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Man, as a rational animal, chose to survey
holding the flame of ingenuity in his smouldering gaze. ^Your imagery and language is dope as always, but this stood out to me. Dope way to start off a piece. Pretty dark and deep take on what I understand to be the arrival of present time and the technology and how we use it, where we stand today in the midst of it all. Having gone through so many development stages only to reach the worst corner of the universe with applications in hand is a dark view to have, definitely understand where it's coming from tho. How it dehumanizes us thus wrapping it back up towards the end with the "flame of ingenuiity" in your intro. Can't tell if I think this is boomer-talk or not but I definitely enjoyed the read, great vocab and rhythm to it all. Solid stuff.
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