06-13-2013, 10:34 PM | #1 |
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8 Topicaldood5 vs. 5 IamBenT [Topicaldood5 ADVANCES VIA NO SHOW]
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Verses are due SUNDAY 6/17 at 11:59 PST. Extensions are due MONDAY 6/18 at 11:59 PST. You must vote on EVERY OTHER battle available... I am much less lenient on this rule then Keith, so please vote. While there's no absolute criteria for voting, 1 line votes and criminally underdeveloped ones won't be allowed. I will holler via private message if I think a vote of yours isn't up to snuff and you'll be allowed to develop it, as long as you do it within the deadline. At a minimum, you should aim to include what you liked and what you didn't like (if anything) about each verse as well as an explanation towards why you thought one verse was better than the other. There is NO RECYCLING.BITING.GHOSTWRITING. Voting ends THURSDAY 6/21 at 11:59 PST.(Unless otherwise it may be extended another day at the most.) You MUSTcheck in. NOTE: Swaying, excessive freeposting, voter fraud etc. are grounds for vote deductions at discretion of the moderators. Editing your verse after the grace period, after your opponent posts, or after the first vote (especially this)- as well as biting- are grounds for disqualification at discretion of the moderators. TOPIC: "Turn Off Your Mind, Relax And Float Down Stream" G/L @IamBenT @TopicalDood5
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06-14-2013, 12:18 PM | #2 |
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06-15-2013, 12:57 AM | #3 |
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ok i really want to write this time and kill you
so hopefully i do |
06-16-2013, 11:21 PM | #4 |
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ext if you will kind sir.. ik its a little late to ask
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06-18-2013, 01:14 AM | #5 |
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Don't Blink
At this point the ancient terminus is rusted and worn Where conductors have ushered hundreds of bustling hordes Running, feet stomping like thunderous storms, people hustle aboard So packed you couldn't bring another speck of dust on the tour But there's nothing - just you and yourself at Station One & the sky's sallow glow as shadows grow beneath the fading sun Your face is numb, & your mind, you're powerless to control Focused on the billowing smoke and the towering commodes It's souring your soul, you've only heard stories and seen relatives That return, and seem as they've been treated with dream desiccants You breath, negligent to the bells and the large light approaching The silhouette on horizon reminds you how hard life is becoming The desolate silence is numbing, you retreat deeper in thought Uncontrollably sink into a dreamscape until your hopelessly lost This is the place, you remember it, it's perpetual excellence Only this time this place is even more dressed up in decadence So special, the scent of it, the smiling faces and shining sun You'll see every single tooth before the time is done The vibrant sun, the arctic chill, whichever you recall is stronger You take a seat to stay, stay just a little while longer Denial conjures strange illusions, the clocks have frozen in place You'll stay forever in this apartment or this rosy estate Worries floating away, and one last time a toast to freedom Your senses dull and then you laugh as if you're s'posed to need em Perfect hues in glowing sequence, in a dress she flips her hair It was always your favorite color, that sexy, golden mare Over there, the perfect place - you'll bring it with you 'till your dead And then a bell, and then a whistle, and SMASH you've hit your head Dizzy and jolted back to the present, a disasters presented In passive aggressive.... Daydreaming, forgetting you've hopped in your cab That's bringing you somewhere impossibly fast You glance at the window - totally unseemly and strange Did you miss your stop? While you were daydreaming away? |
06-18-2013, 08:56 AM | #6 |
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Topical Advances Asshole bro. I'm jealous you advanced and you no show??
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