The Old Man

Adverse · 03-24-2021, 02:36 PM

I didn’t really follow the storyline here, but the imagery you presented it all with was great, the first half was my favorite and how you set up the picture was good I just had trouble following the storyline. My favorite piece was

“Enough flow to catch a cold due to the weather
Learned the talk with the stone of Rosetta
Stay cloaked with drinks coated in Amaretto
Shambled on the rocks built from a pebble.
Mind on a swivel with a bad fashion sense
Exaggerated action within the passive tense
Passing hits in this joint at this point lacks it's ends
Bluntly immaculate so enjoy then crash in 10.”

Keep writing man

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03-24-2021, 02:36 PM	#2
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	I didn’t really follow the storyline here, but the imagery you presented it all with was great, the first half was my favorite and how you set up the picture was good I just had trouble following the storyline. My favorite piece was “Enough flow to catch a cold due to the weather Learned the talk with the stone of Rosetta Stay cloaked with drinks coated in Amaretto Shambled on the rocks built from a pebble. Mind on a swivel with a bad fashion sense Exaggerated action within the passive tense Passing hits in this joint at this point lacks it's ends Bluntly immaculate so enjoy then crash in 10.” Keep writing man