WEEK TWO: DANK (1-0) vs OBJECTIVE (1-0) DANK WINS 3-0

[Universe]

Lars:

Great beginning. Hooked me in right away. I'm kind of reading through this like... wtf, this is really good... I got to say man... I never thought a verse about cigarettes would be such a breath of fresh air (drum snare and cymbal), but aside from Dominate, this is the only other verse this week that is masterfully constructed from top to bottom. I love how faithful to your multi's you are - Continuing them into the next bar subtlety, where only the most astute eyes can find them. You've always done this, but it's appreciated every time by those who actually look.

I also like how you're almost describing this piece to us from your point of view as you write it. You're in God mode here and you're re-painting the picture and explaining the narrative before our very eyes. "Our wallflower" has a nice ring to it... and I feel like I'm constructing the verse beside you, or at least watching you work. It's actually very cool to experience. You nailed this entire topic; the highlights here are extreme highs, and, to be frank, some of the best lines I've ever seen you write. This is Lars grown up and zoned in... his masterclass... and it's great to see and be a part of.

The question is: Can you stay here? Can you LIVE here? I hope so...

Man I hate saying this... (and you know me well enough to know it's true)... But I wouldn't have beat you here on this topic. I just wouldn't have. It was THAT good. It was a technical marvel really (besides getting a little long-winded at the end there) and you reached a deeper level here than I'm used to seeing from you. Inspiring stuff.

The entire piece was a highlight for me.


Objective:

This was a cool piece, pretty unique for you because it felt kind of like a keystyle, multi's telling the story and you sort of following the path where it led you. When it worked it really worked, and when it didn't... it really didn't. Some things just didn't make all that much sense, but they sounded nice lol. The story sort of jumped around in focus, nothing I could really grasp onto for long, but it was told in such a way where I was at least interested until the end.

I'm a fan of your work, there is always something there that I can't quite put my finger on... maybe it's teetering greatness... but once you harness whatever it is that's inside you and really focus on what makes you YOU, you're going to be a formidable opponent (more than you already are) for anyone.

You just ran into a buzzsaw here.

Vote: Lars