humble..dont under estimate the soft in me rumble, like monks who meditate on rocks - do Chi can turn the other cheek, same motion put you to sleep Given foes can swallow on their syllables and choke I'm african..I know all about the sticks n stones so miss me with the threats cuz it aint bout the fear put in a man's heart but the distance that you'll go so if you put your hands on me, may be like a animal cage... I'll show my mandible strength bite force that'll mangle you, teeth laceratin to the bone marrow. Pain goes beyond the bearable In this modern day..... the genres terrible petty - eye for an eye like Fetty. Causes burials I stand a man as the bigger man to walk away you lost niggas might as well bury your son like Marvin Gaye couldnt fit in my boots, soldier you'd be buried alive if you stooped any lower talk sideways caution when i side walk that chatterbox gets smashed to the curb of the sidewalk in my humblest regards Hook (2x) I stand a man, a gladiator, with God in me humble..dont under estimate the soft in me rumble, like monks who meditate on rocks - do Chi can turn the other cheek, same motion put you to sleep Last edited by Blaccalicious; 09-09-2015 at 05:11 PM.

10-12-2015, 02:44 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Im not a fan of having hooks in verses but cool whatever... I thought that first verse showcased some cool transitioning it made for a smooth read because the flow is just rapid having that hook in there just kind of skewered the joy I felt from the start anyway I enjoyed what I did read, so good job buddy.. __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

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10-16-2015, 08:11 AM	#3
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Hook is anal...thought the openin' was cool but needed some multies to really hit me flow wise.Like your content, not sure about word usage tho. Enjoyable regardless. Stay upwards brethren.