TYSON vs YDK (topical) - VOID FOR LINKS

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Yeah its two vote links each @TYSON @YDK


Ok well this was an all round enjoyable read from both. However, there were subtle differences (strengths highlighted) that I am basing my decision on.

Tyson came solid, his content surpassing his rhyming technicality for this piece, however that's not to say his rhyming wasn't good, I just would of loved to have seen some more internals an complex schemes to really keep it flowing hot. Content wise he took a different step then the obvious, got creative with the topic, kept it on point, engaging and solid.

YDK I felt at first you were stepping up with some more emphasis on the rhyme scheme then the content but after a nice start tailed off quick in both.

I dreamed of a family that could grow into their ambitions,
Was I too ambitious?
Because everything I longed for was lost in transitions.
The down-fall of us all blind faith in our "leaders"
Trusting them to lead us while they refuse to free us!
Jesus! Even retreating to preachers can't get them to see us,
Unless there molesting the young and distorting their features
JUST MEET US!


All of that above was really slacked, I mean you used us as an end rhyme in 3 lines.... An the content was weak there seemed to be a real lack in direction.

Granted it got better in the next part but by that point the game was set and match.



Vote Tyson

(feel free to shout me if you want some more detailed reasoning)