An Allegory of Truth and Time

[Paytience]

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[Concrete]

Originally Posted by Paytience

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=4324

Not sure if that was implying something but for what it's worth I enjoyed both verses. Good to see you still writing Nigma.

[Adverse]

Originally Posted by Paytience

http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=4324

Yeah I mean this has nothing to do with this verse. Just because his quoted text mentions a cave and the title mentions allegory doesn’t mean they have anything to do with each other.

I’d read this verse about three times and hadn’t had proper time to feed until now

This was a cool verse I’m sorry you didn’t get to drop it we moved on rather fast last week. Think this is a good topic but almost feel like it has too much going on in it, realistically there’s one central theme and that’s time. But there’s other ways you could have twisted it, you told a pretty safe story in my eyes topic wise. Was good but you didn’t really break the mold, rhyming was solid, progression was decent , and like I said I wish you could have dropped this and competed in more weeks because I think you’re dope. Glad I had the privilege of battling you though. You’re an awesome writer and though I feel like this piece maybe could have used some more fine tuning and maybe a final read through/edit would have benefited it but overall I was a fan of it

[Paytience]

Originally Posted by Adverse

Yeah I mean this has nothing to do with this verse. Just because his quoted text mentions a cave and the title mentions allegory doesn’t mean they have anything to do with each other.

I’d read this verse about three times and hadn’t had proper time to feed until now

This was a cool verse I’m sorry you didn’t get to drop it we moved on rather fast last week. Think this is a good topic but almost feel like it has too much going on in it, realistically there’s one central theme and that’s time. But there’s other ways you could have twisted it, you told a pretty safe story in my eyes topic wise. Was good but you didn’t really break the mold, rhyming was solid, progression was decent , and like I said I wish you could have dropped this and competed in more weeks because I think you’re dope. Glad I had the privilege of battling you though. You’re an awesome writer and though I feel like this piece maybe could have used some more fine tuning and maybe a final read through/edit would have benefited it but overall I was a fan of it

You don't know what the "Allegory of the Cave" is, do you? Because these pieces are both conceptually the same thing. I was gonna point out that the technical writing is pretty good in this but that the concept has been done.

To quote:
'Life is like being chained up in a cave, forced to watch shadows flitting against a stone wall'

^^^That is from Plato's Allegory of the cave. You should check it out, even if it's just a summary...it's a good read.

"How to understand the sun by the shadows on the wall?"

[Nigma]

Originally Posted by Paytience

You don't know what the "Allegory of the Cave" is, do you? Because these pieces are both conceptually the same thing. I was gonna point out that the technical writing is pretty good in this but that the concept has been done.

To quote:
'Life is like being chained up in a cave, forced to watch shadows flitting against a stone wall'

^^^That is from Plato's Allegory of the cave. You should check it out, even if it's just a summary...it's a good read.

"How to understand the sun by the shadows on the wall?"

I believe what he's alluding to is how nothing aside from the opening quote has anything whatsoever to do with Allegory of the Cave, so to say both verses are conceptually the same is the most retarded thing I've read in a very long time and I now feel stupider having read it. Thanks for reading one line and claiming overstanding of the verse you useless tit.

Everyone else, thank you, I appreciate ya taking the time to read this.