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Old 12-07-2024, 12:28 PM   #1
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Maximus had once been a titan in Silicon Valley,
Never famous, but known in its shadows and alleys.
His inventions had shaped systems, codes, and companies—
Tools the world used without ever knowing him publicly.
But Max wasn’t a glutton for money; he never lusted for fame.
It was the craft that he loved—the innovation he craved.
But that all changed when he left it abruptly, after discovering
How industry giants were misusing his tools to spy on the public.
Now he moonlights as a sleuth, a private detective,
Solving the complex cases that police couldn’t crack—
Like cybercrime and fraud caused by exceptionally hackers.
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Old 12-07-2024, 10:03 PM   #2
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i dont really like these topical/story telling type shits often - in written or in the shit i listen to

that being said, this was nice.

likely cause it didn't overstay its welcome. that might sound insulting lol but sometimes its a skill not to just overstretched something for the sake of it - & while not overly complex (again, not an insult, i didn't get the impression you were trying to be), every line served a purpose.

i liked it. ending was abit anticlimactic though. but its cool.

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I’m pretty sure I posted this by mistake.

If you’re interested here’s the “final” /improved version, I guess.

Unfortunately, it did overstay its welcome by a fairly wide margin. But, it also got much better before it all fell apart.

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=164715
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