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07-11-2013, 02:33 AM
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Don't believe the hype
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catch a teeth ache when it's a bitten of me
not sure if you meant tooth ache, but teeth ache adds some personality to the written. and I fell for the trap lol cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. but I did catch this Quote:
But it's part of my job to use the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone, I do expoloring to get lost in sound of new recordings. Dropping the 'a', fixing the 'you' typo to use, comma after gone and dropping 'the' in "in the sound". // Very dope drop...flow was hot and hit.
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What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope. Last edited by Coup; 07-11-2013 at 02:36 AM. |
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07-12-2013, 06:51 PM
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All it needs is commas. It's a part of my job to you, the boarder, to draw in your thoughts and view the story. He's not talking about borders and shit. It's a parenthetical phrase clarifying who he's drawing in and giving his stories. Don't fuck around anymore.
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07-12-2013, 07:37 PM
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What is public must be legit, fit for average consumption, don't forget. What is private is handled by pirates, prying loose profits from prosthetics. To tell the difference between: first remain unseen with a steady breath and hope, then listen to the cracks in the wall with a stethoscope. |
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