Universe vs Swerve - SWERVE WINS

Answer · 07-09-2021, 07:00 PM

Guess with Swerve everyone gets a turn... You're not enough of a reason to write
You're not known to frequent this site; Who knows where this freak-went to bite

wp is ok but the execution of it could've been better

I drop copious types of open mics, stories & braggadocious-like affairs
This flame's more like a crematorium, he never puts himself out there

ok, wording feels a bit like a dad joke

No Caps crew? I'll stay lower case your bros hear me laugh dude
I'd call you a fag, but your rap name's so gay I don't really have to

lol

General bars galore, like hardware stores every line's an easy chore
There's no basis for that... so having something apply wood leave me floored

i get that this is a hardware scheme but its pieced together a bit sloppily

Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me
How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority

I really like this concept. wording could've been a little harsher but overall this is solid

Got 40 victories yet from what I see no verse is that deadly
Lyrically I'll fly circles around you... but we went over this already...

not really feeling it

No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed
Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail...

eh its okay

Smart money's on me, Pennywise, This vet's a crappy replacement
Now watch him go missin'... No kiddin'... You NEVER had what IT takes bitch...

I get the idea and it's cool conceptually, kinda has a similar wording style to the authority bar, which kind of falls flat. I think it could've been worded with more intent

This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance,
But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents.

i feel like this couldve been a bit stronger if you just omitted the word "actual". it just took longer to hammer the punchline in

Swerve come through your block spraying, bullets hit the air with a thud,
So when you see my barrel go over the falls....they'll run red with your blood.

i like the idea, wording could've hit harder

Bring your broad to the show, kicked him out and concussed her,
He listens...
and Universe'll pictures me plowing his girl to the latest Hollywood Blockbuster.

the picture/pictures difference bugs me. The overall idea was cool, but it needs to be ironed out better

But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest,
Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist.

kinda funny, kinda gross. but overall effective enough

Swerve an artist with the piece, your body explode n be left dead,
Cause when this strap adjusts your back, you won't be able to recommend me in Hens' thread.

The strap double meaning is dated and unless I'm missing something, you're just referring to the same meaning of the word "back" twice. Wording and that is fine, but this one feels like a letdown

I'm a grizzly all star from deep, but in the streets I let the colt sing,
You're not curry -
So when this last minute replacement shoots from range, I'm winning the whole thing.

this is alright. it would've been fire in like 2006 but its a lot of dated ideas without much new to mix it up

If someone thought you would win, they're not seeing you're fickle pest,
Cause that verse did more self damage than the Iranian Missile test.

I think you could've added more to this, which would've taken it up to the next level. but it's still cool as it is

Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts,
Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts.

ok

highlights:

universe -

No Caps crew? I'll stay lower case your bros hear me laugh dude
I'd call you a fag, but your rap name's so gay I don't really have to
Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me
How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority

swerve -
This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance,
But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents.
But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest,
Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist.

overall, I do think it's a close battle. I feel like Universe had fresher concepts and if he had worded them the right way I think he would've ran away with this. I feel like some of swerve's ideas were stale but his overall wording was better and he remained more consistent throughout.

v/ swerve for consistency

Incredible · 07-10-2021, 02:44 AM

Universe:

"Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me
How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority"

Decent

"No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed
Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail..."

Cool here

Overall:

Pennywise was ok too didn't really tie together the best. Some other stuff was a little played like the wood and floored/hardware store. Caps crew was okish. Flow of the verse as a whole was good just not that many punches that landed imo.

Vs.

Swerve:

"Swerve come through your block spraying, bullets hit the air with a thud,
So when you see my barrel go over the falls....they'll run red with your blood."

Cool here

"But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest,
Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist."

Dope

"Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts,
Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts."

I mean you can only cut his head off once. The punch/wordplay made up for it though.

Overall:

Couple hiccups but overall a solid effort here. Solid punches nice wordplay that flowed with bar and didn't make it confusing. Swerve had the better verse.

Vote = Swerve

Mac · 07-10-2021, 10:55 AM

Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me
How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority
No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed
Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail...

vs.

This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance,
But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents.
I'm a grizzly all star from deep, but in the streets I let the colt sing,
You're not curry -
So when this last minute replacement shoots from range, I'm winning the whole thing.
Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts,
Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts.

I got swerve here. Most of the lines by universe lacked sting and were pretty simple.. like the gay or missing line.. if it were 10 lines this would have been much more close, 16too much. Swerve came pretty decent and consistent.. some bland lines too but overall slightly better.. good battle guys, good to see a Universe verse again

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07-09-2021, 07:00 PM	#1
Answer He / Him / His Join Date: Oct 2013 Posts: 1,701 Battle Record: 20-1 Champed - Summer Classic IX - Netcees Battle League - Fight night 15 Rep Power: 14633673	Guess with Swerve everyone gets a turn... You're not enough of a reason to write You're not known to frequent this site; Who knows where this freak-went to bite wp is ok but the execution of it could've been better I drop copious types of open mics, stories & braggadocious-like affairs This flame's more like a crematorium, he never puts himself out there ok, wording feels a bit like a dad joke No Caps crew? I'll stay lower case your bros hear me laugh dude I'd call you a fag, but your rap name's so gay I don't really have to lol General bars galore, like hardware stores every line's an easy chore There's no basis for that... so having something apply wood leave me floored i get that this is a hardware scheme but its pieced together a bit sloppily Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority I really like this concept. wording could've been a little harsher but overall this is solid Got 40 victories yet from what I see no verse is that deadly Lyrically I'll fly circles around you... but we went over this already... not really feeling it No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail... eh its okay Smart money's on me, Pennywise, This vet's a crappy replacement Now watch him go missin'... No kiddin'... You NEVER had what IT takes bitch... I get the idea and it's cool conceptually, kinda has a similar wording style to the authority bar, which kind of falls flat. I think it could've been worded with more intent This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance, But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents. i feel like this couldve been a bit stronger if you just omitted the word "actual". it just took longer to hammer the punchline in Swerve come through your block spraying, bullets hit the air with a thud, So when you see my barrel go over the falls....they'll run red with your blood. i like the idea, wording could've hit harder Bring your broad to the show, kicked him out and concussed her, He listens... and Universe'll pictures me plowing his girl to the latest Hollywood Blockbuster. the picture/pictures difference bugs me. The overall idea was cool, but it needs to be ironed out better But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest, Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist. kinda funny, kinda gross. but overall effective enough Swerve an artist with the piece, your body explode n be left dead, Cause when this strap adjusts your back, you won't be able to recommend me in Hens' thread. The strap double meaning is dated and unless I'm missing something, you're just referring to the same meaning of the word "back" twice. Wording and that is fine, but this one feels like a letdown I'm a grizzly all star from deep, but in the streets I let the colt sing, You're not curry - So when this last minute replacement shoots from range, I'm winning the whole thing. this is alright. it would've been fire in like 2006 but its a lot of dated ideas without much new to mix it up If someone thought you would win, they're not seeing you're fickle pest, Cause that verse did more self damage than the Iranian Missile test. I think you could've added more to this, which would've taken it up to the next level. but it's still cool as it is Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts, Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts. ok highlights: universe - No Caps crew? I'll stay lower case your bros hear me laugh dude I'd call you a fag, but your rap name's so gay I don't really have to Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority swerve - This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance, But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents. But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest, Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist. overall, I do think it's a close battle. I feel like Universe had fresher concepts and if he had worded them the right way I think he would've ran away with this. I feel like some of swerve's ideas were stale but his overall wording was better and he remained more consistent throughout. v/ swerve for consistency

07-10-2021, 02:44 AM	#2
Incredible Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2016 Posts: 1,484 Battle Record: 6-15 Rep Power: 25972895	Universe: "Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority" Decent "No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail..." Cool here Overall: Pennywise was ok too didn't really tie together the best. Some other stuff was a little played like the wood and floored/hardware store. Caps crew was okish. Flow of the verse as a whole was good just not that many punches that landed imo. Vs. Swerve: "Swerve come through your block spraying, bullets hit the air with a thud, So when you see my barrel go over the falls....they'll run red with your blood." Cool here "But that's not true, you dont got one - cause you think boys is the sweetest, Dudes putting more life inside the Universe than a UFO conspiracy theorist." Dope "Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts, Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts." I mean you can only cut his head off once. The punch/wordplay made up for it though. Overall: Couple hiccups but overall a solid effort here. Solid punches nice wordplay that flowed with bar and didn't make it confusing. Swerve had the better verse. Vote = Swerve

07-10-2021, 10:55 AM	#3
Mac Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 480 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 1856622	Long-term plan is Orc you geek, warm up week; You just a whore to me How I know you're not a man? Body cam, I have it on good authority No hall of names for Swerve; I tried to find text that's saved and failed Kinda sketch he has a way with words yet left no paper trail... vs. This isn't the GWL, to pass at this you'll need balance, But you do always write to a theme....trash texter with no actual talents. I'm a grizzly all star from deep, but in the streets I let the colt sing, You're not curry - So when this last minute replacement shoots from range, I'm winning the whole thing. Decapitate with each swing, Swerve have you leaving in parts, Lay this hook on a 'Verse so nasty...it'll get to number on on the charts. I got swerve here. Most of the lines by universe lacked sting and were pretty simple.. like the gay or missing line.. if it were 10 lines this would have been much more close, 16too much. Swerve came pretty decent and consistent.. some bland lines too but overall slightly better.. good battle guys, good to see a Universe verse again